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155220 發表於 2006-4-13 05:17 PM

小弟的..............”傑作"意見收集區

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由於今次是小弟第一次作一些比較長篇的小說，因此希望得到大家寶貴的意見，多謝．

CHECSS 發表於 2006-4-13 07:06 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]155220[/i] at 2006/4/13 17:17:
[url]http://www.26fun.com/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=109868&fpage=1[/url]
由於今次是小弟第一次作一些比較長篇的小說，因此希望得到大家寶貴的意見，多謝． [/quote]
too short , 內容過分簡單 , 47分 :good:

155220 發表於 2006-4-13 07:08 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]CHECSS[/i] at 2006-4-13 19:06:

too short , 內容過分簡單 , 47分 :good: [/quote]

可以點改善？

CHECSS 發表於 2006-4-13 07:18 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]155220[/i] at 2006/4/13 19:08:


可以點改善？ [/quote]
long d , 內容多d , 複雜 d :good:

155220 發表於 2006-4-13 07:18 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]CHECSS[/i] at 2006-4-13 19:18:

long d , 內容多d , 複雜 d :good: [/quote]

每一章寫幾多字好？

CHECSS 發表於 2006-4-13 07:23 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]155220[/i] at 2006/4/13 19:18:


每一章寫幾多字好？ [/quote]
about this at least :
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155220 發表於 2006-4-13 07:23 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]CHECSS[/i] at 2006-4-13 19:23:

about this at least :
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咁寫幾多章好？

CHECSS 發表於 2006-4-13 07:24 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]155220[/i] at 2006/4/13 19:23:


咁寫幾多章好？ [/quote]
don't mind this :sleep:

CHECSS 發表於 2006-4-13 07:24 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]CHECSS[/i] at 2006/4/13 19:24:

don't mind this :sleep: [/quote]
just you like :good:

yorker 發表於 2006-4-14 09:06 AM

歷史故事好難寫得好架~
因為個結局通常都已經有左規限~

155220 發表於 2006-4-14 09:10 AM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]yorker[/i] at 2006-4-14 09:06:
歷史故事好難寫得好架~
因為個結局通常都已經有左規限~ [/quote]

咁應該跟幾多成好？

beginner 發表於 2006-4-14 04:05 PM

講真﹐睇完都無咩墮入感

155220 發表於 2006-4-14 04:22 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]beginner[/i] at 2006-4-14 16:05:
講真﹐睇完都無咩墮入感 [/quote]

咁可以點改善？

CHECSS 發表於 2006-4-14 07:14 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]155220[/i] at 2006/4/14 09:10:


咁應該跟幾多成好？ [/quote]
no mind , but the ending should be the same with history :good:

CHECSS 發表於 2006-4-14 07:15 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]beginner[/i] at 2006/4/14 16:05:
講真﹐睇完都無咩墮入感 [/quote]
:good::good::good::clap::clap::clap::agree::agree::agree:

155220 發表於 2006-4-14 08:18 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]CHECSS[/i] at 2006-4-14 19:14:

no mind , but the ending should be the same with history :good: [/quote]

中途天馬行空都唔緊要？

yorker 發表於 2006-4-14 10:09 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]155220[/i] at 2006-4-14 08:18 PM:


中途天馬行空都唔緊要？ [/quote]

反正小說都係老作ge姐，天馬行空絕對唔緊要啦，
但問題係唔可以過份誇張囉~

同埋有高潮起伏都好重要~ 你個故事太「平鋪直述」喇~
&  d角色好似都入唔到個故事入面~

155220 發表於 2006-4-14 10:13 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]yorker[/i] at 2006-4-14 22:09:


反正小說都係老作ge姐，天馬行空... [/quote]

因為今次係小弟既第一次，加上小弟既中文水平真係一般，所以........:haha::haha::haha:

我再寫幾章，然後你再幫我睇下，ok?

155220 發表於 2006-4-17 02:27 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]yorker[/i] at 2006-4-14 22:09:


反正小說都係老作ge姐，天馬行空... [/quote]

可以點高潮起伏法？

CHECSS 發表於 2006-4-17 04:06 PM

[quote]Originally posted by [i]155220[/i] at 2006/4/17 14:27:


可以點高潮起伏法？ [/quote]
see see
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