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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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* k4 N/ h. T+ ^0 S. Wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 _: O8 O5 @/ c. u! leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( s8 q+ H% j# M- Q4 K4 f1 p
( P7 X1 x6 Q% f' ^. V2 x+ x- ZLet me just rewrite yours:
: X) s7 D6 \ R' g0 ^/ OIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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G& u2 H0 {" j: V9 n1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ f) e& K0 t2 M m, A' H, ^
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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( e8 H3 } P6 oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.6 ?0 A4 `+ S9 E* q) x
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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