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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! ^, t+ a3 ~) [% o( N0 U/ P
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) S H. w- u" z" z& H
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ h& _6 f6 W7 F) j8 F; f8 v
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Let me just rewrite yours:2 B/ x+ R: ~* R+ P$ p/ q6 D% \
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, ]+ ]2 n' W% Q
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 b8 @9 `# l; r) j% r0 }6 d
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; f# o7 W4 X. G- W2 J5 V+ ]
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.) w( r6 w" H' w; y* v
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