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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 |9 A. Z+ V/ U) k5 V1 g
6 l8 s0 m6 G% _, S" A9 zit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 \ O. D6 l" o. Z% g/ D- H# X* {
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + q" W. `$ I6 n% Z, l `; H) c
* u; O; p7 V0 b d2 [Let me just rewrite yours:
6 B: L$ Z0 j s) x& ?5 n7 d* {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
. ]( o/ z$ x5 [2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" @. w7 E& j% kThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) W( R9 |0 S" j. {
( T8 f. a4 p- GThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.& A# |: Y+ S0 K& |5 l
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