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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 k4 w. k' n- s2 }2 Z+ Q- Y( P
0 Z8 [, a. T+ wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : J5 z$ Y. T% ~$ ?+ m- e; e
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 s+ v( d8 m% y! L
$ B9 a( C7 ^# ]' i4 v9 h& r* sLet me just rewrite yours:
) J. [7 n; }+ `# @3 D- X4 PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' A5 P. M0 H2 J, D9 A2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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2 s' E4 k5 F1 v- R8 q* E3 [There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., F9 x4 Y) |4 i' e- r, V7 ~
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