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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( J% \$ y. m2 E0 f5 D+ a, x
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : o+ i' t8 K' `- \; Z
; o' R5 v" N7 C% G8 F8 ALet me just rewrite yours:
+ j+ A) U( H/ `; I( ]6 ]It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me% h* S( _% W+ n
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( M9 s5 t, @8 }) s" T! k2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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J$ }' V: P& A% C) n- q8 k6 h# YThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 ?! r& [& Q d
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 w& u! f0 D, _2 |# g# c* N
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