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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# A+ m* a5 W8 a* D6 F3 [1 B
4 c. `8 n9 d( ~; b* _it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ T0 `/ {. o# Y* K0 K# {* e
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 {! r9 N% U! M/ v: ?' W. s i8 s
, o' a J6 w$ T5 C) vLet me just rewrite yours:
# ^* F* |& }/ \2 \. BIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) U' v1 d+ v+ D6 Y" Y
3 u$ ~/ K6 d+ c. W( [$ h1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 V& u5 F; ?% q- j1 a) f; a2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 e4 L) f( y( v$ F/ Z6 n) K
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.( s$ S) S L2 ^( L) V @* O
$ v, ^9 ~) W6 t- s1 yThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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