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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 p& N0 @) c+ m" H6 x: m: |% R
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 y) d( F" T$ x' m: e
' Z2 L9 M, F# W2 ?& o! e7 S1 vLet me just rewrite yours:
" M: r7 @' {( [: o/ [) X! lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: g* p# s: E, U0 N6 Q. P; x9 r2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.: z9 ?% Z2 o- _* Q! H+ F! a8 I
" x% S% @& o7 ]0 S6 mThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.- k/ f1 q$ g0 B" [
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., X3 t7 p& F6 M% r# D' N ^ F
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