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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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( N6 t3 r4 d) q( j! ]2 {it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 a# L" b4 X: O1 }# e
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; ?& z; e( _. B
3 H+ V3 n* J+ x9 A, fLet me just rewrite yours:
: \4 \' J9 [' |4 a1 D5 uIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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. @" v* a7 E8 d" U. w9 h1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 }# E* e, m9 w' q- Z2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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; y0 B {5 _6 x1 zThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.0 q5 S& x2 n( c& P: p
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