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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 [$ l y2 W8 Q0 A5 ^
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " G/ a* D9 e$ r, l5 f
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Let me just rewrite yours:
, r$ g% e( W; z4 d0 ?% LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: A- g9 k3 S1 Z2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ J: ~$ V9 ^) d9 i
9 X E @+ x% F9 J, D* ^Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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