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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ {' ^" E& |8 u+ Z7 p0 F8 ueveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) A/ I" O0 J8 J. \1 G, f
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Let me just rewrite yours:
s* Y, N2 r$ E8 pIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me+ d8 {& Y: ` e' F, w0 X
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; R7 }8 S- I9 L+ L
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.& e$ D) G6 \1 I, Y* e8 R; c% Y" L
8 c6 `+ ^# g9 q f8 ^7 ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; F! \" g) v6 l5 \
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