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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and v, ?- r5 Q7 T4 X% p* ^
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ p1 m# k7 P! z, F/ \$ ^2 ]) a2 M% a5 G
Let me just rewrite yours:
0 m- C' A4 F' c6 n( J Y- P, T5 UIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# X6 x. H& h9 D7 v0 Q, l
8 P7 n0 V! P$ ~/ B" B) [1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 e1 Z, ]: n# w. j6 R
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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9 i8 U3 i- I* c9 K+ MThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., e9 `2 d6 d# f6 p" u1 U0 v
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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