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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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- _5 P: \( l U) J( {6 a7 } tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
, U5 a5 h" Z9 q8 m) T9 leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + e! s2 c8 D9 u# c2 s/ r
# \( K9 V& T. Z. xLet me just rewrite yours:
6 p- [ F. e' YIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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3 t$ z" B# @% `6 D* ^9 m: a1 b1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# Z% V1 Y% T' y" N) }2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' D v( J+ p A% u7 IThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.6 k0 \7 R+ J$ B( R: f+ f0 n; S
# ]- w! i& F- ~4 ` w2 RThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 [* G4 V* a4 }3 e1 V$ ^
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