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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 ?; l9 ~, f6 R
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# ^" X* e- t& Eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , Z' D1 ^( |4 x( _- l% F5 N( Z
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Let me just rewrite yours:
7 t3 E5 h% F/ T/ x2 m5 KIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me4 Y4 M- W7 [, i3 S& `
* Y- |- g0 R8 E, d* f: l1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# b7 g J3 q$ L( p+ d2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 ?8 ~4 ?$ u* `% U/ X
( [& W8 i/ s$ B9 \8 wThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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