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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # h# G9 Z2 b+ T; Y5 U
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / l, \5 l/ t/ ] O8 E; }, w( k
% L9 \ D- k9 [* l3 ]1 d" H( nLet me just rewrite yours:
, y: \5 m/ k1 W, KIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! U ~8 y% x( |0 e2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 i$ x A2 Q/ n1 |4 ^- D R
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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