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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:7 [- A2 u ~- U' r
4 ~! }9 Q( D* T2 [it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 o/ s4 @1 @, {9 t+ I1 meveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " j+ d; k# A% g
" ]& i: ~( x0 yLet me just rewrite yours:
! ]' P8 e: O+ V8 @( ^It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% Q2 l: }" F. R: h' \9 c% E0 B
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" m: K; W" y, e+ T, ZThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ `2 ~5 Z' N! H# \8 ]- K0 E9 F
4 s* B1 x, b, c. MThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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