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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 R. E/ L' H& [# ?$ \; D
$ f, V# J# @8 I% r* g2 ]it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : K1 i0 T; r2 b4 B
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " f# Y4 q; c+ O7 H
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Let me just rewrite yours:
2 P2 J3 v' \/ WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me s( s2 V5 Q% W9 C4 r" h8 c/ A
/ w# J1 N# A/ B! `3 E/ u1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ m; g: Z$ e& b; N* h
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* w6 k1 I! @/ O5 E, E( _$ O. W6 B* _$ A
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 V$ A+ I6 E$ j+ _0 W
5 J o; X; J# v: tThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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