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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 n$ D; r) W ]it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 n0 j* }2 e8 p- u, Neveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 U: ]# w( S( n6 n {, i
0 S. V4 Q/ o- d/ ^+ M' P2 \Let me just rewrite yours:
! I) U4 y1 ^8 g- P a1 }2 ?4 K8 eIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 r4 P$ n) j) T( R: b9 z
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 e" ?* l! [3 e# x/ l8 D
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* \9 V% D; ^ ~9 y; G5 T
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., y" D( C0 ?6 ^& n
1 f% e4 m' j, I" sThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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