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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:" | x, z7 T8 y6 D& O! i$ t
( w4 K1 a: ~6 f) b! G2 h" Hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. Z5 b5 H; F! V' `5 }everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 X7 l6 G1 ]$ f4 m$ h
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Let me just rewrite yours:
) m/ V2 X. X: hIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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/ { J* u0 u9 c8 K1 x1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( A' [6 }1 I% E. h7 ?
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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. i+ h Z* |1 I! N9 \5 r& D. p+ r! V7 ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 e' r6 J+ b) S* [" A1 C
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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