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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 A! I; p( B4 ~& q" }1 Keveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( |( T4 U, x7 z* u( \
9 m" n. U. L0 s8 K% F* f( ELet me just rewrite yours:
) N$ T% S+ g- J# q; i2 F! ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- V& _' h6 v7 Y" ]. t
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' ?' I$ _" x* p- w* h! N7 {( L- B4 |There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% H$ l8 E" ?6 g
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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