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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 B: ~$ h2 J5 Y8 e* Zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 }2 G% u p, M) R+ l: b# l! _3 i3 t
' L8 L2 ^8 e7 R' x: _6 RLet me just rewrite yours:
2 L7 e( y8 ~+ ^: p: c5 B/ Y: VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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4 V7 D. K; c, p5 s1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, V; K2 P# [" K2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 E0 G6 W& j3 ^% j" M. V Z
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.( A9 \" M5 W Y; \
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 d' |/ T3 N L, ^% l
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