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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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4 E4 V2 U* J0 m6 n( t m3 [4 Cit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * ?& d7 g" X! R2 d. d* @# ^6 {4 F
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 m, `$ c1 L0 p
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Let me just rewrite yours:
1 a p; ]( P+ o! @5 ?% VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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- J# b7 [5 u( X: M' D7 X" @1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
2 i$ k5 k) V$ V2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.! d% k ?! ]1 j. g' {8 I& Z$ [
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