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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 H6 V% R7 Y# o8 I6 rit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 H3 b# m1 k: R
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + k* t$ C% U4 V7 _$ c4 p, m
7 G) s" ]; C+ C$ mLet me just rewrite yours:
& z" f; q4 \1 {* S3 U# HIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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b6 g) l. ^& V$ k, U# z4 V3 h1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: u8 D5 B* O& M# y2 S& F
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.9 v, [4 q3 E$ V
9 R4 F- d/ V3 y; E0 ^/ K. AThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; A m2 r3 P1 d1 Y" c2 X% TThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.1 R! H" S1 _- H# B
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