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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:) q1 K! e" v+ c/ W+ J
& r' ?! Z: ~; K% w, Oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ! e/ U `/ f$ ]; y& @4 i" e* x* i$ c
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 E6 w. Z2 D- I; o4 l4 [4 R" A( T3 c8 @, j. k7 A2 g* r0 l2 k
Let me just rewrite yours:
) y+ S! G. Y2 w1 t8 v- F2 o# [It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' e$ I1 s6 [9 x5 H- R
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; W E% r' i4 F1 ?; a2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) e( j$ J$ B( d2 s! \5 w6 y" m
7 P0 h d4 h7 V) F8 ~' GThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) g [4 `/ Q' w1 ? w6 n/ b Q" \ L
/ z) j) \8 ~% p5 y3 w- w8 B( q5 S- aThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ ]$ P) b! s" U9 b
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