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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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$ e: A2 E( _4 |8 C B+ ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 Z: z. U* \ u2 k9 I! I: `
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # V5 U7 f- l) i3 {) R
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Let me just rewrite yours:
" }5 G. ^* L6 x* ?* z( q, oIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me6 b6 t, [# c, j1 x" n% \3 v/ }
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, B, G/ B x4 F! A
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ G9 k% y" n1 I- F% F
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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