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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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( _ ?$ _& |: \1 {8 uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 4 p d1 C& \" v# ^& b( k* |
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 W: k7 U3 }( @; N
& n0 y- Z F. ~7 f- Y3 wLet me just rewrite yours:
5 ?6 {( r$ n& z0 E0 _* hIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* ]" r7 l: G0 z8 N3 e( n* a/ U/ m" S
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! c9 c2 }2 b, b8 S4 F7 _0 h2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 G" H( v: X4 \, f
. ]- f6 B( D( z" EThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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