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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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) `" `' [$ u' A! Q/ O8 r4 uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; l' _/ e7 I$ x; H% `everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % C* [7 M& }# e, ~1 A7 L+ f4 I Q9 ]0 g" E" x" d! A( p) C- Y
Let me just rewrite yours:
/ J, P7 x W0 X7 c6 t2 b% lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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4 R% z0 e# B! c& v1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& @0 ~" a; ~4 T0 m% Q2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.& K, G% x0 @! i- h4 ^3 k8 d
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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