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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' `. [+ ^# f2 T1 P
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 _) e: `6 P8 F. s0 |1 s! ]: B% `/ P2 o7 V
Let me just rewrite yours:
; G1 r% k# G+ {; h" VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" s" Y9 W. t& W# z2 T2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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0 {) |! M/ n) u+ @. P; wThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 x/ M1 p9 F$ S* J, X0 i
7 {9 J* s- p vThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.) F) q5 c! C9 q) Z# [
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