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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- @& i/ Q6 \% k1 S! N' B
- S' h5 ]8 T4 R' Z/ U, F* Iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 w0 c) i/ I+ m; X
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 @, C' m0 ^) i5 ^
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Let me just rewrite yours:
3 l) T: n, A9 r& |, t$ x, D( @+ kIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ @) b/ V, h$ d9 v5 E
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
1 A$ M: M! \+ z, |& ]$ }2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 w$ ]( {% i7 i( @7 D
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( |: H& C) J" Y- I% \
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