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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 ], i3 Q9 p! m
3 `+ |3 J" {$ c' L+ b% c; ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% ?4 N6 M! L( h" O$ q9 f# Q( N/ _everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 G& n- p' h2 h9 r) v4 `" I( \# g/ B/ g" S% Y* I$ d9 g# K
Let me just rewrite yours:
0 L$ N/ }' P3 X" }. v( I% T6 {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me& |4 |. Z" [6 A
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; X+ o3 E7 m# s# V; {# v
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# q k. c/ a' x" F- R; _3 u
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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