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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 c$ Q1 L+ q1 r$ l5 V) w% b! N
6 o; e4 A" Y. |; C$ I4 f+ vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ L2 h' g. e4 B" b) U, Q: _5 H+ B- yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 X- `$ L5 e4 @+ i Z0 K
9 o9 X5 h/ h; O5 OLet me just rewrite yours:
# u, ?2 u V0 f1 @7 A. GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 r5 v* {+ Q* i" [3 o" @/ t2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.: N ~& j' J5 y* s: [0 h
, v! ?6 g" ~$ [1 [5 t( m/ ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 B' {% {. r+ O1 A( r* G
1 x% u$ `8 }/ U& t$ K: L9 |Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., R w8 [! Q' k9 ]8 v
, ~6 N; l r9 D5 G" f4 e( t% zGretz. |
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