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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; F# m) k, M5 l& X, M" [
; p$ Y* L: b+ Y" Q0 ], k- Iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & E+ i# ^5 O% @+ ]7 r& z3 M, L n$ ^9 s
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * ~! j9 r# U$ D; k$ Y
% H. ?5 Z F4 k6 d9 ?) _+ Z* s7 D, BLet me just rewrite yours:
! z# o9 f: y) D6 mIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: E" I$ ^+ R$ T- T$ W9 T
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 k8 |" v7 ]& B0 o# [5 ]' L
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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