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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 B* L+ l) c8 Y5 D: B# M q, a) K
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! y$ y, f9 v; |7 T1 A7 Qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 w j( q1 Y% q+ U& e. C- B5 j! [. u: c, k- l- g
Let me just rewrite yours:
. [7 t- J9 u0 f, r, \/ wIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, r' M3 ^% f; g1 H" v$ }) z
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
0 `1 s0 c) w( ~: g2 g8 g; H5 C2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; n m" A" F' J3 l% @ ?# U
) {( g: I, {5 b( wThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( m/ ^9 j$ f; t; X0 i" a
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