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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:* R( O% q; I+ G. l& v
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 8 Z5 F$ |/ h3 A' b2 p7 r& p8 D
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) z/ k9 N6 T+ K0 v7 G6 x% R
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Let me just rewrite yours:
$ ?3 B( A, V0 M M0 b. {: j f7 kIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, G) d j! I0 [$ Z5 I; Z7 ~
" B& `% Z5 x0 c |* X) B: _1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- u* B- n6 c, y' D. ~2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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/ ^8 @9 a4 p8 A3 gThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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3 f3 V1 a: b- v; L" C) h/ dThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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