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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:3 F8 x0 F$ S. t) K- d( K
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! g1 l1 [, R1 b7 M( q1 {, beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( n: t9 w) Z1 q) p" I
% n g& O2 O) r$ {. v- S9 xLet me just rewrite yours:
/ n9 D( t: ?6 tIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- W) w6 i4 a+ q+ E0 U# J
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
2 p, ~( |, @7 A: I( o& u3 r2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 c. ~+ C: ]- ^3 [
7 h4 c) i& O% r( @7 G4 _! R1 [1 hThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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