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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 J [& B2 B( d
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 z$ R; s. \7 M" k# Y3 V T6 v1 Leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( i) N Z, j' r q( i
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Let me just rewrite yours:
" y6 a9 ~5 ]' t' }# o, cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 x, o& C* ^* p/ f9 ]5 _ y5 {
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# G& u' O: A: u; ]' X( D% C' W
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 d8 ]; U0 [4 f$ e- i( { {
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; T' e) {! e; v' l* FThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( N3 l; u; v9 @; I' `6 M
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