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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% E) g+ x7 t4 ^+ [
" J, Q" ]: x' ?; j- F6 p1 w. {it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
9 @ s3 m0 V: A5 }4 Neveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ G: V1 H, H, y ~) C7 C2 ^3 z% A; v+ ]9 }8 [4 V
Let me just rewrite yours:
$ i O! I }& o8 E' QIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' \' e% R: r2 x; S
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
/ x3 ]7 k- e2 L/ o H2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; g# H" `* z1 ?/ [) {1 D
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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