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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 W4 ^& Q5 H& ~! h5 e. M/ Y
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" x; f5 \$ f& Eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' _! z5 ]& q( c9 K7 f2 q: V# T( C5 `! V$ A
Let me just rewrite yours:
! P( L. \7 ^8 W1 `! }! _) d* wIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! a) l, K# Y7 C% g9 I* m2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ J, @( x% F( ~/ P9 {3 [
1 [5 D# M, H" qThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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