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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ m! ?) a$ d5 `2 b6 r+ Feveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 w5 K8 w# x0 g" x
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Let me just rewrite yours:
2 @# g3 o# {* I; n1 G/ zIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me! |- `3 I2 n& c( t, w/ H4 }0 Z
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
t# R7 T. L: ` Z. W! E: }: w2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.6 }2 r2 i( N) x9 T, u; `
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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) i0 g- O) r1 zThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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