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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# \. ^. ~ o5 X: T( r2 jit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , `: j7 }# V( E8 E
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 Z- }( g/ _; g+ K3 L6 F
9 F# J: Y3 c- f/ Y* d7 \# | P) MLet me just rewrite yours:
8 Y8 d6 g: A% v: D+ K; CIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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' [4 Z" |4 B3 o1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( S G7 V8 u, Z/ n+ a! t2 x4 l! q
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." ? E8 H. Z4 F( e$ L1 `' G
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