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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# ^* h# t/ L' Z6 R% X/ p/ b3 A6 hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' G5 R% C: L; p! P
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 @1 H; v) Y* y
0 I$ A1 x* X( O, {. h+ b/ ]& WLet me just rewrite yours:: e" G6 a/ W3 p J
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 `$ _" b0 J& D/ M0 m# ?# a- C c
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!" {6 j* W) S( }2 o2 i$ {$ w
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.8 [2 U/ O, D1 }& E
. J1 @& E2 P6 a# n/ QThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: a s; C. o4 M% e. Y7 c
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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