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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 e& |) F) @* O5 `1 e% ?1 k ~
0 s3 W( y/ p2 F' _6 S) J: ?* _it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 4 | P* E5 F' J; H! ]+ M3 c, W
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " X" r! {8 h7 n/ j# O6 z2 B
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Let me just rewrite yours:1 `1 J5 O6 K& ^5 \; E b
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1 X2 Z! U1 w3 i1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 Y/ L& r% h! y6 t8 Y) s
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% ]* g: a& R7 g h! X3 E( V, g
0 d0 f! e$ ?! o9 z- L. z( WThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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