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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; x$ [$ t' S% v \4 }4 o
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! X2 |5 w7 y0 {everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " U. r! _3 s" v) {2 {+ b
. h, n* N$ s) p" R# [1 \* jLet me just rewrite yours:
9 `, b. d( c# D5 P8 j9 J2 s+ V8 xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 T- w# e P. F6 ~# A& `. |
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! K! F4 w- l6 o' ~1 \8 y8 Y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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, l9 `) m& j6 t" B) XThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) {! V- T& y8 B0 d3 T( d) y
- E# K) ~5 f. T6 N3 cThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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