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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:+ i9 R7 K( L7 O: e
/ i+ c3 l- l! R8 @/ f% R0 eit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
- i% K8 C6 d3 C3 x$ ~. Peveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 x0 ~! f7 X8 r, z3 I D; l8 j! s( Q
. D# q" m( V8 R8 J( r. nLet me just rewrite yours:
9 a* G6 Y4 E9 Y, W! D" aIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# C% V8 v6 R% [5 V+ }, @
2 X! `4 U. W3 d% z1 p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# ^7 ?! f- V7 j& ]. H) u7 S: c0 Q
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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" }2 A* D) _9 eThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ f: O8 P; O: `! `
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