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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* i% f5 ?6 @6 Y! @1 weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + r% I- D, ]( W2 a) f- ~. m3 K- {$ Q
Let me just rewrite yours:
+ B+ M# n* v0 k, c! E0 y4 {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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& F9 K' U! r+ j- v1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- V+ y% e- h+ e/ j2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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! y* ?, B: c' S7 d! W- lThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.& l9 R9 A. u! T( c f0 A. h
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