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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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_4 _! R# c3 o. cit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : E* ]6 l" u# U8 _7 z3 C, r( |
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , Q$ ~9 X# L B# S. O- h" Q
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Let me just rewrite yours:
2 b m7 s) ?, VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# ~1 P$ E! v& j; D2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ @6 \4 C g4 D
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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6 O w! q- s; g4 kThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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