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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:$ s) e# q6 a7 S% Y
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: ?) r% m. D9 l$ N# aeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 V+ ~2 i t5 R' H! o" }. n. v
Let me just rewrite yours:
5 p1 V# e( |& G2 j7 tIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me7 I% s6 m+ t) {6 h
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( X* i& M4 R+ M; L
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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! k* y0 p+ L7 d, R' F6 J# C* @There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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( |% `1 D2 f$ j! `3 RThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ F# T% D5 ?/ x( I
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