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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:' s- ?- o3 S4 I3 @, }0 s
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and % f! Q$ i- X9 {& u4 J
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * g! u( b" w+ J6 f% f' v5 f# S+ ?" Y1 i, O
Let me just rewrite yours:
+ {1 s. j' E$ g# D3 b6 `$ GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me! K; \+ J& Z+ i6 t* @3 s
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 W/ [3 y( A" P j
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 {: i& `+ M2 y& z6 u; @6 G/ m
* m4 K, M. p- A8 C- ~There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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