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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:( B' d/ R" b+ P3 ]7 {
- T2 l4 X4 u) i0 E: G, {8 [it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 8 t4 z1 `9 |) E
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , y6 o8 U1 a3 O4 X
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Let me just rewrite yours:
: a$ K" S) U; q1 PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me+ f6 S+ m) t3 H6 o2 H
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; _" H# _+ h( ^- ^$ r8 Y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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! d0 j+ B C* o1 MThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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( H0 \6 f! x$ e8 V, @2 Q7 dThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% T. { r5 t; x- N& X( B
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