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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 E- q2 N- b9 r9 L4 |9 z9 d6 q5 W( q2 Q; q
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ Y* m+ u. h. p1 \0 X" Y) g B
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; V' v6 {; ]$ R
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Let me just rewrite yours:
9 K0 ~# X7 t# y- tIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
. R9 b" O3 Z9 a: v; K) l2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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6 ? [9 |" r- c" ^( l/ ~2 rThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.& A+ O* k# K- _+ ?# I5 X
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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