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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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0 K9 e7 o2 b" G" ^1 i# e/ @it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : t% d5 R0 s' H
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " e8 F' g6 L6 N) \/ U% X
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Let me just rewrite yours:5 Y+ ^: ~. K# g4 T; \ m0 z
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& p) e8 I" G3 V) T+ X- M9 i2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 L. D7 w' S# s: |
* _3 t. \( A- hThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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