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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:+ B1 v, j' S C
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * R5 i0 k' x [. K0 g" Z1 r g
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. J" I0 x3 p/ |1 R9 ^. e8 }) F- ]
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Let me just rewrite yours:/ I {1 x+ t4 W& F% Y, V
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me+ `. M0 k0 m, V8 g/ J
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! J. b+ o1 A8 F8 {/ U1 Q5 i2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., f* h( N) J2 D) N6 @# P* t
6 k ]+ p: w9 P& y. A7 ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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: K5 `) r! P9 Q2 U r. V; wThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., [$ H+ P, Y& B" t+ @8 i7 Z
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