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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and [- A& k/ h% Q( F2 X
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : \- `3 a6 l( ?/ {. N/ ^3 Y
) O: Z9 U7 q8 g% j1 v; U4 HLet me just rewrite yours:
$ h1 _/ ^/ a* s2 Q7 ?$ R5 LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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, J6 m! H/ O" |: ~) q) P1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 Y3 {: } m0 ~ y" G: g# H
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( z( a# ~4 B" g/ L! A5 v# T
" @, L, w8 r$ x7 R+ y g* b; aThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 l& [1 h6 Q% u# m. o
/ M9 ]$ s: [1 ]7 @% W! [Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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