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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 a5 U% H+ H5 ^0 K* `7 ` @: E
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# x# J% m: Z8 p9 _/ reveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 }$ r* E# s: ]8 x: ~. q
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Let me just rewrite yours:
7 Z+ q6 |% w1 @) fIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* {9 l) W v8 q9 _5 m2 f
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 R w- K" X; Y# t! U
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 p0 \# D/ g/ s O9 b4 _, j1 R
* g6 |8 f$ w; KThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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) y1 f( Z( ~$ D8 A+ e7 I- i0 _Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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