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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
, h/ p0 s) X& y2 _4 `everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : w- E% x5 S. Q+ _1 z
6 Y$ }0 ^5 ]/ {) WLet me just rewrite yours:
" {1 S, R# v; _' q4 IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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8 C! U4 K9 }2 W1 O j2 x1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% O" _+ F* W3 s$ ^& C& {0 L% I
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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3 _; X/ T' U1 N7 Y+ l) R( EThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." f- ~9 {, c& X" i. Z
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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