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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 `: N5 x% n4 b$ G* T: Z1 x# j7 H
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 w1 a5 t V3 y: m% o+ Y) ?everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 z: T# k1 Y2 h5 f7 Y* F; Z: Z* s+ g. i6 W
Let me just rewrite yours:1 z7 \& X6 {3 E0 [7 G
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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5 t# J2 e/ S1 o. z# \0 A, O6 P1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 b4 T' D$ q0 G L
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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9 d+ A0 u" v' t3 T8 {There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., `3 F) V1 {+ Q3 d3 W& P
* X+ N. n$ b7 q0 mThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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