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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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5 n1 l5 U N3 e* l9 C5 [1 ait doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# \6 S, p( e9 e. Xeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & h; Z& b$ g& }% _1 M2 ?4 ]7 Z% M$ s- s* z, ^ a. X7 j0 Y+ ]
Let me just rewrite yours:
' V, I2 ?7 T4 p& uIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ G+ G- q2 j7 e2 n2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" j& _* w3 e5 @/ F1 R: KThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.- e- O8 h$ c' R6 H$ N
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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