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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% a E" }2 ]1 W7 Severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 L1 {- @# j. P. o
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Let me just rewrite yours:
$ q! q: [' i H+ b7 _" QIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me2 Q2 j3 O- W3 m6 H
8 T% N' Y- `0 [( Y2 d& p' p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 I! d( Q, k F' L2 O. n: G
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.: L$ b1 k7 n/ v# h% E l$ g6 }
& o- w5 O( Z0 v" B; CThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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, D$ _4 o% Q6 _2 S1 X9 [Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." E8 I V: E# L: E. r- `' P! t
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