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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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, p! _* u$ k& [0 o- Iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( E- J4 A5 _! J! F0 l/ t/ r
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " o1 X& M' `( F: G3 G$ \2 A$ M6 \1 f( D2 f9 j3 t* J
Let me just rewrite yours:
/ B2 |) q$ R. l7 VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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) C2 U% `1 D# F( ^1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
0 ~/ S3 D l5 h7 k2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; f6 Q# N$ u7 e" W* N* P% S
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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