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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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2 k% z: n7 ]% ^) G2 p9 [it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* V; C0 R4 N0 O& m) t6 Ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! O) T8 R( b! j- e9 o$ z3 E# M
5 N4 U: I8 s9 n3 x. }4 j% t9 eLet me just rewrite yours:
. Q2 `7 y, a5 T$ b" wIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ L9 w7 y+ o$ @8 N8 C1 x: `; R, k
4 ~0 C' H/ O2 R1 C3 F1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( Y4 r2 v+ v0 @( Z$ r' z1 v' p! i
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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* ], |7 d/ ]* o1 f* kThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., y# m9 H) l- L4 r) r, F
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 ]% h2 P" M, Z$ V, x
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