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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 T1 K3 d# y. |) H" d% a
3 U4 |( `4 N+ G! u5 ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 T- a( O9 `: O `everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; i5 N' b+ o3 H3 J+ l
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Let me just rewrite yours:
2 u) X) N' f1 Z7 L* t6 M, x& \9 SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me4 X' m2 f- _: j% o
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ t/ r6 i [* E: I5 B6 D
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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$ m5 A d; o8 `2 |4 I& JThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; X) d6 C6 r+ r2 j+ k3 |
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