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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# l' ?4 p' U/ H5 iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# _+ F7 j' R9 k4 a4 W* ceveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 x4 C" \- h6 ^7 o7 t, b; F3 Q1 ]5 o# w' v k! E p J2 z+ F, P
Let me just rewrite yours:6 s! S' s3 r3 R6 Y9 m( D* |4 \
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ f0 h, h0 G5 ^; t4 }6 _
, { R1 i& D& D# u) K1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# h1 F( | Q8 {3 ^, k# V+ X2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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z# J. g+ r; qThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 Y9 ?! L3 D2 V( b2 I- m0 d6 x
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