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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and " V' `9 R7 f G0 c3 l) I+ V0 Q
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 `, D2 a% Y( s0 x5 U6 ]* a8 @/ ~ A' l3 o5 T/ X+ w% M/ E! q
Let me just rewrite yours:
3 z$ z3 M) N; VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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i4 U" y0 h; b8 ]2 _* L5 a1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 B, Q* @: S" D, \2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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, S% _9 z& g [There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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( `/ U5 Y2 M7 |7 P5 AThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ p/ Y/ G9 q. u8 F& Y' D$ ]
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