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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 T$ \' u+ _9 H' b5 k2 P3 K, eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " |# t" H& I% p+ i1 H
! o1 w+ y4 E4 y9 c* _$ E" RLet me just rewrite yours:
9 s# r( Z5 n8 J! C7 A0 {6 g0 }2 kIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
2 y- k1 ~& s6 U% u" @2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) a/ u* A- B P& D" p
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; Q# ^7 t& E* M- e, V# ?; C8 c' s
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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