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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% ?& `8 P/ I- w' b. r/ ?
- u( D3 V& z p9 e5 F" c; Jit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
, o6 ]+ _% ~( L/ @# _" \. Yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 s' b* z2 {2 A. {3 p: a- O: \8 `5 v& G, ~ O/ ^3 P. \
Let me just rewrite yours:
5 ?* O" G2 i8 ^2 S; e# PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 n7 Y: k9 S4 U
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: F% z+ A J1 T. U3 o
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.: a! j0 n% `; K" n# F
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 O1 S- A; m5 X: ?2 y! w. |
4 L3 F9 o& Q) d& P- z! u- ~. TThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 S; I; a6 ?! B- v: H' z2 M
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