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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 {8 @/ ~. L2 b7 k9 Weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 O8 c! @4 ]& V3 _ h% P: \4 W- N! W, a5 c7 U
Let me just rewrite yours:
- [, s* ?: {" x% SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* D0 L2 s Q3 a. z
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
8 z* x6 t( I; I1 a9 n! p: n+ ]2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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( f4 O1 Z/ P( I+ XThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.4 P( j' k7 J. V+ \. |# W1 o- f
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