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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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& b/ A( e( U+ q9 ~it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 _& ^7 ~# i6 @/ j, k. L6 B
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , `) ^# ~& u. v9 Y# f& U% H- J8 W) ]5 `0 L3 E/ M# `
Let me just rewrite yours:
) V U# G. Z9 _ }6 J; VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me4 b0 V* i% [( g \: Y Q
7 F" j, F, N2 \! L: E k) O0 W1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% M/ E. A: g3 B5 H" `
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 T/ X$ W2 ]/ p! l8 l6 m4 j4 p1 ~3 `
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* m3 w( ?2 A$ r4 h/ W) @7 U$ S+ |! B
4 b( J D+ V1 z( z0 {Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.) Q$ [6 a. [+ n4 _
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