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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / c6 v2 {3 H+ x. D: Z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 \3 Z! D9 Q$ @4 H0 B0 g$ S" ~: q$ b& b* n: t8 v. G5 j% F
Let me just rewrite yours:
3 q$ a; w1 S* Y& I# a7 vIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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" s X; l, \1 Y p) x7 O) [" B1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing! ]8 f9 i: J8 k N# }0 \
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. s H4 D; W; H8 ^9 x4 t
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." @+ Z' c* g2 |2 P2 R( S
5 q9 }, H7 T7 a7 V2 }/ j5 XThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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