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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:7 C1 x1 t) h( h8 n+ k" [6 O
: v7 K7 N# M, Q! v5 h# [4 `) o3 _it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ p) f# s1 O, i& i% A! E: m% I+ }/ B4 keveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! k/ U/ F+ |; V( A( i: \5 j9 Q* e/ A7 x9 R7 B0 ?, x7 v
Let me just rewrite yours:
* U1 c$ ^) ]. W! H+ j tIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ w6 a% K. Y2 e& N0 E3 N( [' c% w4 v
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. \. p; R# O, J# p+ I4 f
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- G, w4 [9 E" E4 Z" E9 q/ r
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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% c; N6 D6 |# ~7 Y7 dThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 Q6 {4 L4 c6 Q, m
0 k6 x D& K- a3 X; Z) `9 QGretz. |
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