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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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R. O% T- k9 I- tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ H# V' _4 m) q" F! U e+ i, `" O" yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. U* L3 R; W) R3 z! _, \* e
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Let me just rewrite yours:
1 k7 ?3 e, j$ Q- x7 v5 P7 y( cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, E# `7 b* z! U T2 X( {
Q7 i/ S" m) o7 w0 b2 m1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* J& C( x3 o+ [7 \2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ r5 h3 s6 n' y
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 K ~# p2 `/ L& x( X( `
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