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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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( y v! n2 W! B6 E2 m+ W' i, yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' t- e9 ^! Y) p* x1 F, ^
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. r; V& Z d% E3 {1 l% e' i
% R2 p& ]9 C; M* @Let me just rewrite yours:
( B S: I" ?; v/ ~: H$ S NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& ~$ L2 z! E; H2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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! E, Z; z8 Q" t. L3 T6 z2 jThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! B8 u7 V; ] D
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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