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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# `+ P+ i% d$ ~
* K5 ~ O# I5 A; P8 L1 |) e5 F( cit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 }1 m( s6 Q [' Beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : e5 R9 f6 z2 `/ z7 h) E1 d. c6 f8 \+ `6 E
Let me just rewrite yours:
0 J: y/ V7 m( VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& z8 O" y8 d2 k6 @6 }5 |2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.6 g' w6 E9 l& K( {8 v# y
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ ]' L* @8 @: D& }0 Q9 P3 v
: P; [: `& W" Z5 B/ r5 r2 FThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., S" \ l- N& d. X
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