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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- |; V8 f& ?& i: }
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 D8 B1 c& p' M6 `7 s/ S* C
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' y2 A2 b s$ F% U
3 l& b- V" j+ R# T5 i9 `6 O6 iLet me just rewrite yours:2 z3 u- P. Z+ w+ v2 r
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me% ]: z R( T: v6 Y4 c$ I% i* s. e
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, P5 ?7 g& t6 v) M, d' O1 k9 X/ |
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., z l+ p/ P" y1 v, m& c
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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