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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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; B2 I0 Q/ R- Z# j0 Z* V+ D l: ^, ?it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
- f5 [& \; W9 f6 Geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " s. x/ o3 }* M* x
0 F/ r1 N! S0 h. J, p0 y/ xLet me just rewrite yours:5 X0 w" ^2 k% S& k. n& \
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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9 u, G" F: r# Q' m1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 ^7 l$ O3 {& `" V, ]; V/ e0 H
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., F, ^- B2 ^& T2 L
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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