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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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. X& n$ s N1 h& Uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% Y- D8 I6 T8 x+ Meveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % n; p0 V9 {. u( l2 a
' s5 B& U6 L# t- o+ a. R7 D* {Let me just rewrite yours:
2 P7 z" N' G2 l8 FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# u" ?% c7 W% w1 l4 W) s
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- E, x+ O' |6 i l2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 b) Z& H- I! |/ H/ Z5 p
, J5 ?& p/ @6 i- t$ y* VThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. c4 R8 g$ e7 O+ k, G! b5 e$ h
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