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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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9 u# d: U9 T* ?& U# }" bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 h! |2 @7 m6 A5 S7 b; geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; r' h) {1 K ?+ O2 [
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Let me just rewrite yours:
3 q" G3 b6 k& W. dIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
/ D# Y1 M& i @+ M9 s2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.& t4 K+ w9 e' f, g! Q% [
, T* `) M1 h8 ^) i+ EThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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. A, R9 N6 @- | N( JThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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