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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 [% c( d7 N0 v2 }1 h3 f
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 O, _7 M/ ~6 S# b6 l# H; {# l" R
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / d- T ?# C5 [5 s8 k. Q& ]9 g
, E/ |5 m+ e+ P' rLet me just rewrite yours:
/ h2 F1 L" p5 A) {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1 [: m W7 I4 S# S9 [1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 E, {, q$ |: z9 Z3 A6 X( m7 k
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Q* b. v' }! A3 ?* O1 y+ uThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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