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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ n- K& }. t+ D9 q, m
8 A$ X' L. `, t8 b. p) y8 g$ kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 u$ r/ F2 K/ Z. F' \/ Z$ beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # R* ]8 T- ~$ _( H9 n. ?
( e# f" n: C n4 ?- x& ^Let me just rewrite yours:
, v8 T" ^8 m4 ZIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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! b8 I% S2 K0 c1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 Y. K" c1 ? m9 d9 A& t* h
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.& p' ?! Q2 }! O& l2 ?/ C/ ]
) F$ j5 X$ c E5 @6 e& xThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# @$ O9 x u. ^, l. S
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- _% b3 [+ d( D3 `; b4 N. m% n
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