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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
4 s( y; ^7 r- z8 J& j: X* c) P) @everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 k, W. l8 S% e. P5 d; B5 L
5 Z: y, ?6 s8 ]2 eLet me just rewrite yours:
; K/ B, B- y& v+ B, rIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 e2 h! U" t, s% K1 W; G
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 Q+ P; U+ a* H4 \$ v; M2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.! E3 d* N3 m `9 `
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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9 Z# M: w0 W7 k1 k6 N. AThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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