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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 E8 d- ^6 R6 ^+ ~3 h
( n/ @" T. C8 w. `* w' V, Oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( C0 P2 j+ t1 y1 p
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! F- S% P, f8 v6 ?( i G
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Let me just rewrite yours:
; S% D, Z7 K5 o/ d2 O! |- sIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' ?+ Q' K/ f/ B2 j( a
1 m) g, D1 u/ o. k" Z! y6 f8 C% ~" V1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
8 I$ w! j# q! Y) r2 ~2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( p& r2 C" w! `: [9 E6 |, Y1 {) O4 i
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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: s6 q$ @2 `/ r/ e/ ?9 z- h) oThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 r! b& I5 _/ s: ~+ G3 H1 j
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