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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 s2 X& l" R1 c) `" U6 I( \- m/ L% a; A
& N5 X: K) i; G9 P8 w& nit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' b' o- z* v7 e4 xeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ `7 P1 M% E! T# q6 Z$ ?1 R5 X! q
& q9 Z4 X/ G ~6 {* E& M4 }Let me just rewrite yours:
9 u0 l4 P d7 lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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" g) D: c. ~1 r1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, l4 P/ W+ y' W9 V& h
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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