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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! O3 M' \, U; f& T+ j1 }' a! B
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ o) p% a$ g) X: V# ceveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! C& S2 i6 _' ~, I7 U2 ]% {
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Let me just rewrite yours:
8 S% [ W0 S* z4 ]9 D6 aIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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+ S( D7 u$ |; q. v6 t2 N1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 H* \- p0 U# B+ R1 [2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. G' z) w% E2 G1 A% }) W' T
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