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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, ]7 g) P' Q7 V" y* A4 ~' {
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # v) i/ G6 x# {4 {% M! b, ]
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 W# E& H! t; i6 G5 ^3 M9 X' u& {: v8 u9 N% F# D9 Z
Let me just rewrite yours:6 C( @: I# I3 @* Z. ^; K
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" g3 E& X7 C9 X% |; I& o2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 t1 ~/ V' V8 a$ c* M
2 Q( u( P# [4 @6 G; LThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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