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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# E9 G& @# ?& h0 s) |/ p, E5 wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 W: V1 X' E6 [$ A$ O+ y
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * b8 U m: z9 |) a& D" c7 C2 R7 ]# h4 @/ ^4 Q
Let me just rewrite yours:
$ b: D0 J( f% o7 zIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 U9 L! M2 d/ @) C
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 m5 q) ]; E9 R% J
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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5 x; `# }# l, F2 I" h5 K0 ZThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* Z/ s% u: Y% B I
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