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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, D: k4 ~& O" l8 F( M x. k
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and % C2 F/ T# T' s+ G4 ?$ W* p
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / g4 G+ z( T7 ^$ W8 s& E5 H/ |* M) ~, t$ H3 y t& r
Let me just rewrite yours:
$ {& q& v) Z9 |* \, }It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 h! {% l I& V2 m' S/ M
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! c* k+ ^' d9 i: H& l) Q3 _0 t2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. ?4 l$ w8 ?; a3 J+ H' S
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 y. [& u0 m6 V" M7 g6 i
2 M" K) t4 z/ h! D1 I9 p( RThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; _, y) O% e3 b2 K! ^- l
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