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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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" D: }+ ^- H6 ?7 k" ~2 T8 Iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 N2 e3 T" @" u7 ~, Neveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 ~+ z3 E) B6 ^; V
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Let me just rewrite yours:
o, D' l3 `6 H6 l1 vIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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' j2 A! q) J2 i* i1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( L* C6 D% T, J) e( u* c
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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7 X' g4 e' F; h( h2 T6 f+ kThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 [1 A* S- F* n( S: W
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