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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:$ {' N2 o P# v: U7 K
4 _, B _ k0 H; Oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* I) f+ H8 v2 Q- k/ }% l; `8 neveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / F) ?( ^+ Q8 \; W5 H& M0 h& h/ R$ ^( Y
Let me just rewrite yours:
) f! D$ q( t# C4 fIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 k9 O/ Z1 y" J- ~2 S% Y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la." t- P3 o4 F0 h3 r* ^, Q. {
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 ~/ x7 Y2 u. h
' w' q) \ s% ?Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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