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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 |) r x! u7 S' j
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ! b! Z0 o, t7 n7 f; r5 H/ q/ X
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ ` b. X$ J0 Y
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Let me just rewrite yours:% b+ o( D7 E, x. s/ b4 O# r
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 S* J; J' q) t+ }* ~3 U, P
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 o3 }6 \- E) N/ [
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* _& o5 {/ m# D8 |0 q
- {: d f' z/ U ?6 YThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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