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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 s) x/ y8 u! w) r3 Y0 ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & n* g2 m1 k9 G5 F0 l
2 F7 X E/ h2 F5 [/ O0 U1 xLet me just rewrite yours:
1 a9 D; A! |& TIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) y8 d2 d$ |+ g0 y' E
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 B o. L9 ^3 u: s2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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: c6 y' N" @" V" l& w5 R9 n) vThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# R P& S; g5 G7 |+ `4 \( u8 X
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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