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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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! x, Q, V" D, O% h+ E7 N' Lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% E1 f8 i# R" M' q; w: V8 _0 beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 F6 i; G* t% L T5 @4 X( B0 @. t1 t1 D& u7 o) D* ]" R
Let me just rewrite yours:; S$ f7 p. y/ ~6 w; r
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
0 F, Z3 x1 E' n* L2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. N) o) b% l' P4 m7 I
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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$ q7 D* c1 D8 }2 s0 r6 Y$ O5 r* oThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ _( S/ s O& A9 @8 N( z
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