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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ ?4 _9 b; Z1 X' ~+ t# x. n
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& c6 W1 q6 Y* `5 }- W3 @' B/ Heveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 s% m& D- }, E2 I. F2 f7 S
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Let me just rewrite yours:
/ M3 a! K1 ?+ |0 }2 k% `/ DIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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4 ^- }1 N1 L* V9 M1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!) `6 R( p0 C' b; V- R
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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6 a: W) b7 u2 }, ]2 |$ o( XThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: [/ |% w2 D7 z4 _1 n5 q4 U4 J
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: l6 F# U0 o+ S1 z
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