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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
( r, j+ _, A: A$ veveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . J% T7 B5 Y' [0 S+ l2 d
s' v% w, i g3 x: S5 Z7 dLet me just rewrite yours:
( R5 P# y" r- SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) ^$ v+ e! F+ V6 }3 O
1 u4 i, r: v9 o1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ h9 p( Y' t- v2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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- v8 W: W1 v$ g; A, N% cThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ a' u, y3 K c O
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.6 j2 I. j- c* u, y* N& H
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