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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 n. P9 j4 \0 ]& \1 y: a
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 k4 \- c& J9 f7 R4 P9 B# ~
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; p( v% ^0 ~7 f: q/ x- ?1 j
" q( a7 |) K# NLet me just rewrite yours:
$ M( Q, a+ Q4 p& Z( A6 hIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 q8 g2 E" V) |, o( Q3 E$ b: U }
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!$ L; ^9 P5 V, \4 s$ O! q
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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3 I' ?5 Y7 C$ Z0 e9 NThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 c! N$ ^) O" q1 h) |
1 e, r+ S5 p: n3 j( v' U( C7 DThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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