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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:* T6 ~, t1 }# o7 K6 O
3 n" K4 u: J. D1 m1 W7 {. Mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" y$ J; L# d' l/ S1 Y$ l( |" r+ Teveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 Z9 \; v( B& S, I& M) K2 ?. m. j) j [# a' w) M4 F X/ g" E
Let me just rewrite yours:
3 f2 `, ~" i* c4 f2 g1 ]It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: H* ?- x: J! F
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* T9 x6 G4 V2 J& B+ i3 B* s& t2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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: _, }/ m/ H, t9 X# p/ B- X8 RThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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) O4 |5 X: u& V3 c9 @Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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" ^7 n* ?7 s4 x3 p% TGretz. |
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