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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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2 R" M0 h9 m! N2 Cit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 X" G" E I- ?everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 M6 Q7 G2 D; _9 g
6 r% k) K, H7 c2 E1 NLet me just rewrite yours:
3 j& I, o5 W$ @3 I5 f+ H* GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me% a! a) G4 z; W A1 X
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; `0 Y: X; a v, }7 S- s6 o
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; ~+ P$ Q8 ~# w, k
5 B. w9 s' Y6 j- `9 ?4 L/ `" d4 F$ gThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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) ^" U" Z; P& i6 e& [$ i! l' ]Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.& C4 f5 Y& M( `
$ }/ g% A0 {9 T$ mGretz. |
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