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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: b$ n: @6 v; Q* H+ {everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + s- K5 a2 J. C0 a" a7 x
7 r: g! Y2 H `' K5 J' ~% KLet me just rewrite yours:
% m5 V. {5 n5 w& f; AIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me z( L8 T* L5 t' U$ h9 [
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
8 X; |2 T/ i8 O" \/ F- e2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 Q9 u% m8 Q: K7 O" n8 Y5 U, m
, I3 U5 p% R6 QThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." K5 h! n6 v& s3 [4 P* b& k
5 [. X/ f7 P! F* X5 k5 F9 j1 }6 F% jThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* f! s4 [0 Z, r8 K, J
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