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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 O* J8 J# o' l4 H/ w( yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
9 r0 {$ p1 B; G6 o- leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 P, ], H' z- ]2 G* H+ @- U
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Let me just rewrite yours:# b: W: J( _% p! m3 Z9 |7 E
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ J5 V9 K9 N' `( _' \* e, m0 P2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) k! i6 ~# V9 x6 ~( A, V2 H. NThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ }$ n( d8 N2 e( t( t5 D
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