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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and % m2 T! _/ y( [$ g8 m1 N1 D
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 i+ }) `- E1 D5 X& q9 E
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Let me just rewrite yours:
3 M4 E5 M( c9 FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
/ }; f/ m4 L* ~$ v; t2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 `" E& z0 i8 R
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 w% M. _: N/ h* l5 g
; W5 K. b! w8 f( g) P1 `* |Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 A+ {7 O2 a' {6 W
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