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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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, l) d$ _! [+ e& w) _ @2 L, mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 @' u( |$ Y+ _1 d( l: qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 L3 \! v) T: J/ C
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Let me just rewrite yours:; ?, ]- g% ~6 ]# b/ G7 V
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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t( P" A7 I3 X; z; |1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" O4 n- @& e2 F2 a) U5 \2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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* I2 Q+ M0 y8 x8 b: \5 IThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 y9 y8 `8 y! e+ D3 P* I/ F8 g( u; K
7 b0 }3 x8 Q# bThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 I, i" j& H/ J
. l, M& Z3 I; L! ~Gretz. |
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