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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! p' l3 e' `# T/ x$ H* W
8 ^, v6 a# O1 p; t( k3 `9 s+ xit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 @$ Q8 j7 B3 y! e7 K' Heveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 C3 M1 R8 j) S6 W' V
/ s% [, D0 q) G+ t e9 P" XLet me just rewrite yours:
) i5 U; j' X9 DIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 X' g8 n4 e9 z/ \8 N% ]; v1 h
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ X% d8 {$ H! \
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