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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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5 a! o* W$ @+ r; I, L" X4 {) rit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
9 p' N& T! W/ m; w; n3 i c7 |everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " M. R" L, f: E: X# C7 _
C$ Z+ r* m n% E7 a, RLet me just rewrite yours:
, d( Q9 Z0 f1 t# E! }% NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' [' C& [. z/ i0 J4 w* C2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* p0 o& Z# g. h* w* g
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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0 h: t" b2 O. r2 ^8 F5 U+ rThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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