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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% ?1 l! K- e0 d8 ~0 Jeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . k1 l3 {: e& I' K- n( V) A: n- _. L: j5 R% \ o: F
Let me just rewrite yours:
: K9 K) P% `) y4 p" [! IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# Z M; Q7 |$ C4 C9 X2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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# l0 d" b# k0 \2 lThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.6 M2 \' J' I o8 S8 `* g5 D
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