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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 _* s& G4 s8 }" S" C# T, yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 i/ F# P) g( ?% n `3 W1 ?, m9 x& I! z. _+ ] s2 V: [
Let me just rewrite yours:& k$ d: u d6 A7 p7 W& [) g' r
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" c! x, {& U9 K
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 Q' B2 c H! `: R* {9 E
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 Q" k- e% X" i. p, U8 c6 N1 A( X4 R
2 t' c! Z1 H% v$ i) tThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 i" _8 S+ X0 m* T7 C
0 y3 Q, h) t$ m hThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' X7 x" Q. Z( B! P6 Z4 E% C% n
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