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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; t8 ]* Z- [4 o5 p8 Aeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 D8 Y2 M' D) S8 F6 U, P$ |) [4 {( J- y9 W" p! N9 J
Let me just rewrite yours:
; K, @, }, p: l4 Y" OIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me! w/ I5 x& q/ @, x! y R8 i4 U
; ?. S, C1 x# g: b0 q1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
3 V& ]+ c5 W9 e6 W2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 p R1 u$ o; T; _* v3 y, E
, }. d( E3 K1 b1 y: d8 `Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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