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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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2 Q9 ~ d9 f, x8 G1 oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * T/ T; q, |; i' D/ g
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 X4 J0 H9 o3 h: @: V* h- w- j$ u8 c; |/ U. U
Let me just rewrite yours:
+ _. O! M. ?3 N K# [, B, ]/ vIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!4 S M8 P6 l; @; L- z) |( j
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 F) f9 t, ^: [* b
h8 @2 W$ i1 z5 _" M. ]" D2 rThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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/ q/ f9 Z6 }+ o4 A& rThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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