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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + e3 E" `* f/ c0 c u; z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 o7 h* F" E' O
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Let me just rewrite yours:
9 t8 W$ u, q: n* eIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!! g8 |& J9 `9 b7 S- p1 G9 W
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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* L6 {' j0 D- O! [' m- V3 N( e" zThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 {5 u. T6 P. l# _; s& S( |! B
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 D- G8 _' k, J, `; b9 v
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