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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, o+ r) ?/ Y6 @; }
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" B) C1 Z3 @6 s. \6 r# ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 q- m2 [# T9 |0 ]9 X( f' X+ y: Q$ [0 ?3 ]) C
Let me just rewrite yours:8 ?7 r6 Z- P1 I5 {
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 G2 B. G5 d$ o8 j0 j2 T2 E% o7 R
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.& }& t2 s; \& ~5 v5 R% K: F
) k, B$ h/ J. A5 a/ U7 AThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.4 i0 P: n; ~1 H. J8 n( k! H0 i
# c7 q# @" B+ _+ L7 r3 }% P6 R8 yThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 @* }! U( T# ]9 ~2 X& D) J
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