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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:9 j* t$ a; r, d0 [
; Q3 X @ t$ ^$ E( x$ P8 eit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and M8 y8 S( u4 p, {% O) J) t9 |0 l- f
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' l" ~/ f7 N+ W5 R. B3 U% [
3 e: M% s4 ?5 `# f$ T( ~Let me just rewrite yours:
" h) ]# S8 G% O( Z2 }3 wIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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2 e; a3 D' {, _# D* `! l1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( S7 [6 c+ k3 c
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 ^* b }3 \1 U1 c: ~5 W/ R) f
* ], O& e, b7 d0 Z2 Q2 JThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow. l) f2 o5 [0 G" b4 F- ~+ b6 p' z
+ o; V/ V a3 r5 @/ ?- TThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ B O3 S! s7 i. T$ k
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