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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 B* _% m8 D, ]1 r1 Z
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) V% f" V9 c3 \% ^
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; L" U8 F5 B ^5 Q) s' l* B* u7 T) \1 m9 N2 A( X
Let me just rewrite yours:
. |: h( H9 p" v7 _It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, B2 Q/ ~7 H8 |
8 `" E5 a; D5 E. z9 k1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, U. \- O( d0 I3 S4 \: k9 N
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 l1 G* G2 c* c" t/ S2 y# Z6 L. C
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.6 ~+ {5 B4 K% ^
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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