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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:6 ^# e) F5 v/ p3 m- z% u
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 [, X' g8 T ?) T( k8 }7 _( Xeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % D4 s# U. _2 K! ~% ^( |3 j. @, k- J. y" G/ j
Let me just rewrite yours:
9 C/ K" Y4 q, t) o6 H+ OIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 \# L) p! y0 E) J# ^& t
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 E, P" t4 A, D9 y' V; z! I' i2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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- I: S, `6 D3 R! p; v5 ^$ R, ^There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! U+ d; b0 L P3 l
5 l0 h; Q1 o+ K2 t! r! pThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' @( ` b" E6 O; u {( t
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