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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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. |& M/ i# _; Eit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and P+ A/ W0 G$ a( u
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 K# T {3 M |3 x
7 l. g( B! a: |6 b5 F1 W: wLet me just rewrite yours:
D+ B- c( G* q2 R8 IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me+ l- G, L( g# p* {+ F
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 F e( s, v9 v
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# G, W6 x% U9 a7 \/ F4 Q
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.& H- M( R' y! |! l
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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