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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! N; N, B! C% b, l# W& _
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * E# [: H9 z. e; Y. G
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ ~, j7 E5 y7 `& X/ u- z8 N4 Y, j3 V8 s9 V+ N$ t+ c5 j
Let me just rewrite yours:
9 I! K( m; }- [1 U* O/ NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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! e' q5 o% u" m: I; E* j1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!4 A- ]8 o+ `! ?4 v
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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3 O& {4 }" J. W: oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ O* e+ r9 U" M# ?# ~
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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