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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 X8 p6 e2 t2 k, r; V) c
" E! J9 h$ o: git doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' F9 o' Y" V% {; p
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . U2 E( Z" _. c- N" E* i! a3 [
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Let me just rewrite yours:+ N5 F4 H2 ]# _4 A* ?
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me! w( L( ?( D4 r* e% q
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! r' @# A" o/ n& O9 W) V2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.1 x' \) Z, F% ?) W
4 n& l3 z1 h8 K4 B( U* wThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., t& V7 X( l/ O( e, r i2 y
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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