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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 J5 \4 [( F& l @9 `; c, N
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
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- W4 u# ^1 K: ^9 \. `Let me just rewrite yours:
0 Z" H4 [3 J% I! MIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me s/ Z' M- w l1 O* L6 n
[8 \; o3 s- Q, c6 b. D, b1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- m! s% D8 ]1 d4 m: d7 D2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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! K ~4 y% h+ M# vThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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