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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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0 p) |9 _, H! M4 [" z3 uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 @; m' N. G# j( {4 b" J
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 W1 f- u0 A: `% e3 f( J
) N2 V. d0 o9 {' RLet me just rewrite yours:
* O1 }5 r, q: C5 bIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" D* N5 }% J; c# R, y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la." u& }$ c9 _. y0 [+ z1 f4 ^
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 H% Z# n: l9 h( X) e- K' x" |
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.6 I" b/ ?: W, M/ w0 q
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