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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 i' O* n/ k8 U! a5 K- K
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. j% f* W! J, `& m7 neveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , ?! F, o% o% E. V# z+ ^5 R4 w. z2 z
' o" Z! D- ~6 |& I$ f5 E3 B j+ ]9 ?Let me just rewrite yours:
2 m/ u# {3 w" W+ `) P) j8 b7 iIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!' H9 K5 Q* r2 |5 @8 ?
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.8 O, S; i# M, h5 ]4 a* ^
" k' S* S3 D9 `4 R5 J- bThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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9 J3 T" L$ |) bThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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