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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: A- ~9 w. v0 E3 e8 A6 |
: t* D$ C% x9 \( o5 B# i+ c& \it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( W5 y: T' Y, h4 e! m, y
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' t/ X& ^( v, A& ?& g- x; l
. s. @& Z. ^) o% RLet me just rewrite yours:
* M; r8 g1 f: K$ MIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- E# M" x# _( }! @2 v9 J
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
0 ?) |+ @# i8 \! @2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.' B% m$ ?- a/ s# l8 {1 h @
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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3 ?7 C! N D' \3 `0 c' Y6 VThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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