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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:' I; p7 m* p" Q* ]- ^
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' a/ l# O5 {7 P: V, E5 e+ ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' o! j l8 }% a3 S3 X! u4 L) k/ N, V# X( v& h! M3 {/ N% o: X
Let me just rewrite yours:; Y5 x+ O9 I/ L$ y) n+ v
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!! {/ @5 M$ [3 r! u
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) s; x1 s! j. B# Z
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* J0 t. g$ E, A+ y. n' W7 t
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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