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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 l; O- D; E* v% L# o& C$ a" b2 peveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : |/ \# Y9 v Z( f, J6 ~; B- b& i9 ^6 }( h2 L0 ?
Let me just rewrite yours:
% A/ W" n5 S9 p1 b* X% JIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me6 g+ g- Q. ~$ N# M, e
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 m x0 u+ W& I A2 U# R8 x! N0 c% B2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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; @' {0 `4 Q- m% Z2 ` P- X; BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 \8 q+ f! E% f, W
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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