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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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! ]- p% I6 V, Z7 fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( n0 ~, t+ b% ~2 C, L8 j9 X
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. {: M+ ?$ C$ V- }7 O: Q
6 Q* i, t, M. D3 W& e Q G. aLet me just rewrite yours:0 @' I% O' @/ a
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!5 k3 ]% d; j! O1 k) D
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.1 N$ Q4 t1 n; D) M3 G. D
2 p( v; s% s# T o" o4 B' G; n% NThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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& b% V7 W" v1 E5 X8 Q9 O$ ^Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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