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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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. M: Z A( f* ~' N! @3 S3 K. kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + Z0 w- R0 A' H: C4 T- S$ j
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 A: x. s8 z. t/ ^& \; F9 _, v5 ^ i- G! c- K- u
Let me just rewrite yours:
$ {. E K6 [0 u% s8 YIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ f% M5 Q2 p1 {( u' S) B
, U" [* k8 _; `& {8 t5 L1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
. J- R/ k$ k1 w! T+ [2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.1 E, X+ x( w3 w3 O" ?
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. D/ X* u! b5 F: \3 S! O
& s( I. S$ K. J% DThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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