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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 t7 ?* U h5 w( h. k4 z
! Z1 Q0 Q9 |4 p |# `it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , H# {7 ^( K2 v$ Q! s
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ w4 M: b. v% O% S7 k% q' k
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Let me just rewrite yours:
1 v: k, X2 g5 g2 |It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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, [! B! @" m. B$ E1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
+ d- R8 b! y* F' i2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) a( c5 Z4 h# S2 l* r3 t, s! z' r, Y' OThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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+ e9 N* }0 S1 G2 M9 U; wThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; }1 l3 G& ^$ e8 I6 u2 M0 G
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