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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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+ D X" {0 F2 q9 [3 ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 h7 Q/ X9 P! a9 feveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 j E' S4 P- m- ?; _6 p8 W8 b
" p0 M o: O) ~0 i2 ]Let me just rewrite yours:
3 l2 \- W4 d3 Z. h& Z2 l8 {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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: R& P* ?1 X' ]5 M0 b* `2 V& [1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
) O; p0 J, T1 o2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 N v# T% c, c$ b( b8 Z
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.& R# a T! l/ }/ _4 s5 n/ [' w" Q
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ y2 A: e. b* a
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