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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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+ `2 ]. \$ s2 v5 B0 ^% ]$ ?0 Y7 Pit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; b1 J1 }# p9 f* }7 G( }+ {2 Severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 r1 v0 s, x$ K! B
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Let me just rewrite yours:
8 c5 T, S( N5 ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me; F* D+ j/ c8 k$ s9 u. C' h
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ ~/ s. M0 ]% V; G2 A( v% W
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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$ W5 a" o2 J5 u) `5 uThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: [% L5 J1 O# U, q$ ]! b9 M0 F8 b8 h e4 v
" \! V" k* w2 f3 }Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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