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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 h. ]& y6 }5 D+ \2 S% G- _it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ; F$ G4 A S8 Z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % \1 h- h c9 |6 q" [& q" I
' G- T- K8 w/ d* M( Z1 B; G$ }: ELet me just rewrite yours:
! q8 q7 v8 l% a& }7 `, F' T! I! I* _It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* d6 J2 H g9 R+ V3 o- n
! G2 C, C) m* B) E: g/ Z1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
7 F* ?6 \4 u; k; ?; R2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 @1 N' {* ^) r0 T2 p0 P0 M2 H3 RThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 c& _" U. ~9 K4 y `7 N
' G2 J' y. a; d3 PThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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