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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and . G4 Z" D5 b3 A- |! X' a+ J) m
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + g% v5 t$ V/ n/ \8 L
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Let me just rewrite yours:. l" g9 `7 ] d
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 V2 R3 J; R7 T. b! Q. n
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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; G r! c# B( @, N( G% ]/ i iThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 {7 Z3 k6 ^, ?' }
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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