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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 } ~7 A0 k1 X W I
; \' k9 J" g6 c$ t: Mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& V4 Q1 F( s5 l) I! W1 L$ m) l9 }everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 p" u+ N8 m9 M2 `4 F% s D( y2 v6 l7 U2 X! A5 P# }4 p9 q
Let me just rewrite yours:% A, l/ {1 f- r7 ]6 C2 e/ C1 s
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me6 j' @, W8 @% L% c
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 r5 l. k" Q) Y; t+ N: J2 x2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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. K6 |; ~8 O5 F4 }2 k) H! EThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 @. q% ~( j0 y7 L' V
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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