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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% ]" I6 w! o( S' vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , v" P3 H. C& a( f3 q6 y
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 ? W& M2 t) @" l6 Z0 i% Y" E6 L% E
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Let me just rewrite yours:' d+ L0 V" s; _3 l" s/ Y
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# g% ], L- R4 b1 l4 P2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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. B6 W1 L+ y. a6 i- Y. C, ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 m, s+ _7 W3 S- M. N1 E. N4 v
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' X- h1 u! N1 S& o, ?
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