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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- L8 Z" X% W1 ~$ O0 u% N. Y
. F4 @0 \* \: _2 ?& r! A9 H" e/ L. pit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 I* \, g$ R+ K* s, R* r! d! h( Reveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " n2 O' U$ e+ @/ X6 f! a! J! w
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Let me just rewrite yours:2 d- V' L( E$ K' P0 c
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me% x5 s2 V" i* I. ~$ O
1 ?8 W7 I2 p. f' Y1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 F# e4 v% p0 z1 a9 B p. u# w
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 r* G! |2 v2 |" ?# ~. t9 x
: w1 v. Y8 {, r1 [, qThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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