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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: s8 L; _' X! Z3 I1 ~6 n- ?
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 J' h1 v. V, u; x7 ^6 s, Z6 eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % f) I# h2 K: K# V9 t( D( G8 F
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Let me just rewrite yours:$ `" g7 k" q7 W1 |, {& E, J+ I
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ D$ d( A6 Q3 O. O2 F3 P6 s
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 B! f) [: o3 G( f5 P6 s/ ~
( ^; @0 X, i: ?& o" [ b" MThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., c2 r& z: _# y* r; B
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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