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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : s5 J; h. l4 I( a
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ O* p' j+ {( E
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Let me just rewrite yours:5 o. L! c! d7 G0 o+ W
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ h" p* K c6 n) C: `# @* x X
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ |7 {! s9 l2 N" L# o+ {8 `
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.6 v: Y3 O4 E, C2 K% ]8 T+ _) K1 l
p# V7 s: Y4 N% ^: ^7 b) ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 g6 m+ d; m! u) |+ e4 p, Z
: E1 c$ }5 `, `; q EThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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