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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' f% o& v" a9 C, Weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 s9 m4 m: H3 E( X) e+ t. B c: F
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Let me just rewrite yours:
' |. l6 w' V! z- k# t+ z+ t! ^It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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! x2 Y0 F* @( _: u0 D% e1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- H5 C& z5 h8 |9 d7 O2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 C& w8 ^# Y- j. v: g( K
, G I8 K/ r: J0 V9 S. ^There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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! c0 S% L, g- K2 ~$ mThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( @2 _8 l1 H$ W4 ?% B! k6 R' Q
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