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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( j1 ^1 n! s- b6 _
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; B: ?6 r# T& _- J. P) w( m
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Let me just rewrite yours:
5 X; X/ ]! \/ E: a! b9 a/ Y* ]It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( N0 ^4 {8 o/ F6 S( x2 B2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.1 C M5 u2 J' V5 Y/ L! X
4 h2 |! ^ k1 X" @. C' `1 ^; KThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 I- z% c8 G1 Q, @
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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