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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # t: a* R$ Z1 ~/ c
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' h4 z6 G" m1 C
8 F1 Y" Z1 k! V% XLet me just rewrite yours:
" h7 Q% J8 `/ l1 CIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me( v' l2 ~# g% }: ^7 h$ c0 w
! J! l* @' k, I% n3 a1 Q" q1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- \ h3 d' r% P& o, H; P
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." `1 X. Q8 D, ?
/ f5 j# c4 h4 ]. @Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. G, X6 K5 l/ s* H$ @4 P7 q* e% |! F
, ?* S& H. B; e0 bGretz. |
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