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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% Q0 j8 X+ d7 ]' v( x" u% V
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ; r# s8 C1 t; d; n0 j8 K( G1 B' Z0 a
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; r' V. S9 Z& X h
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Let me just rewrite yours:
7 X6 k3 i' {) b/ |$ \! F. @It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!& G0 E$ R2 u2 v4 a
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.& t( h. i% t' _: r- }
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