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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ P# t& y9 N+ t. g: G7 D; U! n E2 deveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 m' y) g+ L) R( Q6 ^2 z }2 V, n! B6 u
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Let me just rewrite yours:' o+ s9 L' b- I: Y7 K! Q/ ~9 k5 z \
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
7 c* Z! U8 A) t" A9 w2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.6 p( ? m, Q' x
$ N9 R0 c2 M+ [; ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.' V- U# S& T9 ^7 G4 H! A5 r
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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