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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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1 f2 _8 r# h+ yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% f2 `8 j8 r! b2 @7 s0 U5 j! weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( N! g8 ?; M7 h/ D
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Let me just rewrite yours:1 Q. j' n$ c4 U% M1 `+ d) i: r8 O
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me2 q2 u% d8 q: @% ]. J, K
1 s! z7 F' d1 M& X( L, [1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!0 _9 W- Z: F+ d% X9 @& ?$ C! A4 v
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 D8 B; w; ~! O2 F
$ J' K2 g3 K3 M5 F( n- {Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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