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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, B% G. E/ g, {1 |
7 Z. p9 a+ T& i& K! sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * d6 b- k+ ~& V' E% N6 m
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / u1 J4 o" {8 H$ b" i' `
4 q/ b& V9 e' I z9 aLet me just rewrite yours:
/ Z+ x o8 a6 B1 nIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me7 n" G# m J- w
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( `2 C9 [- Z/ p
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 k5 R" M9 g; B" f+ g' w
' K! D2 u) ?7 D3 IThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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