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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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/ B0 y) j; S0 Yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 C% I* ?$ y& d5 U* @5 x
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . F, d3 e! x6 h; U% L
1 [6 t) v! ^* @% { A, w P4 \8 NLet me just rewrite yours:
# c! h- g, q8 H' i2 _+ O( q+ y9 IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ P+ t3 P4 u6 b A9 |9 b3 N5 Q! [0 {
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.& {2 D: d1 D: z$ y" P- t. D) K L
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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