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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:$ U# s( q+ S, |6 C& v
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
|1 s- i6 S) U0 T/ V8 severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % E" Z+ k l G& V" F" s7 H3 H
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Let me just rewrite yours:
3 l& o8 @5 j E! b) NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" s) j3 g1 {6 v5 F% E! ~) E
$ M( `- P3 W" Q$ }5 _) X+ S5 ]1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 [1 S' l+ i0 l* J
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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7 `8 N( W- c8 {" {9 oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 ~1 Q8 T* s# D+ A' r$ g
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