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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 z4 I3 j6 ]" V7 Eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) l& h5 C/ K# Q/ z( j) M1 H3 @5 S
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Let me just rewrite yours:
4 P, k; }6 X5 |3 d1 HIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
2 y1 K% \, |' P( w% T2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* H, G2 F8 Z' }. j- E% S8 K
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.8 i, b% f* m9 N! a! }
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