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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and . O \1 @2 c* o
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " N0 L4 @! f, R0 |' ^, A
% r' p( y1 G5 y7 r3 T0 TLet me just rewrite yours:7 }( U, I7 o- @5 L" u/ F
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
3 ^6 ~# _; f$ a, |2 n% v2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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, L3 E/ H4 g; B* z4 @9 Z/ G$ eThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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) @# ]* W0 J7 s, ~8 f! o: k: UThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.) u# v k. ]( z0 o. @
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