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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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5 h$ ~! z; H' B* j _1 o7 hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
, m1 w# @ i Reveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ i& K A& U. c* w$ e$ C9 V* u5 E" P
+ O7 l6 F6 K) A- D, DLet me just rewrite yours:
+ O/ [5 E+ K: g: BIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; I/ Z5 z$ m! x7 w
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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2 P) I* q- D% n* bThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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' i- T7 |7 e/ BThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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