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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / F @& @ `% w0 }5 P- T: p; l7 ]
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 v9 t2 j: n3 I8 U
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Let me just rewrite yours:
( g* r$ V p$ F7 e2 Q1 G6 XIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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" G) x" @( G% S1 M! W1 z# A( g1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* m- P" l* d3 F2 A! o$ H2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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; @+ e. m# Z; o! ^There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.- U$ e- Q6 u. c7 Y" R, `1 e) s
( j0 r* G# v$ ~; v- n3 OThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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