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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% }# G, r' ?$ h! K q9 {
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
9 W' ?: j2 \9 V' ^# _everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 L0 B$ P; i+ W4 O5 B1 O( D& E
% f3 V6 T8 Q( t3 |Let me just rewrite yours:
. j- q+ p K- c0 R: i: hIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!$ L5 j4 r, |7 d) g6 e4 A
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 d+ F, i9 _1 \5 P9 `" d
D& D x' k1 F2 d) T" O3 \( t( y( v& V6 NThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 ] V z$ d5 Y$ E
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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