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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ g% \& v6 z1 f% b! ?
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ m5 e0 U: R9 ]3 N& D9 g( yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # o5 q0 I' m2 L' B* p/ L+ V- l6 ]0 j# W9 `: K0 K2 J" P
Let me just rewrite yours:
: S3 t$ a* T, V9 ?' Z( ^It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" F; V- f7 T+ i3 k) [ y% n% @. y
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" Q7 x. T; p# _% @2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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1 E, _, a% e) I% m3 }# i* Q" oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.- L' J$ s" e& r1 R
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 B! y" q0 t9 y9 P: P7 W
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