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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% C" o* x5 p) _+ v( \1 Hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : _3 [& H* u& K2 F. l/ f# \
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ B% |' R! X& S, F' p
7 k0 V0 ^1 m: rLet me just rewrite yours:7 h$ ^4 l+ C/ v8 K6 @5 ]
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" {' U0 d2 @6 L+ V; }
( y' ` G7 ]" P! K$ \1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, {! K1 D5 P5 B% S; v, p
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- z+ @9 g, d. a# @' @
8 W1 V1 B, q- l& v" fThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ U5 V/ z! R1 F( {* Z3 H. `
' @( g0 q+ d- \8 U! yThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ s0 S4 y; A. F5 l _( @ ~
8 N0 \2 }# `! {0 EGretz. |
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