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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# u2 g; p7 c/ d
7 [8 E' ^# {6 t) Y- ^ w8 r# hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 V2 c+ W, g0 N8 B$ @7 w8 x1 b
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; \. ~' i0 E- \( a3 g4 r
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Let me just rewrite yours:
1 l* M* @. s3 m3 i3 {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- K( j1 H8 w& u/ o, L
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 z5 j* t; e+ k/ q, O8 R2 w
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) h& x/ m% O9 B# D
" @! ~% i: x# C6 vThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 t9 h9 P: D. O& q5 z2 w! U
; y( N" F$ O% n( dThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( n2 X4 Z, U3 c- c$ ~
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