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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:. }" u: J. j4 v) ], U! m
1 [. x9 M: z7 k! ] M, mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 r& \/ `0 s5 P" A. ?: }) o
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + J' v% M [/ D3 G9 u' H0 {( ] M" x* s5 o+ I; M8 V8 @
Let me just rewrite yours:
) c5 z: ^9 J/ N. A3 xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 m! B- a' f" ^. w7 p2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' Y7 Y, h- L' ~5 bThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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