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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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! ~0 h, l% z$ L* L% k2 U$ J5 Uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 @! B) H+ g: U, u6 T" [+ q Feveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & _& \2 r; @2 q, ^) Y
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Let me just rewrite yours:
; T1 N- w9 G% ]! YIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me4 H) k0 A) |9 g, g# v% R+ `
3 \# Q4 G+ z7 ~; O S/ S1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& L/ }( e7 l2 e/ s2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 J) d4 l2 a6 y
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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5 P$ X* R5 o# ~0 GThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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