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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 L* S { m" ^* W8 U7 n
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" Q% H: u( {4 T/ g+ Teveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' |6 v+ o5 M- d K2 I
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Let me just rewrite yours:2 D4 O( b6 |! J' X+ f3 K
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me1 ?/ m) Y' S) P
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
) V+ L1 U/ w) v: U2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; A; L K6 R& h9 ?8 o N
& T- {: y6 W1 sThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ k8 [6 l9 z0 ~5 t: G9 t
- Z i; l V/ |+ c3 c# _Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ V( f$ c) G" {7 f+ K
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