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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- w7 B/ R+ ^/ }$ n' E
9 ^/ j% e& S! G' U0 U% T3 Vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 J& a+ f. W# b0 F
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) Z$ [' r# T: [% @8 B$ @; v
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Let me just rewrite yours:' \- E# {3 R% \- p6 e
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 I7 j- M8 D/ i/ t; V3 w8 w% a
" O5 T! b: \* A1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
3 M6 u3 X& ~0 a) T2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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' P& \. N8 `. `% PThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ i7 y) [, P* X5 S9 [! k; x
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