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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:. u+ Y6 f5 q, F# E4 ~0 E# R. `
3 L) | @$ l$ |2 V9 b% d/ git doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
9 [" k9 w% L1 [; x! k9 C* V( }everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . p Z& ~9 Z$ B* R. Y F& u4 \; D& M
Let me just rewrite yours:
4 Q0 `5 {2 S y' Z% @It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me c3 Y* t/ ]4 k% D% h+ F9 j. M G
" V C. h. K" q) z8 Y* a' E1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!& b5 E/ [3 } S2 |( @% A
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# B, }+ ]3 m! _
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.6 [/ p8 M4 q* `4 T0 d4 M
' a/ y. a& G w7 E8 cThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 S7 I3 I7 A6 \( n. R0 U3 P
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