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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:7 h) C+ M2 r5 {) I9 R4 T4 c" T
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # C5 t4 P- R4 k# N5 W U9 a) o0 n
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . R% H* b9 V* V( Q4 o8 L
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Let me just rewrite yours:0 d# Z3 v I8 o4 K% m' t0 g7 F
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
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. _# `# z7 ^* j) \6 c8 Y1 ZThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: x3 Q4 z e$ F, G+ `/ ^1 [% K
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ q/ ~" S$ h3 x- T$ D' O, }: t6 U
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