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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 A$ V2 ?9 V% a+ Q* z8 L% K, v
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 w; M5 _- ?1 S, B/ l5 j8 Leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , E5 ~, t* K% I
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Let me just rewrite yours:
6 l H6 Q' A. `- n X0 y' |0 z( H- WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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" N% o! J; ?+ t9 L1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! R7 A- J1 E5 R# {7 S: P% T# C2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.9 `' H9 E) h. u$ Y z/ L5 p$ f6 k
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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