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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - f5 t/ x/ h- t" J! @# N3 B
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , x- D; G: d1 n4 ]$ R
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Let me just rewrite yours:
8 a: j% h; |% |2 a' K& d8 KIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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: }/ T/ a" O+ @ a6 _; I, U' k: a1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!* [2 Q8 f" m' R9 U* `; Y# B
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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0 R7 x$ Z- ^6 i3 UThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.4 Y7 O; `0 T4 k8 r# z
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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