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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% c. f5 }3 y- ?' J- X, ~
5 m/ T4 d3 w& b: c1 A9 B+ Xit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , U6 C0 S L1 B' L
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 W" ?3 U* E- P
% ^ G- {( C ?$ J2 s/ {Let me just rewrite yours:
/ Y$ t5 M3 M8 g" mIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 u6 D1 ]% o" J H! K
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. H1 `# ^" o& ~$ C+ Z) v+ T* d
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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6 Z3 Y; R1 a H/ uThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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