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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ P" W. l3 i' Y# A$ R' c! M4 ]: |everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . ?6 u9 n: V) Z
; ?# H* A {6 Q1 Y# O' b7 oLet me just rewrite yours:
/ \5 Z7 v4 H9 y; Q/ kIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* M R6 M3 {+ q0 z/ m. i0 d `2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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* ^# ^" p( T2 V* YThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.# K- y0 Q0 d) ^- g. R5 w
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