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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ {% e- G2 m( d# L; l
" t) q3 B# s6 `9 ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; {6 k. U/ A6 _6 I$ ~everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. `, \7 l/ X4 G4 s1 v
4 j! G8 [& n, b% [5 l1 {Let me just rewrite yours:
, f- z+ X# Z q* e1 t; n/ rIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!' f$ C1 l1 ]% ~# R" v! ~
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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2 E4 R) A3 e: ~! s( ^9 M. B' gThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; x2 ^3 _- V1 q4 B$ S. |
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Gretz. |
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