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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM: \! i4 G2 C9 Q" t0 ]" N
# Y4 S) D3 b+ i" ]6 h" o+ Pit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ f# s. @% k, w6 t0 ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! A1 v, y. u& p/ G4 B' f
" T- w$ A' n0 @9 ?6 h3 ~Let me just rewrite yours:/ V. ^+ I( Y, q! I+ o( I
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. a* v0 F: [: ]: z6 L. I- v
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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8 I" x& `( v5 t! ZThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ t0 S+ [ D- C% W2 a. u
6 Z$ I1 r" Z j/ o( D9 {, jThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.) W' e3 D3 {4 f5 S/ a! d
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