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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: b) e, z5 d- ` a
x2 ] q" |$ s2 m/ dit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ Y$ C; \& a: ?everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; p, T7 T: N; {
X' p+ x- v+ p& b: P8 dLet me just rewrite yours:
3 b# e4 u/ i ] K( zIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!0 H& W2 @8 O/ E) U. v+ G$ q
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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6 C+ r$ f' \8 O2 o1 h; QThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 E9 E! Q4 B8 y( |: K) k2 S
7 T0 B; T( ~7 d& R F" ?Gretz. |
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