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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 W$ ~( z; d$ q9 H6 {4 ~- ^1 z6 f5 L
5 \- }5 Z% H4 s9 oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; P, k V' `6 P! q, |everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . i9 a% f5 E9 J. A8 @- F# h" h( q
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Let me just rewrite yours:
8 A7 k% x+ K- j3 ~* gIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# ?9 T: t# Q; l/ {5 d1 U
. w* L. ?5 c! \0 e1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!* o9 A; q6 ^# E5 ?$ T R
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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* t$ Z+ E9 [- F& s0 M9 Q+ L+ \There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.# t) O7 R2 F$ y! M' Q* y
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