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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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( {3 e, q9 ]! z# d! J- dit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' @ C4 Z+ x: G- w6 i1 ceveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # `+ Z- B6 H, Y3 j! c" r8 p/ a- u9 E* z
Let me just rewrite yours:
" ?; R* Z* B! ^- {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!) g2 {5 f: I7 h8 t! z Q
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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6 p" l, \! ?; X# u2 p9 rThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; A/ s5 N% r4 e% |Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% r: p1 i$ g* d- N8 C
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