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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:6 {7 h9 ?8 ]' M
# T2 z" D2 [3 K8 y3 b3 z+ L- \/ ~$ vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ; A# P0 I4 Z/ M- U
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 \) `7 ^# n1 u0 H
: O5 ?- q8 ?' P9 \8 S' MLet me just rewrite yours:
6 D! g& z' B/ M, q# Y) pIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: h! Y3 l& K( f, ~1 Y
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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9 \& W; V4 |" B; x+ qThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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