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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! U/ t! n' o) Y& A. n
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 o! t7 |% r- I/ U0 g/ k) D* G6 meveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 D: M, X- R' o6 w% G1 J/ C3 M
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Let me just rewrite yours:
6 |! x) q& M9 z" M& MIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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, }* d4 B3 h6 o! {. g1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
2 @2 ~" C. p6 w7 p9 b3 f2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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& p5 u$ T) N* @" M) ~" ^& XThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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% `) [& O5 W: q. o' q, P' |Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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