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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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- h$ h! u4 d6 K ^) r) }& nit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 Y9 |* L. n- p; h' N0 `! Yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 u8 D+ Q+ h( C& i- y; i) s& }9 X% q; j2 o4 _, D7 l# r
Let me just rewrite yours:
) c. y9 ?; z( s, Q3 oIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!! ~6 u/ q! q7 `$ a/ ]
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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! ]$ D& q) P1 DThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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+ k4 y; h4 w( P4 o" G- x2 A1 [# ?Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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