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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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9 A/ v4 `4 s5 \+ X( w' |+ Q0 tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ h. h1 B3 o# w+ H- t. ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ U+ [& s' K. e, ?4 ~# g7 ?! b6 M1 U7 W1 c3 Z8 r
Let me just rewrite yours:
- h% y( x0 ^: N9 x+ L+ QIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 O8 U* S: o+ I- v8 R. p! L' W+ R2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% x: C* a1 S. i) H! c, ]1 ^
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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