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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& A& V$ e& ~6 S1 |6 O/ s
" \( D5 F3 W$ n1 Ait doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
6 P. l( ~* D8 k. Geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; P* E# s* N9 b
4 _$ ?' S; l9 U' |; z, ALet me just rewrite yours:
* E9 {% C5 P( b7 {. N/ gIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 i4 Y. T# q% g
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& O; z6 Q) l I% W' d+ U9 X2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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2 R/ C' e$ Q! Q' u$ \- D$ |2 r1 y8 E. \There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 ~- U, Z* f8 f0 Z' h
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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