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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 G' ~: D1 W! w& _" T. ]: Z) ^everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 k: R/ q0 _1 S* R6 ]; x$ v2 b& G; Q3 j, E+ d
Let me just rewrite yours:
* M' I' a$ z" n* z7 B4 }" aIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ \6 l' k# q7 N
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ |; l& p) n3 t# {" s2 J2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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/ W. I$ B1 G8 B# { R# J6 {There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 \( A W. g; N/ L" I+ q
/ u/ H& V* w) Y& B$ O! H' @Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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