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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:) V9 q2 w! T+ z+ k: B
+ Z4 T' `4 t$ M& n4 D, Wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 ?! B0 ?1 ?+ z9 P9 M/ Z! q7 _everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 @" ?+ D2 }; v% P- `
' r! w. w c( @4 z8 c* ?Let me just rewrite yours:
( m0 X* F* u3 O O2 vIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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. {, _. d" k( g& \4 f1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!" [. d* J" w9 r& O; l% w
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* l. @9 l" r; M5 n5 [& R, Z
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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* h6 k! l% H, iThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( }& `3 i2 p0 U4 A4 Y
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