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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% D' l: ~; ?- ?it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
6 m' g1 I+ p; }4 m- y8 u7 T/ Geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 J" A2 n; d; T u* B+ \' `1 E; m, `4 f( B
Let me just rewrite yours:
5 ]" e# n4 d. t/ F( OIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me& F) T: m6 Z* p0 |4 c
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' X/ i6 P; }1 m2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.# G1 M& F* {& H9 X+ n
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