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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 z" g7 D& O% T' v+ uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) X" i/ d( F7 K
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 D& J# ]4 N9 @7 Z* k8 P/ H2 D& D) t% S( i2 x$ ?! h# v% }$ J5 A
Let me just rewrite yours:
9 e+ Y9 V9 H/ z5 t( Q" q6 IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me; o& J. j+ u" t9 O n
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
1 E+ W" H) b3 s# l- m2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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4 F2 F2 I; q1 w$ I% `Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 T0 S# X' u9 a& a7 [- a( y
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