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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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6 B9 z) S* V& Y$ P2 G) L! Q9 Qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : q! B# W% I0 h- `4 T
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( t+ {. g- J' [- a7 Z
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Let me just rewrite yours:
- Z0 y* c, g, @0 T5 q; Z% mIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!5 `( ?1 h7 {! U" b' {( i2 l
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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* s/ U5 c9 [/ lThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# a3 w, k% i, s6 f2 b/ j
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.4 a1 S7 U5 l% v& U5 @+ U
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