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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:* n6 g3 ?9 e; K* A2 [" g
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ! r6 P( h7 W8 R q7 }* z: a8 u
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 ^! K4 M& ~, o5 j; |: Q
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Let me just rewrite yours:
$ M! ?3 R4 a; m* z, y; qIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
1 [+ S) f4 Q) _2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 Q2 V9 t: p/ }7 S t( c& i& s
$ P) V& G8 M* g( N. w& R& gThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow./ f, z: ~1 a3 d5 ]& R0 Z" ^; `! B
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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