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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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5 ]4 N7 y2 F% h4 ?2 Hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 y9 b: T0 w& n, _; {
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + |4 J* j! U1 I9 @+ h
& `: P" f/ z$ R2 QLet me just rewrite yours:
$ H1 h0 J" F0 E0 h$ fIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 A3 {% r8 i6 G, w- x( o" V1 |
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* c9 w9 o: \8 Q8 A8 V2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 N+ B* R3 J* e+ A8 [
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 D' O6 z9 s- `
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ u4 P- S" N# F1 d# P
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