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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# Z1 k% s& z0 v, oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) `- I/ R. `$ D i
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) k* M; R, X8 p7 B* ?" C
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Let me just rewrite yours:
& q: U/ s7 H9 `2 ~0 E/ VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# B# t. [( @8 J' Z, v! y' @! H9 S, s' J
" T" T! J$ ]$ z$ \3 ?3 d1 S0 |1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: ^% ^% A5 G+ a3 D2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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: _# O, S k0 J# SThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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