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作者: 155220    時間: 2006-4-13 05:17 PM     標題: 小弟的..............”傑作"意見收集區

http://www.26fun.com/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=109868&fpage=1
由於今次是小弟第一次作一些比較長篇的小說,因此希望得到大家寶貴的意見,多謝.
作者: CHECSS    時間: 2006-4-13 07:06 PM

Originally posted by 155220 at 2006/4/13 17:17:
http://www.26fun.com/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=109868&fpage=1
由於今次是小弟第一次作一些比較長篇的小說,因此希望得到大家寶貴的意見,多謝.
too short , 內容過分簡單 , 47分
作者: 155220    時間: 2006-4-13 07:08 PM

Originally posted by CHECSS at 2006-4-13 19:06:

too short , 內容過分簡單 , 47分
可以點改善?
作者: CHECSS    時間: 2006-4-13 07:18 PM

Originally posted by 155220 at 2006/4/13 19:08:


可以點改善?
long d , 內容多d , 複雜 d
作者: 155220    時間: 2006-4-13 07:18 PM

Originally posted by CHECSS at 2006-4-13 19:18:

long d , 內容多d , 複雜 d
每一章寫幾多字好?
作者: CHECSS    時間: 2006-4-13 07:23 PM

Originally posted by 155220 at 2006/4/13 19:18:


每一章寫幾多字好?
about this at least :
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作者: 155220    時間: 2006-4-13 07:23 PM

Originally posted by CHECSS at 2006-4-13 19:23:

about this at least :
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咁寫幾多章好?
作者: CHECSS    時間: 2006-4-13 07:24 PM

Originally posted by 155220 at 2006/4/13 19:23:


咁寫幾多章好?
don't mind this
作者: CHECSS    時間: 2006-4-13 07:24 PM

Originally posted by CHECSS at 2006/4/13 19:24:

don't mind this
just you like
作者: yorker    時間: 2006-4-14 09:06 AM

歷史故事好難寫得好架~
因為個結局通常都已經有左規限~
作者: 155220    時間: 2006-4-14 09:10 AM

Originally posted by yorker at 2006-4-14 09:06:
歷史故事好難寫得好架~
因為個結局通常都已經有左規限~
咁應該跟幾多成好?
作者: beginner    時間: 2006-4-14 04:05 PM

講真﹐睇完都無咩墮入感
作者: 155220    時間: 2006-4-14 04:22 PM

Originally posted by beginner at 2006-4-14 16:05:
講真﹐睇完都無咩墮入感
咁可以點改善?
作者: CHECSS    時間: 2006-4-14 07:14 PM

Originally posted by 155220 at 2006/4/14 09:10:


咁應該跟幾多成好?
no mind , but the ending should be the same with history
作者: CHECSS    時間: 2006-4-14 07:15 PM

Originally posted by beginner at 2006/4/14 16:05:
講真﹐睇完都無咩墮入感

作者: 155220    時間: 2006-4-14 08:18 PM

Originally posted by CHECSS at 2006-4-14 19:14:

no mind , but the ending should be the same with history
中途天馬行空都唔緊要?
作者: yorker    時間: 2006-4-14 10:09 PM

Originally posted by 155220 at 2006-4-14 08:18 PM:


中途天馬行空都唔緊要?
反正小說都係老作ge姐,天馬行空絕對唔緊要啦,
但問題係唔可以過份誇張囉~

同埋有高潮起伏都好重要~ 你個故事太「平鋪直述」喇~
&  d角色好似都入唔到個故事入面~
作者: 155220    時間: 2006-4-14 10:13 PM

Originally posted by yorker at 2006-4-14 22:09:


反正小說都係老作ge姐,天馬行空...
因為今次係小弟既第一次,加上小弟既中文水平真係一般,所以........

我再寫幾章,然後你再幫我睇下,ok?
作者: 155220    時間: 2006-4-17 02:27 PM

Originally posted by yorker at 2006-4-14 22:09:


反正小說都係老作ge姐,天馬行空...
可以點高潮起伏法?
作者: CHECSS    時間: 2006-4-17 04:06 PM

Originally posted by 155220 at 2006/4/17 14:27:


可以點高潮起伏法?
see see
http://www.26fun.com/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=83094&fpage=1
作者: 155220    時間: 2006-4-17 04:12 PM

Originally posted by CHECSS at 2006-4-17 16:06:

see see
http://www.26fun.com/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=83094&fpage=1
thx
有無C仔你親自執筆既大作?
作者: CHECSS    時間: 2006-4-17 04:41 PM

Originally posted by 155220 at 2006/4/17 16:12:


thx
有無C仔你親自執筆既大作?
none
i will write at the paper ge .....................
作者: 155220    時間: 2006-4-17 04:42 PM

Originally posted by CHECSS at 2006-4-17 16:41:

none
i will write at the paper ge .....................
oic
作者: 155220    時間: 2006-5-5 08:54 PM

推一推
作者: 獅子博士    時間: 2006-5-25 08:16 AM

太短啦
未夠中point




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