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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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6 @$ x8 P2 ]* E% i/ R0 xit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& n( ~7 \, @+ N3 I4 Z. Q6 _& Yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / v9 S) {- B1 G: }1 L, s! \6 N. ~, I9 e* J0 Z, t# R6 @8 P7 a
Let me just rewrite yours:
: h Q, b: p% g, `) y2 AIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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, e- B t3 j* ~) T4 |4 r1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 M/ Z8 }7 h8 ~3 f& z. e
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 m+ U" d/ U' B( C
( O3 j% ~8 z* h# DThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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6 m) x3 s% u: }Gretz. |
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