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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and % P, y# a+ P; ?( S& P8 s* a2 [
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , h+ ~, m. B- u) @. ?# D
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Let me just rewrite yours:
3 ?. N V: y! B7 O6 D, S) z3 X" hIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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6 }4 g' d6 L! `9 U. A1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing! i# R6 ?4 `- p$ k# D c
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 K, l; m3 g" ]6 K( I
. z* O: J2 r1 aThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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