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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * a; Y, H6 p+ v! X
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 \8 `6 b# Z* Q' g! ~& G0 T2 m2 I+ s. s0 f0 k& D
Let me just rewrite yours:
. c) i5 J* _& S2 L- {9 K( aIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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! S0 I, N A: t9 m1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, p+ @& M, F9 X' L
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% S( a6 H) _+ K0 N1 V9 u$ a
, t2 D6 T7 C) \! K6 s( G ?0 RThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., N; v: L6 r9 L6 {8 e: V: F# L. {
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