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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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6 i$ z8 T% E7 F0 [4 l1 N# Qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 D9 `; {& a; p, X
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. y- \, @8 E2 X) Z% e
. D+ X+ g& I/ k$ ?Let me just rewrite yours:
% Y5 z: V. g' G7 d( b% x! {, X0 `It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 g& x r- P) @% R3 ]
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* f5 {$ c% z- o. e+ H2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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. F" X5 k/ Q& x5 j+ oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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3 _* K# c/ y8 |& S9 o9 DThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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