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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 _ I' \& g& y, l. P
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: i7 W- n1 \. Weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 P- g8 W9 K1 Z4 n
6 f( H2 i% u( Z* Q* _8 B9 G: S# XLet me just rewrite yours:& E G# o% C0 O) y5 ^
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' b# D) u x9 `& U* H f7 _3 {' \
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ S; y9 x0 L! T# ?2 M! M$ ]2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.' b5 J1 V" E- w' v6 I9 \
& Q" T# a8 |+ B0 x( pThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.4 i S9 U5 H$ X9 G1 s) y3 R- n
1 D) n4 } u% `6 |4 @Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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