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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 O" X! R: N; J9 E# g
! i$ j3 ^2 [" ~; ^/ e$ m0 Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' l9 R- H2 Q) q8 u0 W3 meveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & C( u- ], B+ y1 @
- t' `/ L4 y: h FLet me just rewrite yours:
% d a+ G: ] i4 r% H5 M( KIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 u7 K" J8 S& J8 b
( L6 g5 B/ d9 ~1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; X" }& }5 t8 `( b4 i' [* a4 K5 ]
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% p) d0 F: i5 q- F* \, P5 V
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* O ?7 u) {4 A& C
f A1 `: T, ?" S7 I' BThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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