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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and . o; M7 h, e* e: w3 ?* r. z- M
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. c: g4 j8 s; `0 ~ j
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Let me just rewrite yours:
) ?+ l/ W0 m6 }0 S4 |It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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0 J+ k2 F( U% Z' Y* Z1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; `; P- q( N4 h7 v2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 D6 [2 }( |& V+ g) M3 m4 b
0 m- ^$ H3 u- C9 ]" }: TThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.( M4 a: [0 P+ O: R/ i' l
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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