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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& s& T) r7 J# d5 Q& m# X( S
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* Y! g) S0 {& qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , v2 n8 m1 x. [; f! b% J* y9 m; @* E; B5 [; H+ E
Let me just rewrite yours:
3 Z: F: A7 P% {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) K1 B, n1 e) j
; Z$ y' H: k2 Y- t1 M% e. X+ ]& _1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 k" h1 w% L4 T3 b; l! m- K
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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/ b+ ^0 ]$ p" e/ B; p( K, OThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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3 p Z1 B' `6 yThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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