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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: [0 i$ z" U) |- w! c+ {6 P# V
$ h% R8 f7 k1 \+ k% @0 j# Z, Sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' d' w( V8 E9 |: |everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; F; u% c9 ^: n' f5 p% f; w' |
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Let me just rewrite yours:6 W2 F' Q& P4 \. O# _: ~
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ n% E8 I% d. U' l5 K9 V" [
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; W1 w+ ?1 \+ ?
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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0 i5 E' J* q' F. L' V5 rThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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