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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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9 Z ^* _' i A+ U; yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
) Y8 L+ ^+ c6 veveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * F, I7 S$ \4 q" b& l0 O& a f+ d9 g) q+ R" U7 a m
Let me just rewrite yours:' o- b: h n8 h( g1 ?4 f- K
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& p/ w- w& W& f' s) P8 X$ z2 ]) X: _2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ o S/ x/ r% S1 s6 y
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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