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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& l( s, `* d* a4 U1 q% \7 A
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * t7 m E( l B1 c' V' M/ _5 ~
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - A' K! w3 S8 P# z* v; E8 ~) _9 V- _+ T" Y- @1 _' N/ P
Let me just rewrite yours:
; v% U8 T( F! O, rIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 _( v ?2 }: x) s1 o
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 }( W- I* l9 z7 y6 B1 [6 d/ {
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ \; l; D9 R5 Y, L0 ^5 I( O
3 K- k X. ^: @9 m' zThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) e# ]% i. d% ]1 Y' o. V. O! Z
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ H8 \2 o$ B# q8 _- V
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