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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, M* K6 ?0 w4 U( ?& g* W5 ?
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 ^/ j" Y2 Q x% Eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 M# X* n. h1 k' R. O7 b
3 U) e' h6 M7 lLet me just rewrite yours:
) x& l# d$ v; ?2 j! }4 E, |It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 R4 j) j5 N7 I! t( i; F
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# a) F& I4 s, f, d q5 P5 r5 T; b
& _& g8 ?5 @3 C9 f# r" u& QThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.& j+ z y, L- _. R) G3 n
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