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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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, C1 F. N8 C( git doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , x9 [+ O$ G: |& d& s( L2 F
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) t0 @ D3 b8 X9 T
8 M9 I2 j l3 J- l: g2 c! jLet me just rewrite yours:
& e; S4 k6 q. L6 O9 wIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, S4 q7 [* ~; N6 I+ G: q4 B
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ C, \( Y. B- N" H: g, g
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 R/ S2 N+ F) k6 L- W6 h) r
( u) T7 [, N( y f' C$ E8 X$ A: t4 lThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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, Y% N$ V* d& p) G t& t% SThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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