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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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5 h4 r. w& @. a0 d" |, X5 u1 kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ! _# Z* W7 s! ^2 {- j
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 N- m3 H- s4 y7 h# I' |! ~" T+ p2 c
Let me just rewrite yours:
& ?5 G" ]5 r, CIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- {. m4 b# `9 r
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" @6 V' K9 O" O& g/ z& U2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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. T% x' _5 M2 S2 ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." m t9 Y0 P' _( W. ?5 A
2 z( I- t0 s0 ^* G9 S2 I, T* AThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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