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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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/ O! Y, g* ^" v/ d$ Sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - f' O5 \, Q# j, T; \
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 o, V! o& X) K9 [
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Let me just rewrite yours:
- [4 Z5 f, I7 o4 ~' O' W. ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me7 F1 e7 J# R6 O6 Z8 |; m
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* U N, K( d t) m0 A' a' r' Y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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- R/ {1 P1 U$ M2 P; \There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# Y8 k6 h5 j7 p% G' X' o
- Z, }; Q. r6 R4 a9 v0 oThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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