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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ O! f& o0 e/ S/ ? O
7 B! u+ b; W e' @6 K) Qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 U# k/ u: K C1 K+ d/ ?everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 }4 n; x+ n$ o0 E1 J" ]
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Let me just rewrite yours:
+ {, ^8 ^, ?: o8 ]It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me; ^& t* _1 @# Q( y
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 Y G0 E' e6 H% `& T
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 |6 `* w4 E( L; SThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 N* v7 j, W+ C# o* z( t
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., ]+ q8 Z/ [) J) o% ^
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