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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 c8 \6 s) M. L! I# j0 Y. P7 Iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + C3 L2 K: ~' K8 e" t6 d
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! L0 g. u* c: B& a
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Let me just rewrite yours:
N b" b& ]% n; M. FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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& _% }, U& v5 i. k) }( [! }1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- P- y0 o! Q' G2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. U8 n2 c* Z: M% B# G2 ~
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. _5 Q( o8 ?2 } m6 E1 T$ [: o
0 M8 j/ G" b( d; I7 q$ b& RThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.# T0 g. x V$ G2 V9 }7 V X
% `4 _: y3 A- s& aGretz. |
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