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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 @! k# y r- U9 R# ~4 p( ?2 R
! I; o/ P* U6 X7 H g* Mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 u& r! f% X+ z* _1 g$ _everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - ?: m0 d4 [8 `: u: ~- W# s" n% u4 C c. p; N. ?; j
Let me just rewrite yours:
$ o4 V* N+ P% }% ?* D" m3 OIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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! O+ c4 q- b& k- j& D1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# A9 `3 j; k- R! G7 a2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.$ o( [; f0 | D
f5 ?! V3 o# `; v4 S5 Z; V+ ~1 _" JThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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/ z- ~' Z- [$ C) c, {2 Y. {Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 d1 d8 z+ y& P9 C
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