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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: X' l* C1 x) J' ?5 B$ t
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ W7 K, B% F3 J" Reveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ [; a- A# V& F. Y- D3 A
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Let me just rewrite yours:
( P7 E7 J8 N i4 `It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me9 a7 t+ E' Q( M; c- O. J
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, K# G! |/ W0 Z2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ e. e8 G. h, W* U+ U" [
" Q2 D s l) u4 W5 {! QThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.& A2 q2 j* [9 o( \
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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