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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# z, H' W q2 y0 i J& t3 Teveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! E2 |, Q% J4 x$ f3 m. O; [, d8 R
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Let me just rewrite yours:
1 Q5 o5 h* o' PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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5 i" t# J9 ~) {7 S1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, ], o& k* R9 ~- [* E2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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! | x4 ?( u o, I. m* Y* OThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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