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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 B" E. n/ T/ ]( b- [, q
; y6 ?7 I1 l; _9 Qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
p. h2 F+ r1 L' I- Weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 G) k- r0 l! ^/ O8 U0 j7 N( C ~; ^3 E7 p2 w$ e: H! K3 H
Let me just rewrite yours:6 n" P( [- x0 A
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: B9 K' I* s8 ]% I3 F2 |
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
|" r5 ^# U: |$ w2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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, T( _4 G! @, }! OThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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( ]; l( i V* e5 KThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- t- w2 x& Z, _2 h: v
' w$ A* o" v- Y3 I2 m& a( CGretz. |
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