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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 i. H2 n/ v* G2 N6 l/ O: D
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 Z+ T! t5 x1 D6 X% Y" Teveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 [6 D Z4 }( t5 Q8 e8 b4 I2 j! G7 b' o' U* C' F
Let me just rewrite yours:
, R5 v/ x5 D" f, B1 o yIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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0 m" L/ V: m# i% b2 `: |( Z1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; S: ?, P9 Y* ~
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 S! N5 r. E* E$ r. K9 [ w
& u% A! o! U9 O m+ d6 fThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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' K$ Y& J& q' I8 w) @Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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