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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:9 m% S' v! M. U9 @
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everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * o: J! {* I0 H) b( i) p$ H0 ~) G. @1 X, f8 q
Let me just rewrite yours:
( r: }( h9 g- l( f) x0 sIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) d9 r' N- f1 M5 t) y( ]
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. | Y! l7 ?2 F5 P- X" t0 X. v
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow./ U4 g3 z# ]/ J& O
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." H8 E! j6 ?9 |; n
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