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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:6 z" V- E" M' R: l+ z: @6 Y
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) B7 H4 R5 G# z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " }: m6 j u+ c- `% k, j
! i+ |, w# k+ ~. q: f" `Let me just rewrite yours:6 R) [! L# C; x$ W& S! K* {
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: Q7 E% P1 d4 `$ @. U2 }$ ]' Y$ w: n
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" W t$ [: ^' m0 ]. I2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% W% E/ \6 \- z" B6 c: U
! z& _6 X6 v' l# p4 B9 oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.6 v1 b" z0 n8 p9 O
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