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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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2 U! i$ d& \& G3 tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* b, ]+ T+ Y, W% Leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 ?& @; a: H( U9 q- N+ B: o
& m% ?, G) h/ y, ]( ILet me just rewrite yours:/ E+ ~* [; l: a9 p: F
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 r- \5 K) q! ^) k8 r
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- n2 x; [( j( E3 F% A; l/ A# F
: z; G4 b1 h2 e( h3 V# \& H0 IThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 i1 M- R4 Y' v O ^7 h7 j9 j7 q- e
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% g% R5 ?' k' P0 o1 Z9 e' R3 a
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