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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# l9 V1 S( }- G* k, r* q4 _
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 ]( ~& \# a7 Veveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. q4 |* b) i# Z4 {% ?+ p; h) n8 H+ R, @
Let me just rewrite yours:" Z& j3 Q: N* {! \6 u( m( s5 s
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" v/ q5 U4 C5 i: W: u& V
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& r; M% y. X% w5 G1 A* b& j& W2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( k) N3 n8 a; t" y( l
, k U* [1 X0 d1 mThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% K; r+ Y/ u& `! B
" X0 [* \2 j* A- B) b) F1 _Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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