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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + m- P1 P' b' g: r
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . [# h. {: `! P2 z/ h
( A; t4 U4 a$ b5 s& \1 sLet me just rewrite yours:
) c4 r9 T2 b$ h6 Y; O9 i" L- dIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 Q/ U# s1 Q2 U$ i8 _3 V; s, q( b8 b7 c
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) [( L$ H& F, a& Q' \9 R; ^ u4 @
" Y0 I5 n! ]- F4 fThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 U* Q- o: i I, b( W0 |4 S$ S
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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