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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM: _0 t7 a9 i; ?* O, d$ J1 R8 l* l
8 H; v# T( f* G# J% r1 z; ~1 pit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 n# j; d o Q; W5 K" `everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 N" W& V8 e3 P0 I N* T$ M$ `7 l
$ j' ^# k1 K( J4 e; d+ L* i8 gLet me just rewrite yours:5 c& }$ J. W! d& N
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me+ l7 G2 R; v$ z
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 W* i& `) u. u3 P5 G" `2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( a2 T+ O4 M: I+ i1 [# o, f! y
6 d$ s% ^( x' m R) t6 kThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# [% R) Q0 J, P% N$ U/ Y2 S
! y* o: k" o0 f$ m/ d, `. uThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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