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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% y" n) H, Q: v7 M- tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 d0 {& `7 x( h- M- yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! c' s+ N, g7 q3 A+ I
5 L$ Y9 l& n5 b: ~) P2 oLet me just rewrite yours:
9 q/ s. V! p$ s# |* |; ZIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me1 T! B9 g( u# o6 g: B h- f
, \9 B' @4 `: e0 S5 h1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 ~2 G( M5 N. H6 q3 e
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% n# m! e F4 M, ?0 ?6 T# ?1 i5 h
6 s. E( {, i, X6 Q; AThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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* {4 u9 U- K6 u7 eThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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