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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- f' D) \& _# v8 J; k3 M, Y
$ Z1 w+ p8 F- ^5 c+ P! k* U/ l: fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 Z* R, G. s* Z/ |$ Z, aeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; M' |2 l% U$ r- M1 b: g p3 T- k/ N, ?! u6 b
Let me just rewrite yours:
% m# |( m/ w# {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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9 b, s- A( f1 s1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 j& p3 I6 @, A1 V2 S' H7 A
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: O: z S" ]! n1 x2 ?( V( o
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 |( A: A: i- Z7 \
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