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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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0 ~: `6 [2 a1 iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% W! A9 @- y& Feveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( x! L' E" {, S8 K
1 j B2 l$ y) J, U: `1 KLet me just rewrite yours:
0 }5 o1 m. ^9 Z$ V M( UIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: R! V, t! \9 i$ X, y+ M" Z- u+ w9 V5 B
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
8 h, U6 @9 ]" w$ v, T2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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6 @& N. K( ^& D7 |( F+ v& TThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 |; f1 f) H: @! b/ G
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.6 S& r2 o+ c' `
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