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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% e4 D, e" T0 y! L, Zit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 h" s6 T+ N6 `: ^8 z. l/ @) C1 _+ ]- o
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ |4 ?0 A( {' |
k$ x4 C, O- t# n3 QLet me just rewrite yours:
g9 j) {1 i' w7 P% Z& [It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ G. p3 W/ a5 B
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 E7 I! e! W! B6 \" x0 n2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.$ A$ _0 Y7 S9 W# ?8 o& o# _
' n2 k4 l( X, C6 X2 o9 BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.! x0 j: C) c; G9 A+ W0 g
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