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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ; P: Y$ [$ V* z% W
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 H8 g' E. I: q- V, n: P
" Y* O& q5 V4 y1 P$ FLet me just rewrite yours:( S/ i! u/ E5 l$ I0 I
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me H9 `% X$ ]$ G* h5 _( n$ I8 Q
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!' ?7 z( x5 y; g5 E- y0 b1 P
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 I1 s6 l! q6 `7 |- B
7 A# F7 u% r0 v% DThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 P. H4 G6 O- i
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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