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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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8 I5 c7 B+ t. D0 ]- t: G* a8 \it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' a7 b: z5 A, t- T$ e! q3 a
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( l' m1 ^* [! N4 C! |4 l5 V" h) |/ ^' O A7 J/ u( T. r
Let me just rewrite yours:
$ [8 M4 ]. W+ [It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!$ k( w8 h8 R, I2 h: x3 O
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., M, n& G z$ H5 K" N+ e+ K# Y
]4 U: u! s) H/ s1 tThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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