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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 { `6 B( J/ I/ h+ g
5 M( }# `! A0 I. P7 ]it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and % Y) [* d a! e$ I+ ~' B1 s
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - `8 z6 }; {9 w+ m$ }
1 V% j1 [2 u* x6 e8 H YLet me just rewrite yours:
P% p) O$ z$ CIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: I1 t# }6 `2 m" j
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 X1 Z0 w+ _# f9 S
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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0 O+ z" [% E4 k! @# e5 R! LThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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