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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 W: n3 A% D- c; Nit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: G: m1 }1 H, Ceveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # }/ q3 U( P& g! i/ s: X
2 S9 c3 y( i: W8 v6 Z: o" G0 ZLet me just rewrite yours:
* f& ^3 X {* pIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me2 U: M5 p) u- k6 C1 j1 H' p2 w3 d
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing! Y* W9 [ U; `$ i) n7 V
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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: d' i0 {4 }& o1 N9 @8 ?) wThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' N7 f/ O; \$ m+ P( r
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