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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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: R" f: t1 Y% m$ Fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* c4 F( N3 ?$ Y$ F' n4 Jeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) ~7 t2 v- t3 D4 f; _' q0 r
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Let me just rewrite yours:
' Q3 Q( e O# e* J0 K" RIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!0 y9 [6 J3 y" n8 X1 d
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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, @0 L/ i- o/ Q, Z6 O7 ~There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 p9 r0 O/ r1 s1 c% ^7 y0 @3 C
1 w2 V+ `: P2 D- E( {9 _1 o- LThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.6 J; C5 I* x8 h7 i" c8 l
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