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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# V! E: r: u, ]- X( kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 M7 D% J( m; G5 Reveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) ?- v; H; P# c" W7 T/ A) z" D q
$ |" @" K A2 vLet me just rewrite yours:7 O* o8 s- y9 x: F/ E% A
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me( b9 x; P* [" B. i
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 E8 y: @/ P# G6 L+ `& G
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" X, ^% ?3 B$ C4 c1 ?% n& b, LThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% T6 p1 {" i9 X2 [
T4 H# U( y# M& JThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; w+ ^3 h6 @$ W# H, Z
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