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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# F/ I- Z h, B. E% Dit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 w+ A1 U8 G( Ueveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & |) w9 w& L' V$ b6 E1 q6 R
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Let me just rewrite yours:! n( W& Y; C% h+ P6 V9 p$ Q
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1 d7 E9 w0 r; b6 _" D1 S% ^, z1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!4 k. Q. K o* V k
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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+ i, f* k( W6 }5 L8 d' qThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." L; A v- i) D1 ~0 h
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