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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- l; h; `; ?- t/ q: J6 y
$ C C5 B' h" q9 S+ d% l6 S0 [it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ S. I3 I" T, L2 ?. w' F1 G
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' e/ o- l! s/ A! y6 O* ?8 x1 w; Q& m7 E. i
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It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me; g" g+ f! r0 o7 H2 H6 D
9 d2 Z) f8 Q7 O0 A2 ?) X, N1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% e6 p9 b8 p6 ^/ p2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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