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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - s% Z$ e3 k- x3 Z6 `: R( ~, o- {
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' T/ n! u) C, v
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Let me just rewrite yours:
$ B. |9 \/ k" R/ X% }; X4 YIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) m5 B# O3 v6 y7 \3 S' @" E1 z
! r& {9 U6 }0 e+ p3 ~/ m1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" _8 b( t9 C. n& a; { i# v2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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$ N& @+ i }9 [. Q9 DThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." t6 p5 ?; G( G4 I, G
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% U v6 r* W4 M/ K& k. H! ^
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