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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 v% s) A5 P+ z' Z) r8 R( b) severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! S0 j5 L1 E- O) N! a) ]4 L. r
$ N2 d: ]5 N& p3 K D" t9 ELet me just rewrite yours:
: \$ u# V* o. {' z' \$ \It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' O/ I6 I. ` v! V! Z2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., b( y' a3 ~/ |$ f
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 f6 Y& a- q, e9 v
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