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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:* f& @. z/ ?. p4 l& s0 n/ q9 Y
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 l1 Z: @$ i& w& I1 j6 a. o
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ e3 p' N5 B0 U* b* t. q
L/ k+ g6 E2 D9 VLet me just rewrite yours:
5 I, [; W+ V( k0 O* Z* S: sIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: o4 p$ {: ~5 w
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 }; M$ o. m( @! S9 g" i) O+ ]
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* L' u8 P3 J g4 O
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 F E* Q4 E5 e. m
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* C0 L, |" a/ r* n
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