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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : t+ T$ ^) ?2 x& g; C
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. J4 o1 R$ n( U8 }, B% z9 t$ f
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Let me just rewrite yours:: x6 X' D5 D+ ?8 J) O
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% b5 K# t+ M/ k2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. a2 [3 J+ j" J4 m; }; ?2 n
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." z5 p! d0 R7 `. S# c, \
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