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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; z1 z8 A# q. a4 g2 O
) u4 t/ u; z) u: f6 Pit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' M0 K9 m, v4 U/ v( F1 B
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # e, ?: X7 B5 G, b# b9 g! t
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Let me just rewrite yours:8 J1 O2 B+ M6 r3 s9 ]
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 F' n: v& f' d" A3 r
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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. A# s4 Z. y( w) j% C* HThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow./ W+ Z# r4 U# F2 D6 f. f
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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