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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 k: e6 u! R2 U, }, |+ z- b
) @" p+ T) D6 M5 X- R V6 D7 N5 [it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# T; n% Y. s. M% S( b/ severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + P; X& k# A$ ]/ n2 _ Z1 |: K; [4 D/ i. F7 p! v8 g" G$ X
Let me just rewrite yours:
+ ?7 f- f* u0 Y. |7 zIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* p& N% ~: J; ~/ V. X2 W
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ `' l, _8 E( z& t# M1 ]
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. c* V7 v9 \5 O* {/ y
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) O) y. m2 q8 y; U! a
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ \% G4 ^- f9 Z# l; b' ]2 Z
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