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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& F4 d- L" B3 W, u8 A' R' g
. x7 N2 G0 _$ l5 z3 Z4 ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# k8 @) N0 M/ W9 A6 ?everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 ]( s3 Y9 u7 O; l, d. F
y! O. c6 ~7 E" R CLet me just rewrite yours:
% z" G3 S3 a7 j$ zIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 P4 i) r X$ u' {
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!$ y: a7 f+ M2 ?8 G# E! F
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.& ^; m* D6 Z. Y# y0 ]* U; H& g
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ C1 S x4 D! m! ^4 I3 A
# m4 O5 S ~' _6 U/ t& \1 aThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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