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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:" w5 j$ F8 r& m8 ?2 L8 G6 L
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - z. Y4 w4 a' X4 ~& N7 P
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 h, r6 q' v4 M& u- S( f* L& k; u- a. e5 x1 v
Let me just rewrite yours:
) G1 T& w/ r, n7 r! cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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$ G* q D7 |2 M/ I, E1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
7 p7 S2 ]$ P7 i x8 \- T2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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. ^7 x7 i: Z6 i( pThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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, P& {/ Z" U+ N# HThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. m& t! K& c5 {
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