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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 u7 C$ y! g: @
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ \- J: p: c. N/ N" z' i1 {; n- o* ~. o; h) x: O
Let me just rewrite yours:
- f8 T! \4 n3 @# A' WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
z1 z4 u5 Z4 T0 J$ l: T/ X- n/ ?2 ^2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% e% ?, m X) N# Z" u& k2 v& e# c
' v1 W2 P2 J/ [7 {+ e- g2 XThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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