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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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9 F- r! K4 [( }8 q7 E y; Kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: b. O A b8 J M6 ]; geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 d4 u! I3 a! x$ H% e& ?% b7 }
5 |1 _' Z H) Z" u: |Let me just rewrite yours:
$ Y C( h( m$ K) x- ]3 xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( @# {" p$ o# x9 ~" O2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.! Y/ C7 H3 G0 x2 M0 _2 ^
5 K* ^: T! G! J2 y& pThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: I5 e/ |4 ?# r3 o2 g
$ x* g6 R0 N, ]Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' O/ ?8 T4 ]* E9 F! E
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