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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% `, J5 A+ |. M; N1 o+ a0 lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # Z, {/ x. s) X* D3 b) m
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , g3 b+ R* L* M/ P( R" |+ E, \) r' X4 ], U
Let me just rewrite yours:
2 v1 {0 @0 f3 @; h+ ]5 \It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' L* U0 z" h. ~2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.# i- E" \& S' P% i+ `
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