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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 w0 o/ G; Q W; }' L( T- X
0 B; x- Q& M% W, ^2 v/ Bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / O8 j/ A9 \8 P/ g# ]
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & V) _. c$ s1 e5 N* Q3 A ~" l" r" h! |1 d4 p- A# t
Let me just rewrite yours:
7 K3 x' l4 R. {4 ~! K# }) e+ X2 YIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me K1 L7 `8 N' T+ s# `
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
8 O- h, g" A/ O) J' N2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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( i* @& j3 E: A7 s& g" r2 dThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; k% w1 f; _6 A4 h! e9 eThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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