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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, |5 x1 f) J0 |. N+ l
8 k( p9 J7 K8 {! O7 Vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
d7 O6 r" w9 I. }! ?8 Qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : f; K& Q$ G5 q/ T+ o+ ]. ~* H. w
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Let me just rewrite yours:# s. a/ h4 v3 A7 T+ U# a* e( @
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ {0 X1 n( p, b) {
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& E7 B$ H ~9 ?! o5 P1 `2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.! p* I' o" J6 ?
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 z2 ]1 J3 l5 Q! i; [
# _6 x* x4 p3 m8 i/ VThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 ~. c! f- M+ G1 }- {
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