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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* Y* u# x( t' geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & u, _" } o' N! W S
- |1 c! c9 q. Q; zLet me just rewrite yours:
, s3 ?2 J, S' G% y6 ?6 t- H) HIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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+ m8 A. n/ a _8 b! v3 G8 d1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% j6 |& F0 Z, ] Y( P0 H) O2 }+ X2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 l: q& G* R$ \& g
# v- `' O0 A3 V) YThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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