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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! q2 d9 G* }8 s; u7 N* Y% l3 _+ k- o
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. I. f0 k* a. c4 Z% y* Deveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # ]8 D9 a `8 S9 M* L, Q8 b# _
0 g1 O5 {6 [8 x3 q' D6 e3 H! k9 T; |Let me just rewrite yours:
% H3 G9 f! g ]# x3 j6 ZIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- o$ f2 ~. t5 @/ X( M. |: K
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- C8 a3 E8 V B& E( j; |' s
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) y; n, x2 a; Z, R! c+ o
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* n7 M( v6 V( V2 y1 u8 y
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