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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM: @7 Z, ^, e. t6 K
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 A/ v1 V, q5 heveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & s% G4 J* }- I; u& ~+ [0 x0 J2 J9 L9 _, W- N0 g: W: M9 H
Let me just rewrite yours:
( w8 k$ t+ i$ u8 {" u# }It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: ?& b; v$ C" I4 ~2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 E1 h" C. ]7 w* F% s5 X) z
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; y2 H# s6 u7 }5 e) e6 YThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% [, d6 ^* y* D
5 l& X. H' k' h" i% `# q- |$ EGretz. |
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