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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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; g6 Q8 [% ]. d1 d z- Qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 4 w4 z, S' a- @# h. [8 Z; X
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % k7 @7 v/ F1 S3 c7 C2 [0 J8 q
: t& F1 G& o1 q* p* \7 z7 lLet me just rewrite yours:5 U. R+ Y6 ?. Q! T
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- n4 l( y& \ L k8 F" Q
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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$ l2 w% a: r: b3 t) z8 [There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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& l/ o2 M. q4 P# W4 x3 ?* w; dThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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