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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; ]9 \ t& J; C8 E6 v* K9 f/ e* ~
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 e- F% Y7 ~+ s8 ]8 l
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' ]' d2 h1 ]- e3 F" K- A5 @% V0 q" \. H/ \+ f3 Z
Let me just rewrite yours:
) {3 Q$ Y1 L2 U6 t6 bIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 U% _1 X& _6 m" h# [+ f+ W8 J+ ]8 H
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.! ~" r T) C3 w9 p1 W
1 Q! |, q: d2 `/ {+ ]! KThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 Z5 I9 G3 N% {+ W' @: I4 ]4 ?& g+ z
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.1 k; ^3 U5 i, ^3 @8 s* L" N
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