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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; Z, ?6 a A/ ^1 r/ z5 N# e
. k. |: B/ V4 Z' Q# Y" _; Vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 {3 Q; Z* R% u$ x$ U
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; j" E, \; A ?& B" ^+ m; w
+ x2 `/ p% n) O) yLet me just rewrite yours:
! | G) N: p! ]. a; f; W6 c5 D3 XIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 C* Q$ r3 x8 d2 M2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" ]6 S5 }. s; O6 g4 vThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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" p' M" j/ B C3 CThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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