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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:* B( N5 V) X) R% [3 h' J0 f
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
v- K. o- g* c# A2 Ueveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 W; {+ {8 v8 E& H
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Let me just rewrite yours:
u5 L* v9 Y* VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# F/ d$ d6 b$ j
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.& Z) ^1 k+ H, J$ ^" t" r
9 p5 `* O# A6 [; y" \8 AThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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