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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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: K% l+ ]0 w( ]- n U: mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
U7 e" \2 I& ^- Ueveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " ]% t" e5 ]; M# S" _" b. h
7 t5 I$ O6 ^4 s. H& KLet me just rewrite yours:
9 c S3 w4 y- i+ ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, P7 M3 [& j" B9 K, s$ v4 \ d8 D2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. i, a0 z* [! k
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.4 m5 j3 c; e$ }
( A4 L) ?, g) O! `% m, r; PThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. B( d/ E' Z0 i) ?. M5 f9 w
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