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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% ~! c# |4 O* g/ reveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 I$ _8 P7 p3 j0 l0 G
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Let me just rewrite yours:
* V ^% n2 c4 X7 BIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# f9 p7 x* {7 t, Z
9 t& ~7 v7 W& w( i {1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ n( u6 x, y- E' B( p& b3 R+ L
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 S; c7 E1 _7 m6 B/ y4 D
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' M$ c0 @" v# u1 k. f
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