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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 k( |! i8 ?1 Q( Z0 f: i5 o- r
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 V# |+ W& Y2 \5 i7 U0 X
/ w4 A# m4 d% R6 s2 [Let me just rewrite yours:
7 V5 x. M! _! T) L7 j, g9 AIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me9 f, V9 M8 ~" x& u
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing! r/ }! a) | U% I# e; Q, ]
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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% ]; T& q: t7 ]+ P% FThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# w( T; R- m* \/ G/ S7 [% S) k
, X6 e/ z1 F" k' I' hThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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