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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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& g8 V* m3 {, M6 dit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * |( O: @8 f% I+ R4 U: [8 l
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & S8 s1 [) m- t) ?( W/ ~$ R8 I( v K, i* E
Let me just rewrite yours:
# _2 @; x3 M6 y1 V* x$ q+ V, xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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: e% i# F! T+ x- m# P1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% i4 Y. w( M( P3 Z1 M6 v- z
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.6 }0 R+ U# H4 C& p
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