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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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D3 J* B* r- Y+ T' V3 S1 l- u. Vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; }! O( p, {; v l: p2 {- Ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 k4 @$ w4 e+ b; n- u/ x
0 S' H `6 m! `5 Y3 x4 W( ]Let me just rewrite yours:
: m4 ^5 N1 O* Y$ TIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me7 u6 x6 ~9 i9 P% L4 f" C& ]- ~
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; r/ ~; Z6 h% c1 T2 g4 z2 n2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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: \, F! t/ @4 j/ t1 N! r, D: x6 @/ mThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 t: [- [' Q8 `( k7 c
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