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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:9 N8 c" R3 ~2 J3 }/ y& Y
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ j& A* y) d5 c# v8 f2 w2 T
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & I& H* I2 V( L, O) [' j
; E8 w9 z w7 ?8 PLet me just rewrite yours:2 |& b! ~0 x/ l
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 s4 ]9 q" L8 R5 I( l* n
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.6 [9 v# x' G( g
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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