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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ P' A# X, M1 j( f" O) g: heveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 S; n# ~+ n8 \. r+ |$ i$ H% D# ^
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Let me just rewrite yours:
$ a2 x0 o! R2 }1 AIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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; {. d4 ?9 \, P; `1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 B: ?- U7 ^. F% Q9 p8 p2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' m+ N, S# e' c* j+ RThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.0 G& b& E; M* S0 u
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