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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & x1 w: b1 U* Q' l' W+ O
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 h' y% e: |/ B9 N' X0 i
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Let me just rewrite yours:
1 [% [% b W% H3 y! z: \. IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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; W# M: o3 R2 n) r3 |: M" X1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% h: C+ U/ h. h, S$ P& H, u
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., j% i H: ~6 W% r. O# x6 b! t
8 Q# |5 I; E( QThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ A3 G* ?" y( o, }) U+ J" @& P
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 P* B3 C" L- H6 \
9 Q0 i4 G* S$ p3 x' G6 `+ i2 RGretz. |
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