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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% a, [; ^8 E# U" M8 G
7 J P: f$ j2 G- H8 s) A8 z8 O3 B! ait doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 ]" ], B) M( T# G# X+ Reveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 b' t; f5 i+ t( `4 ?3 H7 f, _9 u- g! R T; D* {! ?* U9 B( |0 @
Let me just rewrite yours:
' m) ]2 v! H' b4 rIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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! e9 X# P& g9 f P1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 a+ A/ J6 f+ V/ a/ S9 ?4 l( ~; B7 j
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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, @8 D% x% ]9 N8 `There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.6 D' r+ R+ X1 J# w2 n. a- W( n
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