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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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' S8 F* Q5 V8 U* \6 Hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ l2 Y# _1 [0 q5 W# S. I3 [everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 y* @1 n) E& Y5 X" j
5 N$ x/ Q7 F5 l/ d7 N9 F1 kLet me just rewrite yours:
; v; e( d/ T3 {7 v, QIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 f0 O! H+ `. n8 b* P, G2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.: F5 d0 B0 s* o) Q8 o S7 ]9 E
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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, P8 B# l F# H2 i9 ZThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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