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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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9 X% ` n' t$ O. sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 U1 I! s V+ @0 n O8 Qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * A$ d9 U% H4 V% S' S5 v# ]
1 r& m3 m9 W* R: | V1 d4 RLet me just rewrite yours:
8 n, v0 a% L p9 Z5 H) p. Z; D" XIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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7 S D% @1 D% S6 {1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# D1 j$ @0 d0 H% x2 ^) X2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ a# w# {0 |0 m# @$ J5 ~4 T
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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$ H: v; I5 U/ N1 ZThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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