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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 |- f2 r) k: y g% Y' s* Y
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : _ F, {, I8 ?! C1 Q
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : n* M9 @ _) F3 o9 w$ E2 l* u
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Let me just rewrite yours:
8 `6 P" |' a/ L1 w4 V4 sIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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4 [ k0 a8 v$ K4 _9 c7 _. W& s1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 D: w) |' g! B+ h, }2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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1 J9 g) s0 X" U4 j4 \' {There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. j! h/ N, ?, _7 N
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