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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# l$ p7 A' A$ k1 d5 s& |7 Eit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 C5 _; @, T% Ceveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 \- H4 F5 m: T2 r) w
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Let me just rewrite yours:
9 Y2 |+ A, C# O; a) aIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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% _5 E; b8 ?1 r9 {; a' ^- K1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 u, _* s1 ?! w% K8 w
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- q. d, b, W O8 N4 g; N
4 E1 d& c' `. n# gThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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! s6 c; y0 s# Z2 j$ r+ ~6 B# Z. S) QThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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