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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 j8 z; P$ W% |; ^% g: q% A% w2 g
- r$ t6 @3 \, c( b! C, nit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 L8 J5 D* _& ^4 L# Qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / e: \/ _/ P. `1 A J" z0 |. l) H# r O
Let me just rewrite yours:
2 i7 z# E( @3 @( u% O) lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 x" D( k' ^- v2 B- b
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; B0 {; J8 u/ Q- e; {
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., n, ^6 d8 U( ?
' E1 E$ o$ d" j; }: ^" k- k X2 k n, pThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ [3 x- U+ }1 Q: o, X! e6 S
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