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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
, Y" X' p7 b- ~) U0 L' k$ \9 b. ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 h9 Y9 n6 e* B; t* v$ }" v/ q
L4 i6 G3 {. g* z* j& d3 TLet me just rewrite yours:
; c6 ]/ g% z# T% q1 V% jIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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( d" T# ?- r: Q, `) |% P1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, \, t* K) E' k. e, M$ D2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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# O% a- m( f7 BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% y7 n8 K4 J' _& Z) B2 W* D& ~
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