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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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. ^% @. h2 J# Y! |4 e# }# p8 fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and . ~# ?+ ~4 h$ e% T3 E6 x
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 b0 w `# d- j5 I
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Let me just rewrite yours:
- A1 `) f* {! NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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2 t# |1 Z. G! w2 v, E$ b1 j! @& y1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# n. q+ U. t+ m) E2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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/ `" p1 u* s2 f: vThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* T3 U( Y4 ?# I, a1 f4 g* I
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