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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, O3 G+ y0 y( r) @' q4 L2 Q
5 z: h, C0 C2 l% X4 Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% F6 ]0 K: Y. K9 p6 b( Xeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " h5 m1 D" l9 I# u5 W: P
- E0 O/ o' J/ m$ I# L9 LLet me just rewrite yours:5 Z/ A3 S1 i6 R
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& y4 I" |/ i' B, }: I2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) n3 v$ M0 l1 ^2 p' J2 F+ b2 B
* A2 F9 ~$ G) |* d' b6 OThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 |" x% H6 s% z/ k3 y: s0 L) `4 d
4 p- p/ z9 G& H. _' I7 \Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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