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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. u& c. a4 X% |- y7 Oeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % y& _* t% `0 _; u6 \" u6 F+ g9 C0 @" C9 Q- ~! A, E
Let me just rewrite yours:
$ O9 k0 O2 O% l+ K4 hIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ Y, M1 w$ W5 ]' M* u- R
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la." P5 @$ z& w6 D' X3 S
: n) N& i: \) D% K. Y. Q0 ?There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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7 Z; L" f2 @/ I4 \2 N; F/ oThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.8 m& E+ b: G& d& [4 t s
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