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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:( p2 E! y) z4 i7 r* j$ v
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
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Let me just rewrite yours:- R+ M2 ]" u" D S F
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
8 N0 P/ P; _+ X, h# E0 H2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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8 c' {" v! Q% g9 J& F/ `8 YThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.! Q( m6 i, v+ i
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