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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: I+ F7 i& C$ P- ?& Y0 s9 h# S8 h9 t
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everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , w* k/ g8 C" z x% c* g2 a' C( I" q! E: Y! i
Let me just rewrite yours:
B0 R7 b2 B; i: ]" ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me ^, K0 e6 m `, l$ o$ ~
, g# D# @ |: _% m" |9 ]( [+ J1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 L3 J) a2 ?) f1 T) [% a/ c6 i
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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S; @) i3 _. ^9 X% E8 DThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# p# D& z- U" X! ]* i P: J
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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Gretz. |
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