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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% d/ ?$ U4 n( ]7 L# _4 yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! y: Z/ A9 [6 a2 c. q' eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! D# ^, `& x$ {, [* E
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Let me just rewrite yours:- Z, B( S# |. Y8 T
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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2 g- J J) Q" {$ ^1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 v6 B C2 H L% H
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. b! y T4 R) R2 s) M& C7 ?0 j: g
: z+ G7 r' }0 H5 Q+ m$ j) MThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. R( B1 B7 F, d# V
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