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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
) u; P; R% z4 S" ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 q6 B; q( B0 g- x
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Let me just rewrite yours:
, c# u2 E; k5 e0 I: Y) Y9 `It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me9 l! i: ~- D* x( y) z8 x: I
9 A8 W% V9 x: U4 N5 b1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( }, v; N7 A7 q9 B4 N7 Z
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) E6 ]- A7 ~- }" {There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! w. r: u: U) y
- O; f' q" I+ U3 |! ZThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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