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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 o- S: M- z: x. E- Z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , R. z; R* R0 F: P8 U2 Y7 [3 h8 c# l/ a
Let me just rewrite yours:
/ U3 M6 x7 z# TIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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9 C# B- s# L+ a' v% i+ H; k- U1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 p: y8 N$ ^# A5 H0 G: A2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" S( t( m& V' A2 h5 n LThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.& J! ^7 D: k7 A1 e! w5 R2 r- O# \
* P7 j( h5 I: BThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.0 O, {) ^( V+ G V6 v1 }4 q/ b2 L5 {! J
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