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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:3 f" q6 r6 h7 v6 S' W5 K
" U1 S; Z D2 x- jit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! M# M& o3 C* w) ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; m! [, H5 _- N5 ~7 o
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Let me just rewrite yours:
5 g' N! H7 S) }' Z2 oIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me2 |+ E/ X, S! O' x1 Y- P3 q
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ O6 T% g+ R5 X4 Y8 C
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: a/ D$ n, w2 n0 B3 K2 d' E8 x2 |
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