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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 i2 z( l# {: L; v$ B9 Keveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & X( e' Q, d* O' h: S+ B
. }' A1 Y j) l/ k* w H k/ |. A. fLet me just rewrite yours:
8 D2 E. U( q# R3 G+ FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, e. r0 I8 q, F B2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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3 w5 g! ~$ V! N" p! ?There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 f6 q/ [2 e9 g) a3 ]
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ @* G6 Z7 b5 B* @" a
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