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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 ]" | h3 t, y$ s$ r5 t
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 |$ E3 N/ }5 q2 }1 F2 ^
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 y% X5 z- F% D0 S5 l: C5 ~6 q* j) ]
Let me just rewrite yours:
: [+ b+ j0 h* h/ {$ y0 M5 }It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, }" C: {5 ~4 \. I J) v; ?" Y
4 b# X5 z! b/ N2 ?7 `1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: q, W6 z2 b0 |$ p- O2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.' l8 Q: ^9 s4 N1 n& x5 {, p
% E7 s% Z; d! y, ^0 P* i9 G0 iThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow. ^. |: J5 {' B8 D- U
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. u4 n; L$ h: j, |4 k
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Gretz. |
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