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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # M0 y9 O# y6 @
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 D$ J# B& ]- |* j/ f* C
0 |1 E7 \# V, A0 w1 PLet me just rewrite yours:
' k9 i/ O; X: w& v; xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- {% o) ?" \4 F3 ]# Q5 ^% k% [
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ D% ~) }! `% J8 V% z
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la." ^7 S/ w# a3 b3 B
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 j1 j& P5 Q4 T1 T0 I- F
$ k+ M* _% q! w! z' |3 gThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 K/ e* I w' v, \! G8 l1 s+ o$ W
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