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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 w/ J# y! W c/ e( E& [
9 D3 t4 f5 ]$ D J5 _9 C: }& Rit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( Z4 q* l8 L4 E3 C. o5 L) h! U
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + B9 g4 k6 h( e
0 b3 H7 [ y" U. L! ~/ n" RLet me just rewrite yours:
+ ]9 } M; ~/ m3 i2 ?It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!$ p( A9 g7 d8 n+ x$ a9 A. U6 b) A
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la." c1 L1 W9 F2 B2 W U5 Z
# x8 w {; x! Z- Y3 l! k% E' PThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., H0 [: N. n7 [' E+ M
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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