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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
4 W. L, W2 P) p& _% p" Eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # b8 p: [* j( M. X% u$ f# U( v. i% O" D
Let me just rewrite yours:
2 p6 H# m0 u! S+ QIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 i! F& {4 T5 G5 h6 B6 |/ x
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 \/ J" y+ M$ M* I: ^
# K: v; G. E* b( }7 DThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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