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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ A, Y' B% h; Feveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; [0 H; M* W" ]* L0 H8 K. {7 @7 {( T% k5 {
Let me just rewrite yours:1 ~# @' i6 H1 i5 _
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" @* V2 [: R6 B* B* v
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 v6 m! P( z9 v+ R! @
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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+ G' i( @9 y* v, yThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.# u/ ]9 v& `. D- X% |' y/ U% Z
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