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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, K$ V0 p9 ~* _, C4 d; `) ?& ^: q
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 S& D; `* U8 f8 r! P: yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 [# \- M& p7 [3 n6 B0 w, G. H
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Let me just rewrite yours:! r3 ]$ q- B9 @* w, P7 {# L
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me! D |4 @0 H$ {1 x8 ?
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ @* D8 ]# p7 f( R/ P* I: ?
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. v! x _; `1 G8 c4 s- \
- f$ H$ f3 Q6 S C6 A/ A6 vThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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