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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:( ~# Q% ?" d9 C. v" J2 U5 C
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! Y- l1 W7 B- E* r& ~8 [, x" S; Teveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 O. a; d( y' C# ]+ R5 d2 r( D
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Let me just rewrite yours:
$ w$ q( I6 i6 T9 Y$ _It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
+ K2 x6 R& z$ ^/ I: w& G1 K3 p& X0 j2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 B$ ]9 o' ?( o0 _1 Z
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* x+ a O6 D' y2 |# c
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.) u C$ I! q3 h1 D+ ?
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