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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# V$ z& b' \, R5 F) q& Q' s: `, }
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% U" p# E5 h: O% G$ zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 b2 V( l8 d+ r3 k# y I. x j
( x% l( ~; e* C/ O ?3 W/ x2 h6 YLet me just rewrite yours:
7 F9 b- F ?1 `" ^" yIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" z8 ^, o2 m- ]# ~% r* O3 H2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ J, z/ K! u: W3 I. p ?
/ X1 h$ v% G1 R k7 S) z- [% sThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.1 r9 N8 l y: C6 m0 G H
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