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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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5 \9 H/ L C4 X4 Oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# g7 c! ]9 M) P m" N) e9 meveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( O5 e, n+ H9 t& O$ H8 M- }# M" ~4 j& m$ Q( v( l4 |% i
Let me just rewrite yours:
, k7 {) m* W# _ @( q3 r( ~. KIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me; G$ F! D |" Z6 G
9 Q# Q1 @9 E5 w: F1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 S5 J K* J: Y, d( q5 L8 b0 Z
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.' }) R, I( ]8 z# j8 X
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., H D# e$ S5 x+ z! r5 O# P/ P8 v- w j
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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