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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 O: _6 D! C2 F2 D- K4 ceveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. F7 Q5 O3 V5 t
" R9 ^8 l8 [2 ELet me just rewrite yours:
3 ?* Y" ~1 L3 W$ L7 \- WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- B( S9 t$ E5 J, j7 o
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
1 x. {( B0 B, G9 Z) u& E/ U2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., Y6 {7 I' v# i* H# A; u
& ~ ]9 u K2 e: a- l; dThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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! `: f# J" x$ ^0 p& K$ ~Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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