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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 T1 b) k5 O8 e% n- q. qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ e: P; K% h1 {8 Qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 z! g) X( T- d+ W) D3 g
* k; n* C6 G5 @Let me just rewrite yours:
; m/ u# b6 L, o0 R6 }It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* G! S2 j+ u- q) Q* w) G7 ^) Q
; J1 k, Q2 f! [4 w$ W8 t5 n1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 v! ^- X4 h% d+ c
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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, y$ q8 {5 v L# XThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.4 i6 x6 C E+ F3 a: i
: g+ y# J& s# [Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( r- L- q5 ~: M9 B/ j$ ^ {! p5 p3 d
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