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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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2 E$ G6 q3 ^8 X' D0 B" \% Xit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% f! N% L$ e' {everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , I3 G9 t% w! d6 w0 ~
1 H- l( v J( f$ {/ _/ [; lLet me just rewrite yours:
- r, y( {2 b& e X0 b lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me( p0 u- U+ c; v* }2 D
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
) M$ N/ ]# X2 R" t: _2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" @, k( X0 X# ~; ?There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 v$ E* H: l- X" S; t. ?
) W4 [5 h/ [. K( Z8 YThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 |: G4 S1 l4 [6 g, f$ d
% @5 q2 U G A0 F, s5 f7 hGretz. |
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