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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# _9 o: H9 F( c1 K3 O8 z
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ ]" O, O, Z& U$ l4 _0 leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " ]/ B4 C4 u) w- t
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Let me just rewrite yours:* y( U$ D( o7 r3 J2 w: X0 [. D/ Q0 F3 K
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 n5 O; W7 Q, h0 n( b# N3 s, J
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; |7 }3 |) X3 X2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.$ C' U/ }4 m, B0 r0 ^7 Q" C5 G- X
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 r$ }; |9 e1 s" w2 m" o% M
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