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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:( ]5 _, d# r2 `! A
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% v' I: R; u6 X9 f. N* Leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) T% m; E2 h! E Y' Q2 p8 b% d* o/ V1 D& q) D3 k
Let me just rewrite yours:+ L- d5 ]3 v9 S/ U
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# ~! B2 R# c$ b8 w; x& ~) |: y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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3 y( |; y& R6 z2 v) f6 lThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. ?5 W; e1 i1 }* I4 z
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