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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 h' s0 T# n" d0 U, ^5 e: K7 s2 I
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : J8 m# A, ?, d: D
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : M$ T6 l, T8 Y
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Let me just rewrite yours:
" j! h1 x/ @* ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% s. [4 r7 q& r: a! A5 J4 ^" h2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# S/ e3 s4 F2 z6 ~4 N
7 P* C( u4 O2 n; o* dThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.& i7 d$ W- k2 A! \* L5 V7 ?: k
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: h! g! m3 g! y/ r- B8 D
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