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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ; p; O2 C Y5 T/ e3 X6 x
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : ?* d: }1 u! ]3 Y* | Z8 D0 \( B6 d; |6 m! q- w" [, S0 J
Let me just rewrite yours:3 C: j; h+ A, @
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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# S' w; m. ]- V( X0 q1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# {3 z- q& ^/ q0 n5 j8 m- ?6 K
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* u! f5 T4 ~7 t& \' _ e
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ T! P: g9 \4 w9 I3 A" ?) ~
4 }" V/ {7 e1 G+ ]! VThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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