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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 {% y: u! F/ o- ?" O- H# `/ n/ o& Zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " {2 r# c; |# ^$ V b! i5 C* A3 L% F z3 A! w+ K* f5 I% H
Let me just rewrite yours:
1 X0 h# R2 n6 @7 a6 i4 gIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, o: ^- z: a# t8 K. s- o
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
1 r+ |: M- O" ?9 q% T& ]& J" [- F2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- F- B/ G% c* r: e- a
; V) ~0 l! d1 d0 P+ Y8 AThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! ]$ k v( Q5 p3 a/ [$ M3 I, F
7 ~4 @' E; R1 S- S% yThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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