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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 o. D0 V) U* `" s9 P, r
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 y; ^" d$ _" |# D/ _7 ~0 \' r! s& o$ T& u a3 N5 n: G
Let me just rewrite yours:$ Q( c1 j! `$ o2 K9 Y8 z
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" u! I, A5 z @6 E% Q. E2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., G! h4 {3 C/ |, n9 y/ S: t1 M4 s
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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