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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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8 k9 r& c/ J% mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # Q0 R, B$ \' C. E3 a( n
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 b" b8 h0 }8 c% [7 `6 h& ?
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Let me just rewrite yours:
4 m+ z' s# |2 v9 p; jIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me2 \5 \( I+ N: G2 ?! J6 j
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- o6 ]% n6 O+ s" r" U/ q) }
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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& @/ `- `( p" aThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 A) u3 P% C0 b/ \. O8 S
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., T9 B! }( T, y2 Y& a% q3 d
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