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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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7 f6 m9 f x. g" _& y7 Pit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" J R' v* [/ m9 {8 }5 Geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 y- z% s& {7 u7 G/ j4 j: K
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Let me just rewrite yours:
/ ?; A5 P4 H( n# d$ QIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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: y/ {" O) Y5 m1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
7 |2 E/ K8 n$ `! n; j6 a2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. L! o7 C5 S, U$ d9 \' L
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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/ H/ @4 x4 Z) ^- f1 vThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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