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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:) r1 d, [) F( K/ a+ g+ H, ?' w7 l
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! d: |4 I3 F! B7 ^6 E; C! m- _3 {everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. O$ p9 Z1 P" o2 L; e. x
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Let me just rewrite yours:
% ^! Q+ \, z% iIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( J6 e" N' R4 U4 n8 n# H! Z2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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+ [' `5 j$ l% q: ?! J+ m( b! B% sThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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