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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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9 O: ]$ ]3 G6 Q ?/ V, p* Qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 X7 S0 {. G$ X# K- B" Y
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + q3 R7 C: R, x4 G) v3 Y9 M3 o, i0 F1 \6 ?. o" [: c" Z
Let me just rewrite yours:
U$ E& A! S* Q8 z' b9 eIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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7 p1 \0 H# }7 o2 K1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, b1 p- `$ O. J1 v' e9 b* h
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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3 R- O H# h$ P$ VThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 ^ K5 X( d% x
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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