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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: u- N) y4 M2 r* L1 K
9 s7 A7 \2 ]$ q b: d1 ]it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * \5 V) L4 e" x6 V
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 G$ u3 h K2 p; D5 r
9 ?6 i7 q2 p7 y8 p. a) tLet me just rewrite yours:
: R4 \* Z1 n! S+ QIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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% T7 O, o% Z0 w! p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
+ I# ? S0 U" n, D2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% _: p* d* l. t
- |$ i; Z& x! ]1 s2 @0 A! s0 DThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 w, a# W( k6 l1 @3 Q
% q& }9 p5 A5 r, g, J5 L( z! B qThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ j) c7 w1 Y) A0 Y
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