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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ B5 @3 Y; k& U9 M3 K5 peveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. A9 a/ h% J3 [- i' [: }( h5 w. g' \5 \! X% f1 ~3 J: \" r
Let me just rewrite yours:
& @# u% b% m% _6 _4 b, {% A' cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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8 I4 k+ X* y2 M0 h3 r1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!) ~# i' O7 [ P- Q3 g% H
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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9 n- _; e% l& U' ?9 [/ l2 vThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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