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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% n' ]5 @: @; B7 S- | t7 m1 w
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
( V6 H, W9 O6 b' Deveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 s- f8 ~& v# g; W- Q7 [
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# m6 A$ ^) ^' H8 {* s# Y$ ZIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' N- }( n9 C1 l. A' y
+ K. ]5 b0 U3 d/ U1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# ^& {/ {" P; h4 m
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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