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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 H9 p# }# q# _& uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ {4 {, T7 X& Beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : F. t/ V9 W* u) L% W; d5 a, t' J
, ~/ t9 `$ e' p2 YLet me just rewrite yours:
* K, A5 K. A4 @. `" Y$ DIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me( d3 H7 A s" P+ p
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!4 H0 J% `3 k& I) }$ @9 W% \2 h+ d
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ y7 [: G$ u, D# ^0 P3 A
7 N0 k; n& T/ T6 y7 H6 N" o8 ^There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% E% G$ D( U* Y/ P
5 V+ |: @9 s5 ^# z" J' BThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ J+ e l4 u# n/ K! c* m' s
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