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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% G( i/ d% Z2 i* N- c" Z) G% Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & M9 a' N9 d9 N' r0 e% F( B5 c
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 R; c& M, d+ B! T: g; M+ f
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Let me just rewrite yours:
2 T4 o% o; J1 u, v* NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: S4 h+ }% w4 A+ u: N4 S: b" q
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 ]" h# v! _* Z. m7 G6 y
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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, U# b" f3 b: F4 H( l& cThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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0 f! `, ~5 d% E. k2 fThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.0 Y# {! P" b6 b
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