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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 t( D" z7 Q9 Fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. S6 R( p: l9 q$ Z( G3 \everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 e3 Q$ O$ M; V& M9 i% K6 P
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Let me just rewrite yours:
8 F; A5 {% Y. c7 \1 Y- s, G' ]It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- k/ Q, g$ [2 |0 D1 C" D- a
& o+ q$ K& E0 K1 i$ d4 k: \$ h1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; z7 b& Q: g7 j5 T7 I, l9 c: U# y5 ~
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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# `, B0 U$ b* j: C' G* R" C5 NThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: _' r! a7 Z8 a: e7 p
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., ^/ F7 b8 G6 M" Q+ i; n. {& j
6 e5 f4 [, v" p: ]Gretz. |
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