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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
4 D5 u, K9 s% s4 [4 W% Aeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * q9 t a4 B! W! O0 q- B7 H
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Let me just rewrite yours:. B: z3 h/ x6 D0 D" t; D
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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- e: ~) ?. z- a$ Z9 {1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
/ {% C w' k1 q# I, h- R* j2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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( o* p' y: n' k m3 @There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: u) l* M( }9 Y' \, Q4 |
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.! I5 \# |- {5 P0 t' Y2 s0 r9 f4 J
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