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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
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% o5 a3 Z' d: T5 E5 z qLet me just rewrite yours:6 D. T9 V1 e9 S0 _; i/ l
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* ~2 ]+ D% R! z, V6 k! m5 v
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, t Q) ^6 b E' l0 H+ B9 O2 M+ u& H4 K: [2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.1 R! V% a; G5 ^3 |
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ ]+ Q) K& f8 t' I2 P: i! [
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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