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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:9 m# h8 W2 z, T! R4 x9 L; q
" m' _: Q2 [ D% yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
s0 x+ l. @0 ]! ]7 f% `3 k# X: z: Ueveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " V' W- f2 Y* U: n) u" t S f1 T
Let me just rewrite yours:& b3 A* r* [% A# q5 ~
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me& x4 A J; W, b/ o7 r3 W/ f
2 x9 M* ^# o1 i3 j$ H4 O: y3 r1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" h/ F* U3 ^. s8 V) I2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) a" M) i4 @ ZThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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& }; k9 A" ~1 f v+ K P0 y: kThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 [( N" J j( |' X- Z! B
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