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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, d3 c8 T2 f9 G/ D6 o: D% V
: z' [1 k* u; ]7 p$ b9 P- qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# w: I4 J, K, d6 Y9 T' k4 teveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : [, Y' l/ N* e
4 S5 ~: D. U2 g9 P: E8 ?$ k& iLet me just rewrite yours:3 U3 _1 I& r/ @$ D" r t7 Y
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 T, T9 D. ~% y( E' i+ o) i2 } |' u
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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% Z- V$ R7 v4 N" jThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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