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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ z4 U$ F1 o7 n! P" ]: v- x
8 @& P% F- T0 [6 N) Qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : s* T/ _' y2 v; I- w
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 u* F6 Z$ g' N; D+ N$ b6 h. o; X9 Y/ K' }' ?0 {7 B. t
Let me just rewrite yours:
- k I, I5 k, oIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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3 G+ p% O" B, k& k1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' @* Q/ o( u( w/ r6 Q: m+ G5 z2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' Z" }. `- [; u6 u: {There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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% u4 l& j% {- \) UThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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