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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 n9 i- C2 q* D8 b4 z/ s# j" R
1 s( f$ ^( Y! O% ^ K0 b! Yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 5 L; g: G# K4 M
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % l7 C2 y, n( L# U% m! ~7 z
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Let me just rewrite yours:4 j/ x( K- g$ ~. V+ {
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* B! {/ n/ f5 M2 \3 \
/ {& O* B0 [6 A1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- v& }& T* P: W+ X" n) \& ]
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.6 G2 o3 B6 k& K; B i
$ }% F9 ~. g, C4 u3 u P' BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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+ B* P m7 y+ S( i, I NThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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