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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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; u) {6 j+ `, T) E1 z/ rit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 q% A. p8 j1 f l6 Q! deveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 E$ V; K, T7 ]
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Let me just rewrite yours:
' O0 S" r4 G5 ?* u& R' c( EIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, b/ V0 k+ H% c" l* U5 L
0 n# {. U3 d; m& E9 i. K2 j9 Q1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. k, {5 ]6 ~# K$ j
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.' V5 N3 P2 \. x4 I& z% Z. `
8 O% N% t9 p6 LThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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