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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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4 }9 q5 Y- T8 T' d! Zit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 G+ h: K8 N' V t; I8 m
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! k! n+ {, G9 P1 N% m
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Let me just rewrite yours:
" t4 S- l9 R0 O' ^& l; QIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. ~* x; A" h( `0 w( i* A. p
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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+ M" l# R9 H* ]& ]- F) L0 ], J sThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ M4 @0 c8 |! u
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