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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:+ v0 h9 }9 P8 r) |
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , g/ P, G7 X2 u ~/ a! I
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 S- k3 g2 ?/ ?- H# V3 W9 E
, s8 f: c' Y( @: S: s# Y6 S; V; c2 ELet me just rewrite yours:/ p, e! I4 Y* K: k0 }$ c2 {7 `
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; K9 |# s% ~7 f, A4 w! r6 Y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 B* c& `9 i2 P! n3 P
6 i8 O! Q' j. R; {! HThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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