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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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; q# O# Q- I$ _$ m0 c' ]& uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and % {( T$ j! M9 ^
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. j9 j- D3 f- ~
8 v- m/ T/ E$ M+ I* r, Y2 |Let me just rewrite yours:
( r" P; W F- w2 a! k2 ~2 \+ zIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 Y P, o) B, v3 ~8 P
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!) Y9 C& J3 X0 a. Z& U! ~
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- Q0 m$ I6 l$ u1 f4 |3 \( p2 A; U
6 D) c7 S9 v7 ]/ R9 n6 M: M/ MThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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# g" H: n6 J5 V4 N' p- PThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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