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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 p5 Y' r& V8 v }5 Q
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. M1 x, R. p: c+ Y' F8 m! Zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % C8 m% h8 @& @: @2 F, f' z) D
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Let me just rewrite yours:
1 m) c& `, Z+ U# H$ pIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me9 I, m1 ?" x z ?6 F" y
' `& W- m) i4 u( b& y0 B# D# p: T1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ l1 H( G) a/ A
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ V' ^: @( e; ^5 R
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.& a t( A0 e9 P5 o5 E3 c
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