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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 G' X8 g D. b( h& u _2 n, J
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , ^- i; t4 z$ T# L* G. t1 ~2 G
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Let me just rewrite yours:
2 L* x3 S% f/ S, hIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me6 F3 h) t. @4 B+ L2 z d" r' \% C
) a y5 I" {9 }4 S4 H1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
+ {1 A: v" B1 r- h }4 ^2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( e& w5 L! z/ c9 c- Y
) `) l$ j( P6 n4 D7 ?( s5 dThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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* g& {5 |/ G7 _6 v; `Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. D5 y5 A, `1 Z7 a. Q
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