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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ F3 I0 @3 d H- G2 n! t/ D
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 Z9 T% G% X) d- geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & s1 u! w, U1 c3 X _" g8 k
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Let me just rewrite yours:$ k! A8 P- s2 M9 t
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" h. V0 J; ^/ X s7 }/ D6 A; x9 d2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. @' Y% Q! d1 U* [/ K. W# Q5 |
. R$ M9 t u, U* E4 N' h1 dThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." E }5 l7 |' N# W* b# z
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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