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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & C6 I, t/ G8 y+ F6 _" Z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 G7 N- v# `* {2 ]' {, T/ q# n1 X& ?. g3 Z4 E" q p/ W/ T
Let me just rewrite yours:) c% E$ W' o$ ~. g0 @
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ U6 e4 k7 P2 @, p) `' K5 M
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: p# \, z4 f. D4 J# \: C2 P2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la." b' }, L# q" P
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 D) c9 L( r* |) r* r7 U
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