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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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( [6 W4 ^- V( }; G6 ]$ J5 v: p/ Jit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' p3 n. |6 N6 m. G
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ s Z, `: c; w+ X6 Z7 U8 Y1 t S6 N2 k
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Let me just rewrite yours:
0 N0 p$ c" w5 l) hIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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6 ?% J1 Y8 d) q1 G7 y( w1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 @0 u' g0 l1 l2 }
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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0 e* d; [) S1 m+ v' D4 h) J+ q9 wThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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