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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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& E8 a& v7 r; R' \it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 W6 O4 n( C6 |- @% u. B
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 @- Q; a! a6 [; ^
( I! S" E4 c" A2 TLet me just rewrite yours:
, t s1 P& n& b, k9 F3 T$ fIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( I9 A3 i6 k! f" a6 c# t
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- \9 [' g6 M. r) j0 V/ S* g
( X8 j- l3 I3 u7 o2 aThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 M, e8 k! I6 M% {8 m
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; c/ a2 i" I r5 f ~; `( L0 W) n
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