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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- c/ c$ |3 M* U
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 C1 i& [+ H& b: }0 L- S! T
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 ~9 j2 S7 r7 e/ F* f7 \/ q: ?; L7 j$ `. m! A! ?
Let me just rewrite yours:
) J( Q* g) q* f% ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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" L; _7 X$ x& P9 C. W& E# l. c1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 H; C% ]' j3 q" H
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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# w4 y& [9 H' U& @: X* Z4 q+ a- a* dThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 b% ]% d+ ^' J0 [
, B$ _" o: C, w' ~+ \- yThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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