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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and T# G4 x9 ^# N e% r( O( c; ^# F: g1 E
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " b) y5 R, X3 N' H+ V! Y$ W* N& v* V
* D5 i! L# c$ D; R% {Let me just rewrite yours:
: ^1 W$ f8 d4 D# LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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6 u- F; h1 {) m* X" U1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
. e# _1 Z* |; ?/ i, U4 `( M2 n2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.1 G8 I$ l$ I2 H6 `8 L7 x) i
k$ F' }2 C% e/ D7 D- kThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.' m ^& A, Y3 ^
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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