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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ! l" | a/ F3 O- l0 o4 [6 f3 O) G
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 h5 [. ]9 N4 }# J! z t+ Y0 v0 O' i8 n. a
Let me just rewrite yours:
a9 x2 x% l! O1 W, v' JIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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" I6 c2 n6 O1 R' y0 J) |* Q1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: c2 v5 k# \7 @/ i3 y9 V+ u
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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7 A4 O5 z: f, k: q5 o0 v9 wThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 A: q0 k, g- X$ R# u2 ]
+ I( I' e. O( w5 v3 g8 qThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." q- d: i) \( v. `, M* G$ P. ^( z& e
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