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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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; l0 k. O! x! qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ; n' Y5 F) u6 r/ I8 J* W, v0 T. `
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' l0 R8 f- e; L) ~7 L) B0 Y0 f7 F0 H" p$ o2 p) x
Let me just rewrite yours:+ V, P) P2 S5 J
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 A0 l3 n$ p. Z3 V4 s9 h x
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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, E8 a& U& U& Z" H$ xThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# s# K3 U2 n( b5 X2 {' m
" {1 `, s" y) L& S. z/ t3 nThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.# {* f3 o% e* Y* C Q0 j2 @
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