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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & n$ w. c, V6 L0 Y, q3 P
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 k, {0 I( E) L3 ^
( k9 G) m+ w/ V0 Q( S' c2 o8 s9 J- `Let me just rewrite yours:
2 e" b |% [/ ?8 UIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!* @2 }. O5 G- H! F4 X# y8 ]5 H7 |
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. L* X6 |- Z7 p
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ K% L: e( z/ X A% I5 _ l V
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