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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- i7 M1 n* D" e" \# `6 j# V/ C0 v. s
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * _: Y ~, p3 n3 z s) Q) ]
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - [1 U1 e, y$ G, y8 M
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Let me just rewrite yours:
; {, H4 B$ |' B3 qIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 l. S+ r5 f8 U' \
# s2 t' q3 P" J4 K$ q1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 ~: `9 b/ t7 l7 _6 f: ~1 R" N2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 I4 q3 Q5 O" G8 i9 |* E
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! F- B: }# L4 x: k" ^; B' w
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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