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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 b% t: [! b. s8 l0 v
: |+ q9 j3 H" k4 D6 e! J2 m/ ait doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& T8 E- I7 y& k' A, O2 I) weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' l* `" i% V/ N7 J- r" R) S
9 p5 k* z8 B7 m6 F& }# l0 K! k8 OLet me just rewrite yours:
) y; `* o- D: i4 t' CIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 T; c( Q( T- K6 V3 o
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* o; w# a5 M/ n
- q, ?$ u' I& `2 |There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 Z9 l2 i I* \- p2 B% g7 d* w
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. F- j) r3 R E9 H8 o
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