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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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+ \; x/ l; h4 u/ _$ F6 u9 U4 Eit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( S3 o# _) S, q. g
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 ], ?; E1 G5 I/ b0 b \
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Let me just rewrite yours:
+ v/ M, D0 M# N$ e6 ZIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 h' F6 v5 E- O
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 E' e- L1 U; ~# v
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 ?2 v3 A6 k8 }# \3 d8 n
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ O, N7 `8 J+ A
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. E6 I5 h+ v+ x; O, y- l
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