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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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" O) y/ S j+ l5 L8 e8 Hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; \. x- k, H [! y$ A6 c o1 g0 Zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 x$ N4 u0 ^3 ?) K6 S( ?" `+ W* z S( h; y; c
Let me just rewrite yours:
% h; S, L" L/ W7 NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
1 r& `, g1 `' v3 W& {- ^2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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4 p- n" o3 b3 N) q" v: W9 fThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Z! N& j1 l7 V" w0 e3 KThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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