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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 D5 `. A/ H* e7 C7 [4 a- ?6 F$ ~everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) w g, A f$ l% N5 Z3 a$ c* m3 U/ w }
Let me just rewrite yours:$ c! ^# C/ r5 H
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' I1 F8 }' b t. K8 B9 _
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. w4 F n2 Q, s
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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3 |& q3 ^! k; w; BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! O; e' t" O* l( D
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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