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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 I2 e2 K' O/ x8 b- m: t4 S6 w1 w, b
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ P# M7 Y9 a/ R- a0 geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , [4 ^, R8 T& M. e7 g4 O9 m
* N8 N3 f6 e* o; S- gLet me just rewrite yours:
" Z% F3 m( f9 s1 R' I* q. EIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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4 K! B, q7 y& E6 B$ {5 Z$ v8 }1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ S! u4 }1 K& n( k; D* O2 w
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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( Z! ~5 u- O) F5 @9 v. nThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; v* P6 u x( j [
7 x) R7 W; E9 U* U+ Y- o F5 g/ W* aGretz. |
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