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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% D# f0 a+ j/ M( v
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
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Let me just rewrite yours:
! |7 [' B m( S: Z- CIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me% @+ w# L3 i4 ]& f( Q% T
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' n, ?* M0 r; T/ a; m2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow./ B; u5 ~4 j: s9 L
9 |$ _5 p, k1 }, w6 C- M8 EThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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