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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:' s6 n$ p- Z6 }
3 c. f3 ]3 z& fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & p! |5 v, A# V$ V* ] |! e
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # V0 C) C# c$ g f/ n0 j' Y w
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Let me just rewrite yours:
- q* X% Y( \( j' rIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 w0 b& C A; W- S; R6 ^
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: t3 ~+ t* ^! w2 k4 z9 h* x0 d2 A2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- H0 Q3 ^; y ~' B# _0 U/ D$ `
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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