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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& x6 M7 s: k% W
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
]/ Z3 Z7 \) f0 r' f2 J) l0 D" beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " b8 R3 h5 p: n1 p. F& g6 b# B. y! O/ ?5 N. H7 { T
Let me just rewrite yours:
) |8 ?4 ?, B0 t5 Z4 X$ @% @It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me4 n0 I3 P \; f2 C" M
. ^, ]/ C, i- \ Q+ n6 _* S, W1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# q. ] T3 i. k$ H0 \
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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- W, c5 Q" e; J- M& B( eThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 f1 d+ H [; Z$ j$ H2 s/ Y
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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