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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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! K6 Y4 O# T# Yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 K% w& }, ^9 F' Z5 ~5 I$ ~/ heveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * v, h" y- W( ]$ ]$ k. C8 @$ n4 i2 _! N D( U. E# b$ O
Let me just rewrite yours:' _# j8 u3 l! n C+ O
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 Y/ M" i( d0 G% u! _2 b
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ |% C9 Z6 P. H; j- N
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.9 \% r( P6 _9 j$ _* i' e2 R, H
: O$ o @6 h+ l5 h5 k" y5 ]- g, KThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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1 P3 J S0 A1 PThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. y! u/ c4 w5 P3 e+ a( ~
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