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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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5 m2 P/ D% j: b6 u$ [+ c9 h# g' D" ~ Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
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Let me just rewrite yours:
[ W' |# H7 K& @( \* M L6 AIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me2 ^4 u/ g( I8 u. D Q
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!4 i$ Q5 A( V& G3 |. I! a7 `6 K
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 b$ m7 L5 c8 K) R6 W
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 Q+ H0 f) v& S# ]7 h
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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