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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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! o" |" L9 ^8 }9 q2 T( W4 \it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * u, g* n: l9 [% n ~2 a* l
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 P2 s2 Y# {* w, _8 ^# z
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Let me just rewrite yours:; s1 z" A8 @# \6 J& Y
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" X4 |5 @! e" A" k4 `
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 C, B( J6 ~% ?* E5 H; r# d* I0 S( b
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; O$ q6 s! r1 ^" D9 U& O# k* @+ W
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; d; E' y6 `: g$ p8 z, f
1 C9 J- k, J% g4 P+ q/ S1 nThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. [6 h2 C0 V E
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