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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! N, ]; }- Y; I
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
9 U3 G# R, S2 E. v' M1 r7 n8 K4 aeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 @/ k0 w1 `' v% o
" P7 }/ K3 C+ I, D# [" n5 fLet me just rewrite yours:
$ O" Z8 @0 L# P, p+ |* PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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5 X- H' s. p5 v2 }1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: x, b0 J. {# ?3 M r, W2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.8 q* n0 R' v9 J C4 B E
: K h5 _1 C/ b! CThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 Y* i+ ~5 f( F* W% c/ M2 `. R
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* F" |5 t2 w$ ~; f. Q' ~/ X
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