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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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5 h' D9 l3 t- @% F `' T/ ]3 Fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + n# m) G# i& o: d- J( Z% ^
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' I0 Y. N. U. O3 L- J
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Let me just rewrite yours:
+ e1 A' W( _2 i9 Q: GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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, v3 n/ f ]0 G# q1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
. N. {9 y3 [/ `; M( x2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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0 y& e! P8 U0 JThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ x/ Y1 X" ?: M$ f
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.# v! M$ @6 f, v" Q& o& H, s7 X
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