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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 [9 @. j: a' ]
- r( c; E7 _9 ]( h* |9 Sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 W/ M1 s" O/ M, y0 Peveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * Q: o3 ?, x* ^
4 j) k' }, k; b( w7 P2 GLet me just rewrite yours:
( z- y2 Q: E0 O; j1 {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, R5 G5 H7 {& M5 _. k$ h6 t
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
F( L" M( c0 N" Y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 U+ ~4 i9 z5 o% ?. @9 J
% y. }! |" E A" K8 BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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. U; I; t& P" u+ |4 E* sThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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