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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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2 ?- S& \9 n$ ~7 V- w/ Y- g" |" z1 bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; N1 N4 P! f/ U6 `7 A: ^' i4 zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / R0 \( d, ~) [7 M- p' E5 R$ y' r
$ L0 }/ l3 \# K3 P" t0 c+ kLet me just rewrite yours:
( i1 R& P3 g+ O, _$ WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me! s0 v9 L0 ~% H( b6 ~$ z' `
' d9 N3 r0 Z! ]9 t6 p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ \! r0 V/ Y2 a! c6 H+ [% ~2 n% `
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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8 c8 _- g: X2 J' j( o1 b! x; v2 {There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.( l& Z$ A6 L1 j1 A$ g6 e& P# w2 g
0 y# {! }6 c( k3 k$ M: aThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 Z b" ^2 k' F
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