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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 X7 Y; S& t$ s4 O
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and % d" y1 a0 ?. z C
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & {) G* Q' J; \- i% q
+ n8 D |; r- e( Q ~Let me just rewrite yours:( U$ P/ V, }' [
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 \# |8 G/ q$ l. `2 Q" p
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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+ b: Q* C; U1 o) C" `: kThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 g/ P2 S' V% X5 G3 ^" B2 I
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