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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% {' Q, C9 h( Q1 g4 }6 L! Hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 J. L, N5 H( U' t9 o( K
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # r1 f$ }& g, d5 u9 H
' v. J2 O, Z, T2 Q$ Z) Y" @+ rLet me just rewrite yours:* k |& \6 L2 w; I2 F4 q3 G' {$ Y
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me! s' m/ e4 M1 E$ f
9 v- K3 V1 A8 m" e" {1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
1 c! r/ y- R. H* P8 Y9 L2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.$ [* u; B4 K/ Q/ \
! [6 V$ N/ v+ b I. l: P( VThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., k8 |* |5 R2 }( G2 L
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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