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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:. W1 l: E7 b. w# b% x2 m
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 S5 N ]6 G7 Leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 m8 ]: V& } {7 D2 n. c' V9 U
$ K% s. R2 w6 |Let me just rewrite yours:
$ l% J+ S' p* _! a$ m! IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me; y9 V5 Q! T# \3 e2 p
$ W/ A2 U5 @! l$ ^7 [" D1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: ]' D( N$ Z, D. k, w2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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