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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( T# |0 S2 }. u+ ] M5 L
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # M Y- P" U+ Q) a) W
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Let me just rewrite yours:
( o! Z0 C% H1 b: U" u1 {+ W" EIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 q' F% ~( Z% g7 g
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 e1 F, f, u: N2 _4 Y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( i9 h1 F- V0 R4 Z E; ^/ Y
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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