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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:' v% W7 X1 K h# ~# f0 _
/ z1 P' u) G- N# eit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# ~# {! c" J5 ~2 Q- `1 weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 I" O& e$ A n) v& [* R6 M7 Y5 p
Let me just rewrite yours: U4 i. c; ~) c- [4 _0 t
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me L4 R/ x6 U! s* c# g/ @! S
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- }8 @, Q) d0 P5 _1 p# C z2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( Y1 n9 Q" T# A) T7 l
3 u& ^5 z' l& JThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) h/ a' Y- ]3 P9 P
8 l: Q+ O1 T! K, u; L0 iThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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