- 帖子
- 1691
- 精華
- 1
- 威望
- 245
- 魅力
- 0
- 讚好
- 0
- 性別
- 男
|
81#
發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
| 只看該作者
Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
- F7 I A, x9 k
- e8 m9 t. J2 A& H6 tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 ^4 w, b/ E( s: N6 X! p0 ?
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 P( B- r$ I. m
( ?9 k" k# d" J9 x6 R1 C+ ?Let me just rewrite yours:
6 m9 }6 T$ U, d! DIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, z* V+ W+ R2 y, X
2 O4 ~1 l5 Y- c
1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, E F- x# s1 w' i$ s( h+ ?/ w. \' C
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 K3 w6 ~& p' F* m! P5 ?, d6 A; i8 p
6 g3 e7 i' w% W/ w! K8 `
There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# Y& ~6 R+ X. \9 J% r
+ l% U7 T! u. p8 B
Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* F+ e5 e0 p9 q) g8 q
( e' e* m* C, b3 c/ Y
Gretz. |
|