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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:( P5 t, e z+ I g& I
! F' r) M# H$ t$ f3 Mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 v# C! u) b" ]) B; b! Q
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 M* x, I: s3 F4 a0 X. O/ q& P. `, d. ?$ b4 O
Let me just rewrite yours:
: X7 C+ ]+ Q* S5 G lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 S+ \* ~4 K9 }* O
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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7 a) g2 _8 a0 N: P# f9 \/ j. dThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ H1 S, o! h$ }4 H
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