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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 D" ?/ |# f: g9 Z2 j8 oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ d3 B* T3 A# L; G2 ]8 s$ K: w' Eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / M8 [! m6 n/ z' Y$ c' x. S& z! g
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Let me just rewrite yours:
" A( C4 V; Y" D& LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 }5 g8 \( d( P u8 r1 J5 n# e
' n) m4 }) M, g' `4 J, N& p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
) a/ j4 J( h; Z/ v2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.$ c. M* A, v. D; @
- t) {( }7 C* ^, Q$ t9 dThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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& y# T* a, Q8 M/ u. WThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." O$ k# }$ B$ x
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