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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:6 Y2 I6 U5 ]8 U2 M6 b
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
) U! A, u! B3 f3 p3 j5 _2 ]/ L) S8 p veveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + k. R; F/ O4 j& P' O- u$ f; Z# G7 G# M
Let me just rewrite yours:
6 f% h+ K9 j8 M2 u/ r3 \& cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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5 w7 d7 _2 [ Z( M/ b0 Y; A+ o1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- x9 j; x1 F$ X" w" N5 o- O1 Y* x' A2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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4 q7 j { o& CThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.8 t' B* u% T- ]) L, ]
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