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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ w0 p% t" p; I
2 u& ?# U' @1 }& F& [6 W! fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
, M3 C4 k- Q+ o3 O4 h* weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) _! d+ j8 q9 I& N7 ?- e' W; c4 R0 W3 J) j: G1 F
Let me just rewrite yours:
0 b! g' ~7 s! W& LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 C- f Y+ G3 u" ]9 [5 V
9 J/ ?6 [) |' X, ^. O3 L1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!) t' z; W$ r" k6 y
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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d" Q, \& m4 o1 d8 T, r8 [There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 F; S9 [5 O( W: ?
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