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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- W6 N6 R, |9 T1 e, v
2 T( ?$ s, Z, Q `. _it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and D& P' m+ b7 i, c( V+ e
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( D8 x; s" N8 |
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Let me just rewrite yours:
! P: C& X' t0 F4 s, O4 U( NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# H5 d* {/ ^+ c: @, c
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# D$ e0 O6 ^% G2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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2 u% h' o5 u! Y- n) R1 T( EThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( U0 X2 i1 t% H8 i; T! L$ e) Y X- X
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