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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:7 t( A8 V" t$ I5 i( M
o& k4 v2 U. Q2 c5 t; v4 oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 q4 T2 _7 A- l. u, H+ x$ V D$ _
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 p2 i% Z4 }3 ^; _8 g4 U4 y* K- o7 U
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Let me just rewrite yours:
# ^0 u% E- ~; _6 y0 pIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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: z7 N0 Q! j/ g1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 s. J& T+ e i' B
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* s5 N5 O( r0 n) r' u3 C
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., h" \$ h3 g7 K
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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