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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 ?& E; k+ g0 {7 J7 F
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ! m& I1 }* i0 ]0 b% {
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. [2 M4 f; ?5 ^: j. ]9 ~: ]* g* R: d6 y. I
Let me just rewrite yours:# z% p' W$ O, B! ? S2 E5 z6 p
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( W' L0 g- {) Y2 w$ n( w& I2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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$ u4 v9 r& ]# w' j# {There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 v% I6 {2 [/ W5 v. @1 W7 S. T" e
* b9 K! c" @" mThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 C- C* K. }1 X9 e6 T
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