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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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0 `$ T2 C7 P5 z5 p; T# xit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& r+ a: }: Q3 J) M; [ Weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 Y4 F" \5 g, o5 X
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Let me just rewrite yours:
* k8 T) V5 J9 r8 h% xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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8 J. I1 W* A; f. U1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 ]4 b7 ?9 M& ~& {- a
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' {0 P3 H, j" ~* MThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: ^/ W' {4 M" `( _- f, u: K( r
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