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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:7 ~! m! z: ~/ h/ c7 l8 C/ o
: X! P; c3 f6 _ sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. y1 t3 {/ X6 I& k) F8 E, ?everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 ]8 _# I" ~# ~" Q! W* k" X/ J; b7 i) n/ S/ a8 U+ j
Let me just rewrite yours:% G" j6 @8 r, O
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; a, q; `5 w* P$ P2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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