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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:" c" @ ?2 e' B$ I6 ]
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everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - @- d; _! r6 J6 R; o. u, G/ ~( @- p, i! ~, I7 n) j! I$ Y9 |
Let me just rewrite yours:
5 h1 `- }7 U% ^, U, GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: z$ V, F, n" P8 X9 v% F
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
/ ]8 F! Q8 Z. f6 u9 h& J2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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