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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , U. \3 Q- Y0 a
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 f* I7 Q2 @ S4 N) {7 S2 Q* A& e5 u7 w
Let me just rewrite yours:
' e/ `' P- d$ z( N- CIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 g) f" y* l) @% p
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!) q8 W( O' B: J; Z; z6 x% T
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* d' v7 N9 s" U
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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, p2 `" `! l6 ]4 m1 J7 Y0 x. NThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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