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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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" U; m* r* l5 f6 r6 `it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ; H' O. N: T( c. U/ f7 k$ D2 V
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . b9 {# m, j) t6 \' ?
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Let me just rewrite yours:
# M( A4 K7 s& M& @It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- d$ b( S0 Y% y/ X2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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, d' Z! O: u6 p6 a$ v8 d7 F( FThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ J3 \" Q) H* G7 Z% m7 {( _, Y
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