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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:9 [" M! Y$ j, n) M
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! o [, \9 n Peveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . H3 I% L6 s+ P8 \
' W4 a0 w! E4 t% _+ A* R- BLet me just rewrite yours:
: Y P) D+ b2 _/ e+ mIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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7 E' o2 I: L1 A' j, u L" X" c3 |1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
2 F6 ?# p! u" ` X- I W8 G2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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& w! R9 q9 e! K+ _& B- E% lThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; U+ ]' r) S r/ s3 A& A
! w# P }: L7 w3 {8 E5 cThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* A! m. R9 A( x! V
* @4 o! ^! `$ v- u2 d4 u3 e: hGretz. |
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