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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:$ `. j+ x5 |" C9 u
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 ^6 {2 ]8 m( H. O4 j9 \# \: q6 D% Ceveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! Q2 a. N4 t9 Z( A. d9 f& S
! R/ x9 M' Y' KLet me just rewrite yours:
9 k& s, y5 n% r: k! c7 K# ]6 CIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
/ b& M: ?! |# M) j2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) u" S3 c3 J' d. i Z8 P$ N5 K
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. J+ x2 c5 n& q N- p
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- J+ y( ?- [' Q; x7 l) ]: Z2 i) O
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