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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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& ^8 A5 ^: q% c$ a3 @% Q8 x$ Hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and " I$ _* W s4 _! I0 f
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * b! I" A7 ?5 l6 {* S+ T. D) `" Z) W, @
) A4 n0 P1 G0 ?; c& f1 E) wLet me just rewrite yours:3 L) v' f- T- Q% ~9 I
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 u+ g0 t, ~- L7 \$ s
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 d0 L$ ^. d1 e% C
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.1 f0 a1 y1 [1 X/ l
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# y; P( o- j9 k7 K
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' _- R6 F! x7 p& C7 s
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