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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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7 H9 Z# A- r: `it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
- V" Q3 A2 @) N+ {5 g( I$ Feveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " R8 W5 v9 L9 l
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Let me just rewrite yours:5 _- H+ F1 [/ k3 X9 h, \
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 _' \0 O2 v5 P, P9 \" c2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# V1 F6 ]% b f) Q
# l1 O% a" f" G1 A; Z2 nThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. L. u2 ~4 n! k+ g( ?
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