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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 p \+ {$ ?( P/ H) ]! b
" Z& Z; T N) w2 bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 B6 v* `. m9 }; E; I3 `2 w
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " b* `/ `* ]! m1 }* e$ C6 G* a8 m
9 o" B) z7 }7 aLet me just rewrite yours:
4 p1 H+ B% O- ^$ lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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. s' v& O& k# W5 s& M. o/ A1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 w5 x6 m" E- P- [( I* H
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 m5 m- T* I1 Y! z
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; ~3 n2 `+ e; a" X, zThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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