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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 [+ N6 W- S5 L8 q9 u" c
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" j6 j& w( r$ J7 I9 Teveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. @6 p8 b- S9 m x* t' T) p0 j4 m7 x- M2 G) s: }/ N
Let me just rewrite yours:
' a0 J& K7 a+ N2 |( ~+ E7 |, y5 U0 NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me }6 y3 w$ Q" a* ~1 N* d
6 |7 e; V* ]7 l5 \1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. j7 l* c& u( U0 J
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% h# z" H2 |6 X
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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+ a5 X. Q( F; f. A2 \! _2 iThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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