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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; ?6 G2 C! y/ q- S; ]+ I
) s( `9 c" J- e8 d: Mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 ?8 G+ K! V% o
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 r1 z3 f6 ` K6 } D# B! t0 m5 t& Q) e
& H0 U5 h- K: ?6 {Let me just rewrite yours:
/ d) {& B0 C9 c& ^/ YIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( x# e" q! ~, L! y- F2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) X3 t9 E2 s. F' V! B/ [7 U
; N, ^# }3 S" `( l$ ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 s7 u* ^! f% S) s/ w
; N& U, F' X$ M: n3 TThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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