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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:6 p& o3 B5 ?$ X
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 S: \" \% k& s, ?
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 O; P( W' r8 v8 E- j9 A2 J
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Let me just rewrite yours:
k7 Z6 k; o8 B5 g. ^% F" |It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: `% T5 ^0 X+ J9 P
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
/ l/ P5 t1 F5 K/ Y L# H2 r2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 F j, r9 C5 j& D, }0 `
% m& c) X- e, v G4 x+ sThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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( b, H4 y3 T! K, gThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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