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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:7 N6 ^8 a! Z- [, i
8 @' c: M/ s: _it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) n* ^$ c! @0 m0 c" g: S
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 T4 i# H; o, e) S* _" O$ A
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Let me just rewrite yours:
, L: A1 l9 x2 MIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
. @8 l7 C. o' l0 o: Y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., h9 ? t/ G# O: _4 u
6 E# ^- R# z0 w e o) M5 PThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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