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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! x5 l( c) Z, c) H
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 _( {/ T. I" @
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + B2 |7 i/ x8 d8 Z7 ]* [. H& \
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Let me just rewrite yours:
- m# r; i: G$ E3 ~3 k+ |3 Z- q! OIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me9 C8 E7 }& |. v, L: R/ l X
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& p* T8 H5 H: J( v& g1 `" A9 I2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. @. [/ q# u7 y- c% |
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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