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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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8 h6 Q, N$ u0 s x; g5 _it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 b- {. v' A0 R* z7 c' d
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " T& q* y3 |7 C2 F/ X! ^* T6 H9 c3 L/ b w. w2 ~
Let me just rewrite yours:
3 Y+ b3 M( J/ V" o3 GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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+ v' e9 {; f, o( t* o4 Z1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% ^4 @' d; ~+ z) B8 d& K' a, D2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 r* W2 i6 F$ b6 U: SThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: R E6 l6 W( [1 I. ^
! W, a6 M7 ]$ O. y. }, Y5 a0 xThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 f; g, A5 y. c, X. w# M
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