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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 s8 H" G A) u7 l9 m% F+ Y3 V
0 K; R( L9 u& u1 t: ~it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - ?& n0 J; G# _% g5 T" _
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 ^& y; e0 N; [9 D& m0 V, h" a# O! d8 r3 W+ n
Let me just rewrite yours:
. ^: X. ? |, F% C( YIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me( X E' A9 ^% z ^8 ~
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% _) G: D* r9 R3 K( A" B1 }4 q+ E
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* {) g; {5 M1 }, `5 j4 E6 K1 i
6 n& n' c2 W, m9 N, QThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 Q0 z7 q+ k! e/ K# o; G
9 m: }9 i3 s4 {3 a( i% yThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: d& H; W, v/ w2 t8 Z& f3 V, @2 `7 ~
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