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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 F- X+ U9 w/ G. e# Y6 ^3 H% ]/ e
' k3 f5 z3 q" [3 K% yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ F- j, j/ n* meveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 |/ ?7 p( Y. g$ s
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Let me just rewrite yours:
2 ?, j! z" a/ s1 u" {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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7 M9 F- U& h6 b1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 C" L: S0 K9 D9 F' m" q, R
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.8 E, z1 \& I: J- N* d
8 n% ?* v; X( i: U$ xThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 M% O* @3 A: M# |; o7 M( {# n
[) P0 E+ s- ]: j0 E+ ~: h( q. _Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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