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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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: u, `7 n$ A( W) Y4 z, ?1 Z4 s. G5 Yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & N# F$ |/ p) D7 D! @- j& f9 h
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) N& S) t' l% I$ t/ Q" c6 l( g: ], T- y7 \4 a
Let me just rewrite yours:9 Z6 Z) ?% p. Z6 S8 h8 |
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' j. l9 P7 I% x
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 o% S% z0 M/ M0 ]) l9 {4 [
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.1 O/ ]1 w- |; G. i, g
( U8 f F) S7 d& dThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ B1 \' O8 l( x1 x: n
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