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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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- m- @' Y, Y; R! E9 @it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : l& s. n& V# Y1 T4 o! t; [
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : y* k0 N, E1 S5 ~9 d
) Q0 l3 S- b9 v2 Q# A% |9 d# ]Let me just rewrite yours:
6 \8 Q" C8 O- K+ q* l2 G* y cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!$ f+ _; R2 p3 g% e: {- t; q( F
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 T J# [* s- G3 r: [: J8 U4 S7 M0 W
' r" ]" h/ W% i) N' r, gThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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! y- f7 b) S7 G" `8 K% zThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ \& z! e( `. l0 M: v+ @
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