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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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* j: o# m4 h$ c; G% s% Cit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 x: g& y. S* Z [' z' D7 h* J
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 Z: e' O8 ]8 H: l
: f2 }' e& I X8 Q' L2 ULet me just rewrite yours:
" t2 n5 a/ r8 D1 J2 D H. v+ t _It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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5 E" b- B& M& ]8 F1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!& O) _% c6 F; w- s: b( B# E
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., C9 ~1 W8 Z9 }& s+ ^1 v, j* D C) L
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% z% J* r/ N" D/ u$ S0 m6 W* c A
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