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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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& S3 t5 d) C8 D+ E2 oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( v) g' s9 U9 Q% ~ ?" R
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , r7 d3 ]! p8 U$ i, L
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Let me just rewrite yours:
- a! u7 V) u: i% ]It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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, i5 P* U6 ]7 M' ]/ b3 D2 G$ w# E1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* `/ U$ G2 i8 @( C2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; x8 H% R% ^5 q% t- z5 o
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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