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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# b" v* g: x5 T ^5 [
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 ]; W" ]- m# h9 K) F
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' Q) r" n% M% n4 k9 h% F' W0 n# u' p) A* _) Z* Z9 _
Let me just rewrite yours:
5 P2 T4 w" v6 ]- C g* ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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& X; Q" V/ w' \/ y9 z; L+ z1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
7 T3 {& g: P: P) k7 X3 i2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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