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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ {: G0 G6 M/ i5 \& P1 p
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; @+ u+ t* c! c+ m5 i# I: p% deveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 Y# s Q6 d# i# b5 ?" p
/ M0 s/ o# h8 J( E6 {3 [1 z3 RLet me just rewrite yours:
1 k! n5 \# I Y+ ?5 D. NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( i; @( s k5 M+ @% \2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., v/ H' a2 e* v
; m* m7 x. l9 G# ^ iThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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