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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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( G- ^! T; U0 [6 }it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ `/ I. r+ p; c& ^
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 l b2 O2 D; z
! j8 A6 L' n7 F( w4 ]Let me just rewrite yours:
5 \+ g) O8 L" k, r. F7 IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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# g" M, g( |# s3 z' D1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
2 q0 a+ O4 z5 r: ?0 r K2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- [$ [8 v+ w7 T- G- g
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.' f) P7 J- m- {5 d( ^
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- e1 Y, q: b/ X6 Q0 H: [4 f! V6 G o# Q
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