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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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4 z' l; C5 c! u8 i! bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* P: `6 H2 [9 D- {% ^$ Feveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 g# J, E+ G. L I& Q- P
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Let me just rewrite yours:
: W7 t, b* Q8 l( x) GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me( h& w( a. l% ]9 W) |5 b1 N
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. b1 Z/ {3 i0 P7 [/ ?$ @3 U. w8 J$ u
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 W2 i' y9 ^2 }( L
! _( A: a- k4 Y9 [There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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