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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 p( u. @+ |6 v
5 Q* Q* h7 E3 h0 _; L8 Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 X# [$ |* x+ n: E) severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - }4 H- Z1 `* k6 k" E* D \" c" k- f6 z' e- s. E
Let me just rewrite yours:
F" }8 l. m0 z1 vIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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! h9 b3 h+ N( D+ J ~. y6 {8 f1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. p! O) J, F/ p$ S' }! ~, F# ^6 H
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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- n! m2 p! a. q" E9 x" c& {Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." S8 x. v9 V) ~1 P, |7 x
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