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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- v- F- R8 E- Y. |! q
. ], c; x2 V* T. sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 m" c4 N( _! K3 g* u: _! `& X& [2 v
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : U1 G4 b( w( i0 Y" c) O
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Let me just rewrite yours:/ _" m( E1 T& x+ F- }! U
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ g5 s/ v5 E/ V$ u) X! x. V
" Z$ E; v3 L9 C3 o+ ?6 B1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( m% e' b; C9 I5 I6 M
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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9 G" ^3 X; Q# S* p* C cThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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& _. j1 h0 G3 v8 jThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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