- 帖子
- 1691
- 精華
- 1
- 威望
- 245
- 魅力
- 0
- 讚好
- 0
- 性別
- 男
|
81#
發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
| 只看該作者
Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
1 e1 r4 D2 X" r( K
$ }& g5 t' X0 Rit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 a8 y/ h5 v4 x0 T l! n4 Ueveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : r' E' c: O( J% Q' h& |6 N& d* y6 y* d! V" o1 B+ V
Let me just rewrite yours:8 |' |2 z' d5 b2 i% _1 [
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
) c1 R$ j# B0 S
+ E3 ^% d) m" q1 K1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- G5 v# [. X, Z# L2 {, S9 a
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
+ h ^3 H2 s+ m1 |% h9 P; Q$ T1 z' c
There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
; F/ ^9 m" o4 D8 ~
. F) H; @' l1 Z. V6 m/ pThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ |; U2 b; X0 P# S
, j+ a5 X. E3 S+ a4 u, BGretz. |
|