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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 4 ?$ P% g& F* f( G. ]5 `
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * x( |) C6 a. z! z% ^# U" l0 z5 J0 t/ l3 o p% W
Let me just rewrite yours:' U7 w: l6 b3 C7 K6 n$ G& V3 ^
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) O" W2 F% N, W, a
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( R6 M% D1 i, ~
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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- e0 p2 U/ S; l( ~" J. WThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* \5 y$ H$ }5 `) O+ t
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