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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 R3 ]% [* j4 ~) ^! d
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 a, w7 m3 B) w4 r5 |' r9 Q" F
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Let me just rewrite yours:
: K$ V* U6 k* o( q0 p6 E( rIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
/ u, y) \! H' t* N, n0 `8 F' i* e" e2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.9 C2 S# a3 p3 F* A1 b% l# Y
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 r: w. a; r( N9 C
# T# `+ f9 O! VThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% x( D6 ~0 j7 ?5 ^2 V
5 w* h9 D/ K# X) |Gretz. |
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