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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 {! }- X9 u) z$ C) T/ B# }
( _9 c3 ^/ K( u1 x: c# yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( u: g+ ?2 B: O" z6 q) |" a/ \
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 O Z- a! E4 L. J# a
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Let me just rewrite yours:
; g+ U' w0 a9 o- q) nIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me9 c, K4 `. z" M5 U' r7 V. t
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% L0 D) z! o* K7 _! k0 l, N5 C+ c
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 V) {# S# [# v3 `. M* X! A6 ]1 K
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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