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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:+ A2 ?# W7 C1 g& p; m0 C
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) Q, x$ V; p; Z7 Z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 g: i; k; I9 K0 Y9 L
( p4 }; Q; H. N! x$ Z2 i4 F0 bLet me just rewrite yours:
$ o9 W* q u& h( N/ K$ x. P6 \It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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& i. K j/ `, T5 H* W$ P# a0 H1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- o( e5 f8 e8 F: Q4 I% C
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ a' k# K" g" U( f X
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.4 N5 C# ? O/ V: L3 R9 J" ]9 U
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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