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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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6 X( ]2 p4 y( lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# y5 e9 r- z0 {0 ^8 g5 Ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - `; c# ?$ I9 k" y5 T- f, K: Q5 ^. H) F
Let me just rewrite yours:
2 W" S/ \1 ^1 m. A6 \, Q" N# I5 q4 ^It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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i7 y# m# i" }0 }1 _% P& P) X0 {1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!" v# z3 _7 _) l* s
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. f4 N' Y5 r0 O$ ?1 {/ C
/ v, s- |* F, BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ e$ f2 h: f8 @. S& d
; e( _8 p) g3 k; a& Q2 _. \3 O8 [Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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