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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 n5 c# m. |( w3 G
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and l! U* \+ u8 f, `( x0 f3 H1 s: g8 @
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 T( K# ~) U+ m( V7 a2 w. E8 y* p Z6 J) f
Let me just rewrite yours:
% `6 |4 _' [6 d1 O1 Q- e1 H0 {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
1 M8 j0 I# g- z' ?3 q ~2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 x/ N, `* n, {' ]5 L" |3 F
( H8 ^0 X; p. x9 S8 S( Y% Y: r6 KThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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