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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & ?5 G. M2 h2 b0 U
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; C, n8 T; b8 x$ Y
* W5 V( e- l n0 W: O! [Let me just rewrite yours:6 y8 E& x7 i# j% ?3 k
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
7 r" R7 |. A4 o4 _& I" M8 ^; e2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* q0 C% A& n* \1 H: s
" {) F3 u) o. W( l0 m4 \6 o, IThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow. q' D& Z& U/ y' D+ Q5 u& i+ L9 [1 ?
5 L# f$ Z7 E2 JThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." G) }( M: b3 f1 j c0 @
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