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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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* E1 |& w. j( r6 ^" n/ s5 ait doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% u% _0 `! b5 Q/ L1 ^everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 K: H" s0 s, Y
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Let me just rewrite yours:
8 l7 b' q1 w- j' [9 e! b ~( mIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!& i' ^! x5 o. \; q. F4 h& A
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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: z$ X& n# A/ C7 f0 `& RThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: }3 R4 p- h3 o; l8 N. k
: d. x5 J* U p2 H' N b0 v- W, s9 f7 |Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it., j9 m+ Y7 Z) I& Z$ w) g
$ s& I' V1 w& O5 t6 EGretz. |
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