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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 8 U/ v- d* I: c: Y4 ~6 j
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( e4 w. w* d" {* L/ ?8 }9 @$ ?8 X
Let me just rewrite yours:
5 Y. c+ J z, x0 T/ X0 c" T! MIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me1 B2 W. h" u2 ]$ N4 P+ W, N( `* w
$ Z* k5 Q( c! W1 o7 z1 U1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 s+ `2 n/ z: V. k
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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. b7 [& w, k2 K& K: m: L- ]9 rThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) N- _9 Q( g( c& v- T9 C
6 ~6 h" W* t1 |Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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