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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & j, T% r& o8 b; E$ Q! v+ ^6 i& c
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 ]: i# h1 z- s- R) g b; z) s* S+ K4 F# U: m& |2 w
Let me just rewrite yours:
8 m2 i7 Y/ n: R) x( bIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. ~& L- g. {* M% M) F# M/ X- n# f$ K
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.: ]% D) r" o: @1 Z% u
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) X% g% ?2 N# I1 y) D$ f1 C9 C% m" u
' y4 |6 k% n1 P' P& V. P/ HThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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