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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ Y* u$ @# ^' M% \% F! B
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ m" E" Z& L# J1 b; e/ ]9 ?# neveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * o8 w% n; V; ] s1 s$ |# m. s6 t& X5 Y+ o- b# M1 J
Let me just rewrite yours:
3 G6 d# t/ J" m( `: iIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) A* f0 u& U, |, J, F8 p' m7 @
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 G0 M* b( O, q9 ~' Z3 p9 X
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* V3 J( ^6 ~4 d3 t @
# ^% k/ K- Z1 F" |3 oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; c0 j1 Q0 T6 y: ?2 e9 d
. a4 F; D, t* p2 d0 z# h7 I* vThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. R" Q- @- S8 N0 ~
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