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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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; q1 T9 X! W- S+ O) T7 }! Bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 4 s5 C4 S6 b% `% t O
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " {" |$ I/ e/ u& v
. M; w. [2 k" B+ ULet me just rewrite yours:
0 U- L7 Z! H6 a% nIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!0 A$ ?" w# K6 U+ t W- z
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.: ~# f) z% L! _
i4 B( ^0 {% L& MThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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