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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
) t% Z$ \& y4 eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * M- k% m/ n8 }" T) ~ r
& c' [0 x- k6 E+ f5 FLet me just rewrite yours:, W; z/ g/ V1 |( ~' b$ }; c! @
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% v% r, B4 `' P2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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& s: ^3 [% R: l5 ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* U5 E/ C- ?; X) d8 r
9 B) Y; v1 t4 M$ R" |7 `- MThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.8 x* v: z3 I2 ?& ^" g
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