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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & p1 d- l3 p6 d. X8 c! K
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % F/ o# M, B; l
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Let me just rewrite yours:+ }8 F3 e! y( ]% |% z5 m, b: w7 c
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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& m* b3 _0 t8 `0 g' }- _1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; i" t$ C& _: {
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# O% d* B& |8 r. y2 X
$ r0 z" `$ Q0 w$ {: DThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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