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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:+ P% \& N. j% z3 r$ L% D
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 p$ b: m3 ~8 s8 M* Z! Q3 B' q: Q
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( S+ K9 `8 \6 d
+ X) J2 C- V( _/ s8 `Let me just rewrite yours:
" \! ]7 ]. ]8 `$ |9 d+ OIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: l3 \ b. v& J/ z: Q# n
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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& [9 m& R4 F* s# ?3 M. b# X9 r# BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 A" }6 a5 t) r0 y
- x% D, v6 a2 d/ EThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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