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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' Z* |. `! B, P" L/ Xeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 z4 z( C4 R, t+ k
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Let me just rewrite yours:
4 U" w+ k6 j, z- f% |! H0 X3 V0 bIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# l, _9 u# q# f. Q, G0 I; k
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!5 I3 D, K' P2 ~- @# g C
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 D/ R; s; a; `* Z W
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- X! ~1 _# U, R/ y# F
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