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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 d9 f9 `! V. f; f) m
+ k- i' g3 s5 sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 U: b" U% ]& M5 u* w
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ ~# k6 M1 H! C& S0 T7 N3 ^
* R0 U, N5 [0 L" A3 ^6 k- B. _; SLet me just rewrite yours:
: W5 m3 I2 J* m* f( A" a$ F7 uIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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+ N, b7 w/ N; B& U8 L c1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 o- a4 T4 q3 Z- _: q& X' S
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 N/ O _' L! O$ P9 BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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