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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& ~, j9 @. U) V2 Y
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and " E+ _9 f0 F3 X: m
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % Z6 `( C3 n3 X5 b' W1 ~
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Let me just rewrite yours:
. a) a& T+ Z+ z) g) rIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me1 u4 S* M4 S* X" @, w ]: }
* q: P& x. \9 A7 u8 J, x1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 e( `7 a- e+ T+ e% D6 W9 d: o
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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6 |# ]: e0 |, h( J+ C! UThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: a2 d9 E2 t4 A( m
- |" @' u7 W7 m$ F* NThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. n) R3 t0 P% I2 a8 h) E
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