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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:' Y9 _, @; P; r7 r
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
Z) w8 ~2 @6 N9 t" D Keveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( w3 w" l, |. t! k0 M; I" i3 u/ O2 d, j
Let me just rewrite yours:
: w% J+ S: d' Z- x2 l! fIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- ?) c% @7 p p6 k" w
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
3 Y/ t! o" j) N. C% R6 z! Y+ y2 Y d2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 k& o- z( D+ ~There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. q: p2 L6 P7 B9 j, G; o' U
/ \0 i6 E1 Z# d' o: Y# fThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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