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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 H' i T2 t Y$ }# y
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( V7 D. Y/ o+ C, v
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - ^ l4 p8 L J7 W7 R% [6 ]0 x9 E, `5 B# z6 l' m. y# g
Let me just rewrite yours:& m6 {2 K+ z" x3 K I p
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me; T3 h E8 |3 ^- Z, p$ i1 A
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- J( ~( n/ e; V/ R U$ y- i* N& o
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# w4 E- ~( j, Q9 [/ Z% u
: l: W! I! a# D# ]5 F, GThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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4 M! G2 v" g, O/ q; U! SThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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