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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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7 B, k' T+ |; m8 K3 p0 x hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ k! u! p. X- ~everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * j$ e! F7 i# K( r, p8 n
* l- v/ ^& q) H/ ~( @5 } ~% {Let me just rewrite yours:
4 j V( [, E8 Y3 c' A9 IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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' l. ?; O ^% |) q1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- k% l' n# N! H9 t
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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