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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! ~( F; `) `2 W) w3 ^
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 4 j6 a/ F' J1 M) u6 m
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 r3 U: p" R6 b" _6 L8 T7 J8 P$ j; p
Let me just rewrite yours:+ z8 J2 E3 M5 f! U# D
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!' x6 e: q, v% r! G" R
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 E' ~+ B3 L/ R6 I q, T$ J* MThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.) D% x# G" b) {% Z% M! e2 d. |
% k" l: N' ^: oThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.8 ~: b; V! J6 E6 g0 G
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