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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 D$ @. e- G/ Z/ ]3 r& u
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / o* x/ ^" E0 M( x& x
" X2 i4 k3 Z' M, }) t6 C0 oLet me just rewrite yours:
. T) k! R2 |, `+ P GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, {( q' E$ ?8 F# Z H3 a2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.& | M1 y, B0 @
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