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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 |' A7 |/ M# k$ t, s
; a. I: x ~6 B6 Git doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
( T# v1 }- L" deveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 y# a" j5 x7 r% _
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Let me just rewrite yours:
- m. R' I/ r/ h4 c) A# W: PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: K3 a# H( }6 h7 M- {, R2 \
; E( w' n0 x: {6 s( F+ f3 Y) {1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!" ]% y" Q+ W1 j. n6 }9 h* z
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.& c$ o: p$ ]6 P- B6 z
, y8 c8 b m WThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ ^! \+ R) v- n/ k
( i6 n; |( D" f' ?6 k0 ^# t) R- f, EThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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