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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 @9 {( f' l4 T+ B7 W) R
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
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Let me just rewrite yours:
2 s( a1 d( p) Q5 D7 p3 V) R- WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. I9 A* o7 T' l# ~* h+ h" x3 n
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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! k4 ?. m5 V1 h' X6 g9 M& }Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* d7 Y8 k. n/ f# Y- G6 s! C
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