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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 @# S6 \8 w/ \1 @9 V2 I0 E8 k$ Leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % \- [* C/ o x
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Let me just rewrite yours:
; Q5 ~" J. f1 w2 SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 ]/ x' J8 Y+ z2 N9 r8 b7 P8 W
/ R/ }/ K/ p5 X/ C7 u. _2 ?8 y1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, O! [9 y" ?, h3 G2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. e B1 H8 S) B
* A8 p9 s+ `) ?' H/ i0 G j3 D: a- GThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 E, F' O; j2 ~& u
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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