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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, O8 b1 d" p+ t& Z) t4 B
9 U& n4 Y) L7 y. H3 vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 _, s( d0 P+ L8 e9 keveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 h' U0 @5 W7 Z. ]
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Let me just rewrite yours:
3 o f9 c- u( y& [It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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8 r r# n. G" c, @8 W9 J1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( ?! {6 ~8 m7 @
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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* @! h. t5 x" w# V+ m1 |) b3 `There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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8 w) U" y9 B7 W( p& qThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 Q6 e' F6 D5 g0 |# a
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