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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 A& M/ |* p1 z2 u$ U+ Aeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * v* @+ f' I, ?. r9 y
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Let me just rewrite yours:
" g" E' q. n$ x) @# Y3 f: vIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me! Q- \# d2 E5 ?: u0 s4 B; j
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* d' G& |/ s. T/ B2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.& F% t m* h5 ?
( ^: }* ^8 Z; ]+ c- v+ X* [$ {There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." v6 c9 ]" |5 _- r4 h: e% |
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.6 F5 q+ V/ V6 E5 G1 J
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