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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 f# }6 P7 Z% q S
9 K) b" ]5 s3 k' l; ~it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * g2 C) C% ^* L* q! U u0 L
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' Q& H$ E' U# z, _ k7 ]+ S7 X- j ]0 i, i8 V- y
Let me just rewrite yours:
2 {3 o6 s5 \/ z7 A% WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: Q3 [5 X" |: Z" N. R8 S
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 g; x6 ~4 H, b$ p2 s+ j+ X5 ]
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.- B1 p5 T4 W1 s* k
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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