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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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! g" n4 C# i) R* @5 d/ w# `; [it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. z; i. _5 {1 h. {- Eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , p/ T Y- L3 U+ Q2 w
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Let me just rewrite yours:- u- p% U" V; z7 b
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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" Z7 |, t# Z9 `* l1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing! w( S' U0 [+ K2 o' v }
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.$ F1 v; J- x0 W; ], O- ~
# u% w. O* m" w) qThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 r: e/ W5 \6 J& d3 y
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