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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and " t# j" p1 \7 K: O$ M
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + q& b3 k; [& k
9 G" C5 C2 X8 j7 I, PLet me just rewrite yours:
/ U) H! c! _% R/ e/ y; yIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# F" Q; k) Q) Y4 P6 b( R
* S. V% |' N/ a/ u$ ^. m& g1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!! l6 W; f( W9 F0 S6 |: B9 _2 e
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- S% e2 N% {& A
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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