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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:( |9 D8 Z: s' M& m* l1 Z
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! g9 E% l2 F% c9 R7 {everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ G/ V- l4 X0 H U( w C+ b9 k J- x3 ~! v
Let me just rewrite yours:4 ^2 ?! }6 `( F. ^5 a
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 G* L, U/ Z9 V) v; T1 Z
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
2 l8 d) q; x. `: o! e' a2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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( y. m2 ^1 i, ^; \. bThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 k/ t8 g3 c4 H1 ?; x
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.8 b$ C0 ?. n7 n; I( ~
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