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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , ?" N/ z6 F2 R) K" m
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # W( [- w0 ]! o" Z' k8 K
+ c V/ }/ \! U3 \2 tLet me just rewrite yours:
% r. @% b, Y% e1 A! ^- M aIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ N+ X$ ?, h0 d7 |% v6 h% z# O- C% |
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 w5 T* j$ X& j5 n2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- S1 M% ]3 B3 U) T7 d: D: V
# A. A ?, ]. n, kThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% q2 k5 |0 m7 J2 \# Z9 ?7 c
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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