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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 }+ k, Q- n6 d; Y8 a
4 G2 A1 F0 C' Fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ o& n% i. h& z z8 q7 Weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , f+ B' }/ d8 [) Y! w: j9 g3 s
4 Q d/ v1 Z; o& M5 q: W' u* h( CLet me just rewrite yours:
" a9 k# w @/ E6 S7 S; dIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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! d" J. l" ~8 |$ A. p. w. r' S1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ c( h1 K. Z! E( l- U' z$ Z
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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% k4 G! o* k7 H! ~% @' QThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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+ ~1 r7 Z& {' w4 G% |/ a9 MThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* n" V6 [5 B. n8 w, X
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