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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 z+ Y4 F$ O6 Q% w! W* l
1 P% B4 {0 u1 ~it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. j! w7 P, ?; @; Qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 K( m1 ]% v: p9 w/ D4 G3 X; V9 o/ t: d8 q" h& \* S
Let me just rewrite yours:- |% L7 g1 U' z! d
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me. b8 i2 [# f, O& b8 f+ r3 J c! ?
" |$ V6 V3 l0 w% J1 p7 h, r9 `% W1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# C5 \3 V1 }+ J. a
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# T# p K8 T3 [4 r
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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