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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ ?) E! p9 q) e5 I9 f5 y# O4 \, d
- I9 n3 X& Y+ | Q2 d" X, g) ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* V" f7 \$ ?1 p! y& q0 j+ H1 Y1 qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 f( P4 H/ p& U! @% z
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Let me just rewrite yours:
) @" {: L: W! R; |+ S" b; _It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 {+ M v2 H( e) W6 g, H# u
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( D+ c5 U/ w7 C I* C1 m) t( s
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.6 s9 z% p. t0 Z1 N5 M) z
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.) Z/ t/ o! G! r
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