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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# O. @- S6 S0 y5 I# t: x. _it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 4 ^9 X z) ?; O& F5 i' r4 {, q, N- R
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; v3 a% G$ D+ D$ n5 F: R+ r, y$ T
Let me just rewrite yours:8 `! Y/ A {! f, V9 W
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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( o5 ]+ ~0 b% }3 P* z3 Z1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 R% e8 o# l' `2 F2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) L2 S0 e% h* A; B6 x* k
, K; H- C: ~) E2 [/ z) BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 R B. o0 e1 M0 h, i
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.0 J2 e$ K" s+ Y5 @
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