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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, z3 g+ ?% _; H" F" ]
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
1 ]: v# E3 U' K- T9 keveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 ^0 Z1 N" \ }$ o3 h9 w
% q' M$ X5 N9 N( Q3 tLet me just rewrite yours:
; V8 Y9 p4 _, P# E5 PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: o! a5 \. N) i7 T* R7 p, E
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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1 k! l6 J1 U. S1 A) i9 d. C `There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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! ^* g4 _7 }2 O6 x% _% mThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.1 k9 o# f# H, f+ W% V8 P; E# x
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