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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, O5 t/ H) v8 b
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and % q7 L# J8 C, U
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # A; H2 Q: {2 |# }1 @. A
, i! T+ x1 _0 o1 |7 e4 H/ L2 zLet me just rewrite yours:
" o3 l1 O8 n2 l" d0 ]$ ^9 S' ]: D/ FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, U0 J: `) O. }
% C, U( C+ N |$ y2 h7 b; U. `1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, C6 ?8 ?8 Q8 }. p P
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) d2 O% e F9 k! b B0 I2 g: `There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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* U2 ~! K: ?9 t: h7 k9 rThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% l4 F; U' s- Y4 s; J
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