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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) d; F+ y$ @! B! A1 H( `/ W
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 q0 r6 h) D5 @6 v0 u/ v
3 l3 K! s/ o; `6 J% I8 V, k. [Let me just rewrite yours:
: B2 e7 Z A4 y4 F+ ZIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 {. i( c! x. ]% l6 ]
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; h) Y7 o& P* \: M( h) u5 ~) |Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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Gretz. |
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