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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; k9 _" X2 d) A2 j T
( j( e/ ], T3 R8 J' R3 Yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: O# j4 Z; {# @ C5 f# G6 {* heveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 X8 r- D" Y, l% j) L/ G3 I- q5 d7 G
6 j6 A. t3 i$ y, W; K1 a7 OLet me just rewrite yours:6 o. I( `: E8 [& f. A
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!& S% M7 A, ]2 o% f4 {
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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Q+ }2 R4 N) K' a6 C @' zThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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