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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ U+ g0 r% U: C( N
: U* _3 n. d3 J) d& I& Fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 E6 V1 U/ P7 @+ B `- [5 W( aeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : l% v1 R4 J( P- s( h
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Let me just rewrite yours:6 @% t+ S+ q# D- C1 {( T8 p
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( D- k4 L1 q, S! g% `7 d# X
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.$ C9 H; g) b/ ]
: R. X: A8 B; J/ a- l- K! C) rThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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8 J& M! f: o, z; K$ GThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." }2 j! w$ U9 P( V. K+ E
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