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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + h) V% O% }8 a3 w4 Z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) A7 l. b @, _! x( ~! |% P" L% i1 P: T' n# N/ |
Let me just rewrite yours:
3 X; l. w% F( ?* x+ t3 ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me2 w3 W, D0 P2 \
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, b( Z+ S A0 o* w- c
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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+ n4 ~! k4 H7 w; k% n& K4 ^There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ o# q x m, ]" L) w; E- g* ` \
5 v+ Q d3 R! Z4 w8 I6 ^Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ y7 M, A* A5 |# {5 }$ c8 W
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