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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
6 Q; }7 o( E- k4 ~2 d0 Teveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ a& Z4 p2 Q' l; ^3 j. ~
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Let me just rewrite yours:
" G1 a h% a& u+ s+ C3 }; BIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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2 ^- c" s. B7 [, U% M9 K3 ]! h1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 d I" n: U8 e6 p" S$ {' l2 u
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- Z# c+ A. X% {& V, h) O, ?
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., @1 S T. I0 t" X# D
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ K& d8 u/ p" r
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