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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:( r! j: \: ]: L# {) s: T+ G, r
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( X q. P! e; _- s$ h9 l
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " w( |7 E8 m# N" m% F9 r+ q ]% D u+ f+ t( h! i
Let me just rewrite yours:. c" f+ f* Y& B/ f
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 N$ c. s2 H9 D |/ `+ A
! @/ f- y. [0 Z; E1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ [2 u# w7 M1 v+ L V2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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6 n( h S) ]( D* }% g# J8 m7 fThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' V- b( o& E4 T! _& r
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