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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:$ b8 E/ M& j. j, X+ r
5 f K# ]% O0 o$ W* G7 Xit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 `$ k2 `4 o( w6 ?$ o5 O8 o
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 \( s9 s+ [1 k, G4 j9 M- f7 {9 o, l! a) M! T
Let me just rewrite yours:
( w5 P: U$ r7 U2 o" c+ i7 JIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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' h' Z9 m) c3 N7 W, h( b. y1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' b: @" @. q' s+ A$ c2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. o+ _' P5 ]; f( u8 ~; T) X
5 N% V" n$ e) X0 R8 p% ]4 u# \Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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