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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% ^- @5 D* v6 f: ~, |' Qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& \" p# U& S5 i# I. D, Veveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; A& F* C' r- P1 G- |% c& {7 p4 l
# s8 w! }, T" Z8 W" RLet me just rewrite yours:
6 ]/ a- h3 v* q( QIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! E8 W$ j5 [0 _+ ?0 q- I5 } I. Y* L2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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6 S4 D* G" H* V4 G, f: C* z! L7 NThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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