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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! j- x+ Q. d/ \/ c3 U: X. t
2 m y s1 w7 @ Yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' C3 h# [8 L2 qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 P( P) f* ?% l. w2 A T0 G5 s! y1 f/ F: v* N- v
Let me just rewrite yours:
# u @/ ~3 W, N/ ~3 f) I: m+ E9 v$ wIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 y- n1 o$ e# Z9 Y
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.' D7 p# ]8 K+ k: q( ~6 P$ ?9 U
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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