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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& u7 q( i' e8 X; A- j0 G9 ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - _' G( e/ D4 ]5 M, J( V
" R' v, m3 f$ t: G& J$ n3 D# KLet me just rewrite yours:
+ S& e/ h5 C- ]It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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( V8 j) [1 m1 Y- r1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 V8 z: ~! Z! Y2 T
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la." K3 x$ o3 g- m, M
5 q- d% y7 K+ v5 b$ Z wThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 i: o6 e3 f) L3 P" J2 A0 w
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.) D' G5 ]2 y8 e. F s; j
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