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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ; G% n! s! |7 d- ?
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me.
( O: T1 r; c+ @2 U/ Z# l: r( b" B% DLet me just rewrite yours:
/ E% C1 ^: ~( cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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, V( h+ j% D2 N1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 {9 G' Z) h! f/ p
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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3 L% w, J5 W s! NThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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' b% c! }6 t! ?" WThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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