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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:+ G$ G5 O* d6 a- G
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 f! o5 A" ]8 _7 F4 A1 Meveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 u( G" T n9 P$ B: [/ Y, o3 F6 t i+ l6 w
Let me just rewrite yours:0 b" F7 R2 c2 ~
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
0 l. k, J' X) z2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. c& P- R( Z) s
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% S" p t0 u8 w. G2 f
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. E- P- t9 d; g" X$ T0 K, v
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