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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:6 _4 R1 f9 I' c& }7 o
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; U8 J( K. ], r# c" |6 Severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : O6 B6 _0 e. C9 G( _( A; f: k/ _" g/ H
Let me just rewrite yours:
% p7 [! A# G3 Y% |& M+ yIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 h. d* s& U0 A, z2 T h
# p1 M3 p: K3 n( w1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!5 [- r2 Y* A2 Q$ h" h
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% ^6 k7 c* L. D8 v8 b# U, p
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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