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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 s; [' X2 d; }) Q3 p- L
8 t2 c; r5 ?8 _$ a: Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / x v2 C1 a, [) ?% T
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : S/ w( p6 J4 _
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Let me just rewrite yours:
* s/ j8 ]+ m' t P% [) P( d+ a& lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: O/ P2 k+ h+ K, }4 `# u6 i0 B+ N8 ^: y
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% y& O$ G3 t7 P2 j, f, i2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 w! `- H1 A& v- W8 s
( w7 p7 C# F& s1 pThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; y; s+ a' K. Q; l5 h* JThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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