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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ \; b: e4 Z) G- W3 W6 Z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 I/ D0 N$ k/ |1 v' _5 Z" _
9 K7 ?$ s: r& B( j1 N8 M6 sLet me just rewrite yours:5 e% H+ |/ y8 s2 R$ R
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ S0 w* `6 W1 z, j `
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
7 `( C# n( P3 K( ~: k1 U2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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+ H& K. g! b. r+ R: l" OThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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