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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% p) v4 A' B a3 {" h1 d$ nit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - P* m5 L3 r8 B4 J `
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 @# `! a1 z: [' z0 J
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Let me just rewrite yours:. v, B" `$ }4 t7 Y, I
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
+ Z- X& g% B% ]& l. E4 R2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.$ z: w& s k. S
' b/ A/ o8 v" I1 } V' ]There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* C" Z5 i. s* B% Y
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." h7 d$ A0 L+ u D. o
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