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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 u& U$ w( W/ z; {
6 g% {6 p+ J, P$ W+ H+ R3 M# Oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : n! H7 ~7 s' J* M4 W0 a
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( Q( e, P0 I2 \ I, e
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Let me just rewrite yours:8 ]; Z4 ?! r" u7 m% x @4 A9 n1 S
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 b- e n# {6 i2 ^+ r1 L2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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& n ?0 Y0 u, u, k/ n0 e! p0 S$ kThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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