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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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' u+ t# q& T9 C, E+ V" q8 Qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / I( ^/ I" @$ f4 f. \7 d3 b
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . ?1 P6 y. ~: f5 y, x2 t9 ?9 T
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Let me just rewrite yours:
) X& S# b! x) x0 ?+ T3 u9 aIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" s( A/ `0 e( p5 Q; c
# ]* }$ n0 V* A: r1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
+ p( ?/ H& @1 W' i1 W3 V! L2 @- s! ^2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 B$ v, V* Y1 _' G7 g
9 X, A, B: @5 V' M. @2 A& GThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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