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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:3 y. O) Z- W$ Q' i3 H7 z
* {4 e$ s3 _2 M1 Fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
4 V2 q3 q% f( Z; ?+ weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & C. Z0 r, _ j. C! ^7 _- ]' t, i) ]' j, Q% W s: n
Let me just rewrite yours:
3 O2 \3 ~1 k# }! L9 J. DIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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2 P# F- ^9 u% B1 P& K) r# J% T1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
a- [7 O' V6 ], Y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; W3 M F# R8 E: f8 Z* _* Y
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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