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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- [2 h* `0 Q# E5 J) ]9 M
6 H; V" k% N, W: w7 E. e) Bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 l) q& G% D; ]. @9 U/ x( m% h' B) L
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 W! h9 {: x/ |8 F& g1 N" @4 ?
4 k# l; Q5 ?, J+ Y2 w0 H+ GLet me just rewrite yours:
4 _: K/ ~6 h# O S" {6 bIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" A. ?4 J& L# \% {( V
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% E. l g# }: c5 E/ {8 N# c( l- u2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., H3 L% h) s9 K. M3 V
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* }' [- b( ]8 S9 a
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: Y& N( m1 I4 Q8 N! x
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