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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:6 P9 S( Y6 M* H
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ ^, H; C* {' n; ]1 Y. W+ ]% f
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - V( A0 O# a, X; V/ ~8 b
2 e1 u; Z$ a" Q& X1 c! JLet me just rewrite yours:$ t9 F% s; J! Z- u
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) d, O' E5 D1 a
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% z- z# Y$ N- S2 W: v5 D1 K2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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+ W2 A- ^# T$ Y/ ~7 b2 [There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.- R& J( v( k0 h5 u. w/ a
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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