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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:* H1 g3 x5 u# P& y0 R3 S: H
3 T" ~& i, q- I" @it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
- s5 r+ `1 S2 H6 N- W1 ` heveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 c. T5 B* }+ D: U( D. x4 J' F
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Let me just rewrite yours:
- \$ u$ J2 C% F' G& {2 nIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( w, X9 _ o$ ^: j; ?$ V2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( V& {: [- X1 q. r! M1 {
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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* F3 R p6 x# l/ d$ `0 A: O) QThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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