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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; x# R- j0 H2 k
9 b) ?" M9 ?# wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ! o5 C. q) f# h
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) p$ y! ? Y! _$ N3 M$ \
2 E, S, ?) ~3 Y: vLet me just rewrite yours:
- j. p% t @/ t& K& @It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me4 U) A8 ]# g1 a9 S- b
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!4 u6 b" \* e* ` K6 Y) `
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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- B: d' B1 n8 T- |Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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