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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# T; n( `; e) q" T! v
4 V4 i% F/ i0 B. bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& q# p z5 T1 ~, Eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' x7 m" t5 K# W, N4 p
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Let me just rewrite yours:
! y) I) q+ O2 M# O$ Q4 KIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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' W0 k& [9 \3 }* k" e3 B1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
/ z/ j$ s; I& n) h8 \2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; M0 Q/ `: Y# o
' v2 z4 k3 \5 Y: T0 E# j: RThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.0 i% `, p' {2 } l* p
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