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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ N) {* c) m* q+ `+ @. neveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , \7 ~; |8 a- E- g5 C: T0 Y; ^
5 r7 u: L- Z( {% rLet me just rewrite yours:
8 m/ K2 v) o; O" T. q1 v( q: IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- G6 K* v0 N! c1 d
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 L, [1 O7 V" f9 D1 g$ n2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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% l7 k- ]9 \$ J6 xThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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