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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 f; S& O! A% [# g6 {
9 _; D, s- B' ~) L% K1 J$ Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ; |3 _6 R. N" u6 ?' L2 }9 ~
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / f( l3 F6 _( c9 ], G3 Y- O
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Let me just rewrite yours:
# }2 i2 d9 V0 k7 tIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ W0 E; d5 F9 |8 |& Y: p
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!2 r2 U/ N. U2 ~4 |& s( U. A/ a0 B N3 g
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.; Q" h r1 V/ b/ l- ^* y" r
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