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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& s1 |# G/ F5 p
) h; d+ Q* {& _9 Y# Mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 ~$ Y' m5 i& q% ?2 v, B/ y- m7 P
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & g2 v# j) \8 K7 |& o, L) h
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Let me just rewrite yours:, `3 _* O5 ~9 j" u1 F
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me7 B. i1 m' e9 E9 m8 _5 R
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
U" ~( O: \' }5 A; S( T' O/ ~2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# \" F/ P! Z9 ~
2 z+ K ?. k; @' l( J0 A jThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 \9 x% a! N' a6 u' f n* A4 I
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