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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 z3 N/ {" y5 t' j/ y! q2 z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # r$ x4 J" E- v) g. C$ M* S" V9 t* S6 Q9 f' B
Let me just rewrite yours:, n( |# d. ~0 n* m& o( O& F E% k
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ I5 w: |( `" Y y. d+ K
6 E; P: \1 K" C- S: M6 R1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 Y, y- i6 b2 S, y' A& @3 b% _
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' l+ R8 ~- ?- h; a. J3 {There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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( {) ^% l+ Z4 b ~. UThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' S) C9 ~9 K( |! X9 `% X" C3 E& W* O
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