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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 |( m0 w* b7 Z2 `. M: t+ U
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 h' I0 ] A; M) v0 h p7 N( R. p2 M8 E2 K/ @' s
Let me just rewrite yours:
5 z6 s( y% j8 i# L6 R+ h7 XIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 @9 n$ ]- r# `; l$ [$ A1 [
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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( G0 f1 t- F) _There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* q) G2 t# c0 E6 b: ]6 P
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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