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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 S* l' L) e, z. R: E9 p$ w3 V$ @
8 d+ Q$ }5 I. A5 p7 git doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' I, E0 I. |# @- H
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 o% Y- B$ W5 R8 D/ a5 X1 v9 c: M, K$ X; R1 d
Let me just rewrite yours:
. m7 `1 C! u9 C. h$ DIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me4 T. @" f) e; M, O/ W# F/ E
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 E, D3 m3 [# W. f2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) @ p. N: n* ~' lThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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1 v- h; P5 ?# o! A* @Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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