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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ p( g, c: u5 t! P$ o8 Heveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 t6 ]# Z/ u3 I ~, L ?
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Let me just rewrite yours:
/ C2 u. D1 y/ g1 u1 H1 @' W3 }It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 m7 Y# H; n7 e
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.1 h1 {, y& j. N$ L4 E7 d
" H+ S+ N7 Y& J( J" zThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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" s. V0 K& f* ?Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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