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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 x4 [+ _, a* \8 }everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 {. }* s. b y! v+ \ L/ Z4 H: N0 J9 M
Let me just rewrite yours:
1 U! B% c O7 \1 G; CIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 ]2 d0 d: ?8 H @) ]( z2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la." h2 V$ D; `3 E6 L
, \4 Q0 c5 s0 t5 X4 i0 R rThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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$ M3 `2 ^: i& g' ?) Y2 E# b, aThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." m* J) o$ f |4 g, [) G
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