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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / e9 g4 d2 C% o& [; t
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # e! R9 r' @, p1 e& L5 W/ \. F
% @! e/ G4 I- U4 Z) j6 xLet me just rewrite yours:
* i% A8 ~- @! ~7 o8 @9 X6 \8 YIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me( p" g0 }5 y9 U( i
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- ?+ {# _2 p, x9 `6 b% u
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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8 y& \, u N! _! n; Z; \There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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