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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - |4 I! r5 X2 E; _# H5 _7 Y/ _
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Let me just rewrite yours:
7 Y! @# W) f/ u7 W+ L( ~8 @It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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d* D" N$ ]( | D' A% l: m1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- J! W% ]2 o d6 f2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 q4 ?6 w: z+ r( u7 y" q
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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