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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# v7 O6 X/ J: I6 u/ v
: o& I8 N3 ^ _" [; x: s5 U" [, kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" g- g3 r/ b4 b% K) q% [everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 Z4 _ v8 M8 J- T; a
0 a+ }# X8 v' K. y. n) O) u; hLet me just rewrite yours:
: M3 F' F! E+ R* UIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, X) K! q: m( D* D7 ~. G
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!" g# u0 q. c# P; l
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( f4 p! z9 ? t1 C0 S: ]
# n# N% y' K" X' A8 r- q! Q6 SThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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