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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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' j* x6 o2 S; g( }) [+ rit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
4 ?+ C& V0 X. O3 z" ~, Deveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % x% F) \9 b; V+ B# b; j
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Let me just rewrite yours:
/ e5 K8 D/ w/ ` H* VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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. i" ~8 P( U' V% F) \, R1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 M( O$ U6 X) I, W8 @
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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; i/ P$ h2 y7 e0 dThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# o1 S) r% q: A- T
; ^: V ]3 g$ ?" {& H4 iThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. R: t! l6 u @0 L+ ~/ }# R
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