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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:' y* b1 x8 ~6 Y4 M& Q( M
2 i: ]$ C* y' [( L Cit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and & ]% o2 m5 c" K' K4 t- \9 l
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) |$ u, V& H2 m5 v
: G# ?7 T6 r" F Q) bLet me just rewrite yours:
6 x/ `9 w% R1 s3 I7 X" n) L* tIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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- i1 c* _5 k, L6 t; u' |& k* k1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; {; @' O2 {% H' S/ w V6 u2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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- \/ f% [; c5 `/ _/ aThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. I Y/ w' e3 J. @' }
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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