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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: l/ ^+ K4 K. G7 }
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 L4 z( ]& {. s# p4 y
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : l4 T( X* c) k( F# @
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Let me just rewrite yours:$ a8 f) N+ M- M
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me6 p; V$ k' ], ^0 ?. V* y7 L+ T
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* N5 s0 ?0 S- Q' n2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( c0 t% t/ i& p0 }
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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/ n6 B: g4 o" CThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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