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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
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3 _& T$ b8 D8 i9 \ l1 ]Let me just rewrite yours:
) T. `' w; O, r* l. NIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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" N% J2 B$ B( C9 w6 @1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, ?5 f. B7 {1 O9 t9 ~% c
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 J" b/ p% H" i; s
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow./ r' A. g4 W4 o
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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