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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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: g1 z' l. \5 W | pit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
9 M2 k0 I5 K. E$ ?everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 L$ l& K, B( R* V }$ x
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Let me just rewrite yours:; [ [& y" j I8 K9 \0 R
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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# f: [8 L' Z% s, T. G1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 Q+ h' f' X/ g; F6 k; z
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.9 U" \8 S( `3 b# A
! C1 i* {6 T8 d+ UThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.' N( s6 T# g# {8 F0 `! Z
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." o$ l( d% @! L: n* M, U1 U
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