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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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( w+ ~' T; z" u+ v0 b1 r6 P3 bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
6 X8 C7 x0 x- m4 P* M( P4 y+ J3 Weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 a+ Q! r8 q7 m& ^+ \
; H/ T3 B, C% G! J4 VLet me just rewrite yours:
5 d" o' ]" o; n0 o. w' zIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( h% M) u7 o/ r
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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, u2 \' x$ [& U' I& OThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." n2 I1 ?& H; _2 g7 j2 y
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