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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ G6 B# P$ S0 q/ K; E/ j, b
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' T+ U2 f7 z, l5 [
9 n% P: B1 z3 G. nLet me just rewrite yours:
' h$ @ d8 f2 M$ r! e6 cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ R/ l- K6 L5 j( Y
$ {6 _3 g2 n+ H( N- c" h8 m1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( u; M5 v# m, l$ B
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 k( v3 b z* `$ g, I
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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" |0 M! r- s3 }Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 ~2 E2 r0 v' `6 v
" `2 n7 R6 H* a' k# o: d! mGretz. |
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