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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and " f$ Z+ N2 A- S1 @ i a8 a u
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 y* b- y8 i3 ~4 Z' n
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Let me just rewrite yours:% N& Y4 }* }) S9 f0 ?0 _
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' Q$ n/ Y4 k+ K2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- u& ?- ]' }/ |( I/ ^' }) w
8 L6 t7 ?1 I! U# \ ~There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 J0 X; \ V& r7 t
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ J9 i' ~ v: s7 u/ t0 n* J
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