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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:( z5 b0 X, ?$ r, F; I) H/ L# V
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 E! s) s0 @' i! o3 n
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % }, x+ L* Z" k# |
1 w0 Q1 I& L: b9 h& M+ ~9 NLet me just rewrite yours:
7 v" Y2 y# |6 w1 q& ~& P) uIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me; |: E) M( m( o
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
p1 ~9 S: G" J! H, ^- N! [2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.8 O" N8 C! y# m' \/ p5 Y5 C
' j- I$ C0 \/ @, E" @There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 A- v Y! K& S! Q& d# W1 b
& ^% D& p6 [8 k. e3 v0 c9 B. i# mThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( o5 V9 ?1 U1 A
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