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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- y7 f( _% `3 _, l4 j9 Z
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 B: j' T) }( z) r' Y
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # i u( q8 u; O
/ y9 L0 ]+ [# q8 KLet me just rewrite yours:3 g9 y1 @, O# U) U2 I6 _7 `8 V
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, I& W I" l1 O, }
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. y( W9 m9 s0 A2 H/ U
9 Z7 @3 c2 c2 Q U* b F( mThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; E: ^, s4 j/ u, _Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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