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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:9 W9 I$ A7 Q9 L% }% R% y
& S) W9 q; Z- m( I& {it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' G( P( h5 b! {everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : G2 ~8 h i) O/ I
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Let me just rewrite yours:
; \! p! F1 q; Y1 UIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 V( j7 x b/ d' j2 `
" a9 |* i0 J$ S6 h, D- y1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- g0 E% Q: h3 \
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! e: r- `3 q* A* Y0 }
- ], g3 P5 e T+ w: W/ \+ OThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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