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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 U$ b$ M" W7 ]+ L
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ! `" g0 U/ V6 b T/ ~
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - j" ^, X A. J5 T* {
0 H2 u0 s9 D% R, rLet me just rewrite yours:
) u+ ^$ a2 s' A' z1 |It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 H: K: _9 c5 ]2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) N4 j: q/ J1 k/ P; d% u5 q7 |) t6 JThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.: F& o$ e6 b& J( H; j0 @
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ p9 t; L$ ~9 W1 [" l* y0 Z9 Y5 X
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