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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 J6 U( y. G! }7 a9 r3 E7 z
$ H( ]/ @8 J* _$ @5 ~+ J Zit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
( |3 _! ^! m5 G2 s/ peveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! I+ p# y1 E8 v' |+ @1 O4 D0 K- j7 Z8 N8 @' L! Y8 p* Z
Let me just rewrite yours:
6 S& }) U# K4 UIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me) `' b8 w& V3 L* s, t( Q5 @( f
8 w) _! A2 ?0 n& S$ e1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- C# z! S4 X$ n5 q0 W5 |2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.: u5 E* o$ J2 r }# `9 ^. l t; D: I
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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* |5 s2 u* q4 C3 ^/ G' cThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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