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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:+ q: m* K' |8 n8 Z, B4 B
: S6 p _$ s V; Iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 4 P' q+ e& U( V, m8 S2 L2 t
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' ~: g8 P/ @3 W1 E$ f
# g p. l- F! V- pLet me just rewrite yours:
: K$ r. D! Z/ DIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
7 D) x# W% ~' I" S) |9 Q2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.6 f: a! f9 i1 ]0 W+ M/ b+ y2 J
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% S) s1 _0 W1 K
+ h* }. [6 E! N5 K0 Y7 GThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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