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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:* C+ h4 N& B% m
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ B7 A" o8 F& U0 y( y) peveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 q* z+ F& T( x* f) A$ x" c1 Q" f
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Let me just rewrite yours:! F! x- [) {4 i
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* W+ W9 Y! {5 c! u, J6 }5 B6 O9 }( S
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- v& N. b3 j6 f. ^/ h _
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.8 d. R& T6 s% l* N4 n" ?: h6 _* b
& F, ~/ u: N9 o+ e! v' pThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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! |6 _( `% E5 o( @- T5 | lThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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