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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 H. g$ c: T% _+ L X7 b+ f
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 ?$ |9 }" n* C( N% u2 {
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Let me just rewrite yours:7 e! K- L5 ]2 h' J
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 ~9 s/ S7 {! m! t4 t$ k% a2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) v8 w% m1 @; s3 H" bThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. @" @. s E: U0 n
! p. P2 }. v- ]& L. _7 [Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% H4 Z& }1 ^. S# ~
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