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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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2 H4 D" p0 J- u' N4 w6 z) [% Iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 N! D9 n* m1 j) ~everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) h, g! \+ P) Q, a2 o& i3 \4 ], R* n
Let me just rewrite yours:
: u# M( K `6 C8 A; t" e3 uIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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0 n; G R; C; g0 G& p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 J3 l0 G% K- J" `4 Z
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ M7 R1 \/ V' K2 J* v
+ o& c' g/ C7 P7 s8 wThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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- ]/ V: }4 @+ I9 i# H* d, WThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' u b2 p; c1 d. v* D& w; |
7 B& f$ x% p+ v1 pGretz. |
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