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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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1 Z1 d8 @7 D6 }+ H4 e" X, nit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 4 f2 c7 C( x" T2 O
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + g5 K$ X/ g1 ~1 T
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Let me just rewrite yours:
/ }' [) ^8 R8 e X5 `3 ^+ \/ W CIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me% M7 Q+ f- J( }) z1 ^/ j* J+ S& b
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!0 C* U# P" P& \, w u4 P, ~4 c
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.' C7 c+ ^6 P1 H$ ~1 D& u- O' {
# @9 _8 y: }* d) sThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: V9 u: Z9 o. _; d b. J
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