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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% l- s' `9 Z, `3 h, Fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 ^* r( r1 D2 ` v% n7 f( beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' c# @5 M% F5 t: A7 E) @9 G2 }) O$ i3 w3 b; R. W" i l+ m8 V
Let me just rewrite yours:
3 U; d# g, h/ Q7 P9 C oIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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! d/ L% a0 [' ^% t1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!0 {$ ?+ ?, R: u' E, \
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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2 v# f- F6 l: a( mThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 Y1 I2 f* c, v! o/ V
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