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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 8 |# t' D- |' b# D8 B
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : \/ v: ]* h( m1 k( K. Z% o9 h9 ?6 `: Q
Let me just rewrite yours:* |+ H" j# d9 v& H
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!$ z1 l3 f, A$ Y; ~) G3 j
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.' R# Y& Z; B, b- h8 p
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ a0 ~+ S/ I% I$ L& t4 r
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( \" n% [/ e( H: ~+ h3 N
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