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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and " E0 z; r2 s3 r0 o
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! x( @+ g! ^" K+ p# `1 q
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Let me just rewrite yours:
/ O8 c- b2 c+ N$ X# q/ hIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' X" X# u4 m: T6 w% q
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!5 s* J: ~4 y! A' | \& D" h
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 [8 X+ Y4 W! |7 f- I
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ ]" g: c, a: P2 F/ H3 m' s' Y
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