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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM: {1 Z+ |/ K! k* L( J2 n/ w
M9 N* ]5 s$ ]$ _) c" _" r' @ Oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 Q1 n, \% O! y6 e& Z: u2 g# {; R
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . A, N( v- {0 @+ L
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Let me just rewrite yours:
' m; T" K2 D4 y- |It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me4 y( C4 |4 K! M" K
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing! F; F+ s! y/ K
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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- v9 B( p8 K- l, J' q7 V9 pThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ ^: S; U8 c, d8 i) H/ C& M: ~6 {4 _
9 O3 }7 X9 ]8 F3 }1 ^+ N3 E' ]Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: z% U* y2 x" V2 T' k4 e
' [5 r; H1 Q% e9 I' h. eGretz. |
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