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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% M7 @5 ?' b. l; K
; y$ x; ?4 l5 F7 g# ?8 i4 eit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , `" ]# R4 O! f0 E- Y4 F) K
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ ^/ k! w" @" \3 h5 E4 p& M$ X+ W
. d5 n2 S" X$ [Let me just rewrite yours:
8 h1 q U8 o0 ]5 C5 vIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 r* b O3 D: V, p' w% D: H2 ~' r K
( x6 m: r) k, I; B( C7 y) r, Q- `1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 b1 r( T, c7 D# b- B; l6 q2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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7 h/ v j2 P6 @There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; r; S% x; f5 \ y+ I4 s; V# O5 n4 GThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 w% h3 ]# Y& [
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