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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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/ @9 p5 O" `: x. x5 R7 G; Y3 }it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and W2 D9 L- L) l3 b. v
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ' J; u8 K5 W3 b6 c. `/ \
0 l: ]+ s0 t' p% V6 \8 x- F7 rLet me just rewrite yours:
8 ^, \2 Y7 d( Y, SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: b3 L, y0 n& K: L+ b* P3 {6 v2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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6 j" P1 D/ p+ ^0 E/ W0 `, o! l6 O2 x1 FThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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