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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
; c6 g4 @4 ]0 L# ^, t9 Weveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. R/ R" B& e1 }7 o+ }" F9 ]6 u
7 t/ p5 B' U8 h% m( ^" }Let me just rewrite yours:
8 ?. _4 U/ k: A* o+ D! tIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me6 s# A* A; W2 {' c. v
7 f T9 _+ Z# v% Z) N1 ~1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( P0 Y" Z. @: u/ L2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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# A! f4 a; O9 V( D$ tThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.1 J# t) N. G/ ?
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