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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- C% W/ G0 a8 K$ x0 w
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 5 [0 G" n7 G. @& U8 x' D7 Y5 U
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , z5 M/ i [- ?3 ]; l+ q; s ~% w' f5 @1 H- @
Let me just rewrite yours:
! s1 l7 r6 P' E) @' w6 eIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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s7 A" G9 H b5 v1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
. I+ B: X' R$ S2 J# }) o9 b2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.$ k k# p% u. k6 x4 j
4 i/ K8 Q3 R1 P E* x1 m; p8 hThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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2 ~( t' p1 l$ I$ n d/ @Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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