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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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5 t2 D L4 g% _: mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ T) [+ l: ]8 ^! reveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # q, G7 ?4 A6 ~% d9 @- R1 `
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Let me just rewrite yours:1 g- k2 q1 ?, a
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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) w. S$ Q* j9 J+ V9 t1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!* b4 h9 z- m/ C4 I# d
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" N" s' v' l/ N7 |6 X4 J3 iThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 u& V* e& {% B
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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