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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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" ^: @! @3 ~3 B; J( b+ s( u9 }it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / T" Y. x* F; n* J
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 5 |$ g) G t2 Z8 }! i" {1 S
! u9 N, U7 W. d0 W$ JLet me just rewrite yours:
& j4 Q4 M, C; W% O3 nIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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/ w0 c7 G+ S6 {! _/ d3 C/ f1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!& N2 n5 G' g. \/ E% N4 y
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; V! C9 {# y8 V" z( ~
& h5 `, A( t# N4 v+ F& d" q jThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 e& Y9 ^- a/ o, Z% a& F+ @! I3 B
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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