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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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4 G2 U$ {9 u5 S( z. A! h$ Lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 r" F6 t" ^) `3 x( C+ K/ n
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. S) h4 T N, U
" @ h4 z0 y9 z# ?0 A, XLet me just rewrite yours:
3 ?' {% z2 E1 b- yIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
3 X2 `# f5 q8 t2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.5 i* X% m* Z j) N* ^3 Q4 m" y$ p
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ R+ j" y0 X: z: \2 |
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