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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:( ]6 K5 E; E4 k. y
, T) M& P3 X6 A- t3 Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" D; l; K4 _6 O$ V+ Ceveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) [9 S# G, L! A- H$ z
+ H3 P3 p& B9 D/ u, jLet me just rewrite yours:
) o* [' J/ Y1 }7 T; `$ hIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 X7 b. a) B( o: V; |
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% e( P6 n( {% i# S# H
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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* n7 k' `$ ~/ M7 b, RThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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