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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:) u/ O* C+ G( ~& u. B; W# m/ s
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + s, P2 A( W" c/ a: b, T0 ]
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 W: c. D# M, ]
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Let me just rewrite yours:
/ d0 D$ x' H' }5 x. r- k8 [4 D6 GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# Z# X, y: L# v) N
4 C& [, h' Z! L' n3 p8 J1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
?2 `: s5 C8 H' R' L1 B2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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: k6 ?0 P1 {( g6 U% q! uThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- Q0 ?( u" C- {& g0 p7 u3 a; N
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