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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 s2 \9 k0 }' O4 V( w- l# W
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
( j; o/ y( i# }2 L+ s- e, ]- peveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : X7 z+ s) X9 U: I# D( F
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Let me just rewrite yours:
$ U5 ~: ^1 b3 l5 SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
8 ]$ `; Z3 G0 _ g; x* N8 }- R2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; C6 `: U$ u, }6 u. a6 P$ ?
% {3 Z1 ~9 U4 Y( B" [1 mThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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7 ^9 n) ~9 C" J4 m. UThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 v6 b# K# G, N Y6 h
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