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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ R- Z7 {: ^2 u/ I' G: n
4 B- H9 c1 d$ S. f8 z( Zit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ! f+ `# Z. H1 C
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! ?6 ~! j7 Z% Q8 G1 ?: p5 z6 K
1 f$ ^+ ?& p1 T; Y. Q8 TLet me just rewrite yours:
' x! A% `; N9 W+ FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 P% C- m: l1 A4 Q/ W
* t; I2 ]5 n, Q) m5 |9 ^/ y4 f1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- R4 \/ h* Y" d* O# `
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 e3 n- t8 \. D6 s
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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1 {$ x/ r! E2 c7 ^2 r4 sThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- x, r+ K" ?9 T3 x3 _8 j- F# Y
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