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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 P9 u2 `2 U) [+ T. E1 |
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - s w, e( ?" \
1 h& v9 k4 q5 `: lLet me just rewrite yours:
; r, v4 C/ b6 U: u* `4 p+ F5 wIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( F# {% c" V# e2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 ?9 Z2 H* \" ~: n' R
4 j2 T1 e# `+ w7 ~There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 @2 {3 U, X |6 m9 R5 M. S6 k- {
. B6 g8 h6 v% l* S7 g$ I1 pThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.1 u/ n7 I* l" b% q
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