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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, |5 w' _$ A% n6 B0 l2 o4 c8 v3 u# |
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ G ~% _5 ^1 \! v1 O! C) b
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) F3 W! F2 Q1 i2 z* }
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Let me just rewrite yours:
" S- \# Q; v0 d+ V( l- b2 rIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me1 z9 K5 C9 c& U+ G
- t7 m8 n4 v2 F) K1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: f5 t! b2 r v3 o2 Y9 {
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* W, Q0 b1 A! r
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; b& ]* c9 t2 C$ d
+ h9 G }7 P0 \Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 Y( K: j) |! R5 w4 D
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