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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; d2 h. G$ t4 V: U
2 q8 }& h! }$ S* Cit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 @* B$ Y. v& w3 X- t2 z5 p
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ D9 f0 C2 `: v& q: D. y
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Let me just rewrite yours:
8 Q$ n, g- _% E1 K8 A2 @. r6 G* M3 FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ i, F, O8 ^. j) P' n
) {2 S# \* y; j) ? R' U6 h1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* U9 Q2 y4 \; \" `2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.) l. L. W! m3 Y6 y& V6 X
% E6 S: G0 h9 I3 BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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9 F& t q d# s+ R YThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.! O5 k+ r! r/ J0 Z* I. J6 q* O# }! ?! s
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