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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:3 m! O* h' a% v' Y q9 h
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 a& w8 B* ]/ I7 u Neveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / {, k* ~5 Q% S
( g ~7 z; O/ VLet me just rewrite yours:
: h2 }8 E, @. ]% O3 WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 [4 A6 E& V& Q1 A% m* t& `
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ L! g5 p$ q" n2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# O. }4 D1 Y1 {! e% h7 I
" B- [+ L$ I% f( t6 Z6 e0 @, SThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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