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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ W( ~' H" l+ p0 L0 t7 I6 E, }4 G
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) p- D7 R+ X9 M
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * X7 X* u. M% w8 v. l) R/ T: U* N. m6 b
Let me just rewrite yours:
5 r7 N$ e9 V5 Z7 g# ?It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me6 r4 p1 U' [& z# o! h' ~6 J
j& ^* Y) F! I% I) W$ k& P( P1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# `( G; F$ B# y4 W/ J- F* \2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% n k6 N. U: S
7 A7 K* Z H% ?# WThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.- R3 o! x, N4 t" K& |
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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