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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:8 {: c4 r, C& q8 t, b- J+ ~
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
) ]- s; ^- g: Reveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + m) A1 b4 U4 u; ?
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Let me just rewrite yours:
) F2 ^( R9 r/ M2 v5 DIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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' ]$ T3 Y, x6 y) e9 F& B1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; |) C' ?, z" R4 r0 w% x! A5 R
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( |7 [ [% t6 H- ^: B/ W
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ m9 `" q- ~9 _3 R/ H9 y( w
7 `8 ~9 Y2 p$ BThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. x% E+ g5 M4 K
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