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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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5 T; }0 H' w4 K1 Y7 c5 `( G+ Jit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + _- v0 w, q. x7 k9 f3 N; ?/ B
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ I W% x$ P. f8 T: T
' I. Y, y, X* Z7 ~9 @$ x7 aLet me just rewrite yours:
9 l5 J3 Z, ]8 q( q$ tIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!& n3 ]4 K; M0 g) S4 Q
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# U3 ~2 j9 R$ U& j* G
9 R' u+ c; m8 R* l8 z- o1 g6 o4 fThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 J" s/ S: S1 z- H, N
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