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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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8 h! v/ E# Y- {( i$ ~it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
, S# f* M |; ?( M( _! Beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # W; Z J2 ~' x4 x1 H4 j/ u& P
9 H" z' }+ l# LLet me just rewrite yours:
9 m5 @+ {, s# H$ G0 Q* o0 @/ I6 WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!! e$ Y* E& Z7 |
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) z' l; e8 J( ^8 m# Y2 w0 [% gThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; m. n; z; e8 `
& ~1 a# } H% gThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. y$ e. l* l( C5 \
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