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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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! m. u0 _( _. }: `! i! @8 Rit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 W+ S. j9 G$ F; T7 C8 _' ]7 O
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 E( a0 P) }: B- a0 f' F
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Let me just rewrite yours:, C& Q. h2 I$ F5 A5 M
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, P3 X1 H) R1 U+ W2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 C; M, l, M0 c- O! d6 N
+ w* p5 Q: ~; T: S) t; z# PThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 p9 w5 E3 e4 g6 t& O& r
4 A& `: G# P5 V9 mThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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