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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:9 J4 F; I# F0 b
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: |/ @6 c2 r/ O$ _4 leveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) `' ~. Q) l# _* Q5 P3 z
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Let me just rewrite yours:
7 g! q' ]2 m7 t0 ^; i/ T7 AIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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; p0 d% G% c2 I x" F$ F% G' }1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!) h- W- W9 { [1 k, B9 O: W
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.3 x- R+ X- J; z; u
( k4 A! C: \5 `* _, {' H5 kThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 {) l" ~/ s. b) q% E5 c( z
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