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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:3 Y" ?, _6 ~( E" S
" i, }9 B3 C: J( u* Pit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' Q5 w6 N- k. L. f3 g0 B2 h& C, ~& i
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 p \5 l: ~; }6 x7 H5 J& D* I
3 ]+ E! P! B4 s7 GLet me just rewrite yours:
) P! W. e. P( yIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me7 x4 _: B: K# U4 N8 n5 {+ o
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 @4 c9 F4 a; c4 v2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; K1 L2 K. v* L# Y8 G
* b* v3 V2 S, ~& _& AThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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: K3 w5 f8 y5 V# q4 B1 H4 OThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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