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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& K+ S: a, g1 {) Q5 l4 W2 E, _2 \
5 }" Y. k6 N3 P. u* Wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 n5 K0 D* ~1 G1 Q7 \everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. G+ ~( M2 @$ @: P: f( s
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Let me just rewrite yours:
% a) g7 k+ v. ]4 w, {5 FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: n/ X* f4 b5 `+ f7 q* s; Y0 H( f# C
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 R+ V) k) E# K4 q. C* J# O# z* O [
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ `8 l( \7 }8 j0 n
0 R5 X8 ^) L, [" M6 c% \) tThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; ^' R) o- Z3 n+ R2 g; @ O1 x" z5 |
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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