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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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' j, U& x# |! ]+ l u0 H5 W0 Uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& f+ {# h5 \. w8 K. keveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & I9 I3 f$ e$ b8 P0 s$ |+ k+ a8 L8 {6 c
Let me just rewrite yours:
6 h' U% }4 }2 LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' x) {" W1 c' K% n1 k
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
2 }, d% S; b. K3 g7 Y: a# {2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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