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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:' j% [, G3 i0 y; e* m3 ]" b
0 {9 y! d _/ P+ w) [4 ?8 e Lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
6 ~/ M7 b% w& R* x3 geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , A: C" @/ k: q4 R( X% a P1 m+ `7 h* j8 M
Let me just rewrite yours:
4 s: e: @ r# H' T8 ?: I8 sIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ Y5 a5 `: T8 u8 o
# _2 f9 \- b a1 l1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 u: `0 T V$ w: ?2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.3 Y# j* i0 G: z: n
8 \2 e3 `1 d* ?1 O$ ~There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 r- Q$ H6 U3 ~5 y7 K
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