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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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3 w! N! j! o6 M* wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
4 \) [% w( M: ueveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , j9 ^5 ]% A% D6 J
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Let me just rewrite yours:
! i Y+ ~2 ^1 [) s0 {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ c A/ O% M8 v, F" N
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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6 I1 K0 u! Q1 f- T6 e4 WThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; J! T+ [2 v6 v
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." a' p. c3 Q' D! D4 o! {# ^ v [
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