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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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1 K M, O+ C. ^9 Q4 ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
9 a- K+ x9 j- Qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - B7 R" |5 {8 A1 R& K4 e0 X. L O7 ?/ M+ L, ]- X* I8 W) J
Let me just rewrite yours:
0 c" z9 W$ f1 x2 l- e) MIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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% Z2 ]: |3 d, r! {; }1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 ?1 Q! K4 v, W8 }: g2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# `( r0 c8 O' p$ q1 ]$ U6 T
4 B" V2 t6 K3 w, S7 t A: M4 cThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 L1 Z" P* g9 T* Z* Q* H
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 D, C( G" d5 R P/ N# P7 o
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