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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
- g9 G% I/ y6 C$ g" Ueveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " A. }/ w$ W# L# k* a% b
# ]8 L, p# i/ G$ ULet me just rewrite yours:9 j' W y& ?+ p+ D. ^
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- Y* P; ~+ \2 s" m: B* k* y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. j* i& E4 M# c5 f
7 V# f& V+ V0 g+ S" \9 E' f0 K( [There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 j W, v% e7 ]+ B1 u( y" o9 i* d1 C% Q
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ V8 O( {% O) \, P
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