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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% e& ]' ^4 _. k3 K
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * e6 C2 W+ U H4 A" l. z& q- ^; T& i
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : ~) q# S0 U7 p0 w% d2 J
" s( ?- Z% w3 I0 nLet me just rewrite yours:, c" i- R% Y# l4 L6 c0 M) o
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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, r8 k0 O; Y8 O+ D1 p6 k3 w1 s1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% C+ ^/ X( T. h9 O" f7 w4 ~2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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