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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( i) d0 U4 p1 ^" p* x
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : E, g. b) ?* {! G
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Let me just rewrite yours:
- I# [9 a3 ~0 c; C4 cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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9 r: W8 K: G: f; B" N1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# \# [3 }/ _, e% T$ H4 |* t8 r2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 g- w L4 w, t, |
% ?/ ?; w8 h; W4 }, VThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 O+ T( j* B7 m6 n( h
* d* E( q* w4 P, r9 ^3 s$ ^Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. X$ O! ]5 {7 S. \( Y- F! O
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