- 帖子
- 1691
- 精華
- 1
- 威望
- 245
- 魅力
- 0
- 讚好
- 0
- 性別
- 男
|
81#
發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
| 只看該作者
Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
4 \ M1 }+ ^' X- h- }/ Y3 r }0 j, B* Z' w! ~
it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' z4 c _) |4 r7 t' X7 U4 yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 ?% r8 r7 v; A- d& n, v8 m% b- a% X1 u
Let me just rewrite yours:
# }* W6 c; |& V$ Y- ~& ]( [It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me. _* J2 l- E5 I U2 W
: m% w+ B: }# r2 S. \! Q
1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 F/ ^" R8 ^) l
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.8 s, D% D- l- K/ J- ^9 v
. j$ J( M* B/ j0 ]! LThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ m3 X; A" [& ~ h8 U) B/ Q
2 M' O. x6 T4 {6 r6 f: EThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.! }8 z2 k# h6 A1 K) J3 h) e$ ]
y. N) \1 i) [+ A9 K! Y* U7 j3 S9 AGretz. |
|