- 帖子
- 1691
- 精華
- 1
- 威望
- 245
- 魅力
- 0
- 讚好
- 0
- 性別
- 男
|
81#
發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
| 只看該作者
Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
) v [# w, V. b# c1 R9 D
% u6 Q! d8 |7 I& K) p' v. n' @ f# mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& b& r. n* k3 ?+ y% ]* ceveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " J+ d' V1 r, {! U3 W/ `; p$ x
& [+ R7 _" n& _* ^4 G% F* qLet me just rewrite yours:0 Q k$ d5 X. d" J5 h, E
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" S9 n4 J7 w! U) E
" D3 x4 q/ `. |) w
1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
7 F Q" Q3 @9 v2 P3 \2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 p) P3 [1 K, t$ u8 U% u. }# I
! r4 p6 L5 G; g L3 r C) `There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! x1 _6 |2 H2 H- S
" h7 {( ~3 Z' ^& T& \Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ E V. M! K6 K1 z, s: g
" F v# h; l( o6 n9 \! W6 D0 H8 tGretz. |
|