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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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7 f/ @' t$ P! \' R1 P2 Rit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and % d" X1 s7 q$ I$ W) z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : P) ?0 N& f4 B5 x0 `6 ^" p5 ]4 _8 s9 ]! U% \: j
Let me just rewrite yours:
9 p" ~& i6 p2 g+ H: v7 JIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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8 |/ G4 c4 R" q3 \/ I5 Z1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% g) Z, q0 Y A f/ J
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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/ ]& G& }' W$ _There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.& E, q' q$ } f
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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