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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:1 f6 k1 ~* j6 i0 F
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + P- |1 C6 m( H
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 B7 d" Q6 y/ i8 a
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Let me just rewrite yours:
* X. f' f# O* r! E. |3 WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me1 V+ D$ d3 t) V' j/ Z- F
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; {4 N2 A4 b1 `6 ^# Y1 l. C2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., d* s' J, W% [" E2 j: \; H+ V& z9 `
9 t, o" T* ]0 W& @, q; @There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." j4 {9 p6 |# T' h8 b8 ?0 f
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.# f/ _+ J- g% @& P0 x
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