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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:% L8 e1 G/ c/ q: s* u6 H2 K) L! x, a
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / v ?' H" @4 C- ~# _
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. K( `) @1 x; @+ F/ ~" T
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Let me just rewrite yours:
* x9 K# z8 E2 {8 ^It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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- e6 C# ~9 x2 i1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ K1 h+ E/ M4 T7 {
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.1 j: s* y( u" f/ u( R1 H/ k3 G( H
( e2 H2 }9 O; z, R4 f( oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; M+ H6 C+ Z7 V
( ^# h7 z7 O7 F) r( [Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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