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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# p$ R4 ^5 v" L
3 S0 h7 v- j' c( {$ Eit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ f6 |/ C( d R% j! h8 ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , i, S& I$ Q) t
" u3 |4 {7 X5 |Let me just rewrite yours:
& o# B- @4 @7 c' {) X1 \; sIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!" t$ V! q$ Z; H7 \, d5 ?
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., x, t$ \9 c% t; V( K- d
% q. t2 `" ?" v6 [# {+ _+ m& Q9 iThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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& q5 F0 S# D5 Y! G# V8 `Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* ~0 W. s" g9 s6 b3 m' _
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