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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:. m3 r( _! \3 t4 \# C( \2 h% c
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and : ?- e( G) M* B/ x7 f' F6 x# K
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & G9 l. Q8 n& g9 a6 l% s
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Let me just rewrite yours:
- Z% n; F8 {1 J& j" w/ kIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 G0 q0 k% _$ A8 t$ L+ P* o# N
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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+ O* c! ^1 h% |/ \6 i: k0 l# PThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 G% o( B5 O) U
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