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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 C. n/ B" U/ L+ ` t2 R
& c. P; h0 d, v1 O7 S3 Wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 ?! k- [$ Q& O- {) m d, [( W! @everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 u$ h6 G. D; C* g0 Q5 \ c% D" N1 s5 N
Let me just rewrite yours:
: S7 P' T- O% ?6 H7 G9 SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" f* y6 C, M1 X0 w1 c: N$ V
8 l0 L1 o5 @. B$ c" ]) r3 q" R1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
7 B! ~, B" R' N: Q% y4 w2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.& y& ?) I$ f, a/ Y; N) G
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