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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 K- i, n6 v8 \ }7 |9 i h( Y- L
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
) A/ B0 c: {& P2 beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 T; P6 i: b( J1 I: Y( F+ r9 k" j: P7 ?- [7 K0 p2 `
Let me just rewrite yours:
6 C( h4 i3 O9 X* W. BIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1 y, j2 |$ L/ R4 Y1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
9 W+ |* A) ~% D1 X, F m2 G2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" \4 O$ z" Z0 {. v1 O6 i0 G! cThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 F: ?' D# [. C, J5 ]
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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