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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:' R+ P5 D9 d) L! s/ ]3 d& O' `
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
) ?" J, i& f( V3 g% b/ R3 Y" zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. $ D6 _0 h& [& V, r% g5 J" r4 E) W O& S f; e- K h
Let me just rewrite yours:
1 d4 M e2 g" @: _: xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, X" H: I4 {. e( a$ ~" @2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.! @' l# r& `3 N" O
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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& W X6 K' B u; s1 j5 K! s; wThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. ]+ m- N8 C& q8 h6 E8 b
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