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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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- I) Y: b% v6 u1 Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , u4 e q, p, y' C* Y
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : B1 L/ C3 O0 l$ J. W3 k$ x% f0 B/ w0 _' M. F) b$ y* e$ S
Let me just rewrite yours:% P2 W8 S( D: l& g6 D' X
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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% N4 h: o3 I3 c6 ]3 ?* k4 U1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# T9 l4 L2 k( x; ~( j( z6 h# h2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 _6 k' j, V5 {4 [/ Y1 xThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; H) E2 I ?- y2 A( [8 M% O5 I
Y8 C# w/ L- BThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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