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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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/ @* _4 U3 ] g+ V/ c; Q) git doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& D: s9 c" f) k2 `! Ueveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / Y1 \ |" ~1 F; t4 R4 j
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Let me just rewrite yours:
6 `2 L1 y4 |1 O t C4 Z- W SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ W* K. k" k: k+ v# J6 p1 {
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
" j$ \4 H# t* N2 F* J8 ]2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 w! [! J, e7 M3 i' [7 v
- [ J; p, ]5 k' M1 ]Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.1 \9 J" b' K/ x ]5 o1 d
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