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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! d) v* |' ?( I9 I. S
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
S+ y7 ?7 r {3 Qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 c5 E- q5 z3 Z5 g
: C; u# D2 v0 y- J# }Let me just rewrite yours:
8 Z, k8 A/ a% w6 |It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 [+ f6 I E/ q% V7 U. H. K2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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4 ^- ^3 b) ]! H2 A$ G4 jThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow., U* r; o. F, b1 b. {
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.4 d& s( P2 j$ ?7 j* ]0 t
, y4 U6 v" s& {, b6 i0 @- ~6 `Gretz. |
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