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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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' U% x+ d" T, g. o( E \0 P) v; eit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ; _( o, G& ^/ V, B7 Y
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / H% @$ H) m; s; r( E7 ?
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Let me just rewrite yours:
! S6 X7 F( d. v% S" U/ E! vIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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5 S! C& d. ^6 ^* j# Z3 Q$ ?1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
$ ~2 ?2 \% ^% u" c& U2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.9 b, m6 L$ s; A; }% q
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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5 w( k( U5 F7 K+ v/ }( F' G" C: Z% V' zThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.! Q9 k; y p/ a2 h* x8 F' F
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