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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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0 u& j1 W+ S# [3 r7 Git doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 5 Q( `0 p' J" k$ L( @! F5 j6 w ~
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & M7 w5 G$ [3 w& L) {2 n. X2 E6 l: j8 v
Let me just rewrite yours:
7 O, C* G6 y3 `. \, C0 {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* g7 H. O0 M5 o( p1 M
' k$ N. U% v1 z/ E1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, P0 e' A7 b7 s) W" F
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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M$ Z- y% o) D. r* Z+ R# a: [/ IThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." X, N! ]3 a5 ]/ P3 g$ C
`- i% F T% r- pThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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