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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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9 i9 K) _3 \7 S4 S& x7 Mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 e$ S; q2 n7 i6 l6 y2 L# o1 ~
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 S8 X0 J& N2 }& q! t% h
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Let me just rewrite yours:
' ?' }1 G2 P1 }' fIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 O, Q1 X% w( K" l/ {; R. b
5 U- ^$ J0 m, c" i+ f+ t; u1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: v, a9 r7 m$ }* I6 t
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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