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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:3 a; [( a2 R2 A5 r
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # y' E5 |( L- @; t& u7 q
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # |1 U1 C6 @0 k0 b4 D) x
2 V2 G; X9 r( O, W ^9 C" ZLet me just rewrite yours:
" g& t5 i# N; I+ a0 G G; r. DIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, G* u# b! q) q1 W/ ~% r8 E( f2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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7 ?% T0 P1 I i2 ]# O/ o! E) k oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# I; \/ E% G, ]0 C
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." H$ C8 M& ^4 b k2 k
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