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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 w$ b3 _( t; q" k4 L! L) r1 t
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - K7 e! H; m1 w {8 h# C- k
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. V; u1 A7 }5 {4 i% k. |# w/ A* r! [
Let me just rewrite yours:
, A8 K; D# Y7 l5 ~2 lIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!, Z3 l0 f" L- q( Q# ?) q" M( y
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.. D& D* H5 `% H7 r! X, b" J0 B6 m
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.4 k2 U7 u+ C6 g7 f$ T+ C
1 n0 j: C+ |7 I3 h! ZThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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