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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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$ a) S& j/ B9 T1 Rit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( S" x) f4 N- _3 Y6 }/ T
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 y/ z, _+ x8 t6 d" z
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Let me just rewrite yours:
0 P& Y) B7 i Z, L9 SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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0 \# j) L- h6 \1 o6 Y o4 {( G5 ]$ b1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! y5 x" }2 P- j# s' I r" A2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.+ p& a6 Z8 {' n' P: H" J
+ ]" K/ M, r( _4 r+ Z& XThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.+ D1 J! V0 z/ `) p8 J
4 @8 l9 X' X8 ^( IThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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