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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' Y G' |" G7 q/ T6 b; S2 @% w
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . R% ?' P6 \/ d2 Q: ]0 z+ p G! A1 W! \+ e A/ ~) o
Let me just rewrite yours:: t4 i7 D; k) D; Q9 N7 n
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing! o$ V! N( @, a5 v- u
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow. }) n9 P+ C: q1 H2 F$ \5 {
5 J: t( g0 _7 F4 E- |/ Y2 c$ tThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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