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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& q" i; o# r P* R4 M' G4 V8 yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. J G! ?9 J( Y" a. C" x* }# n$ l$ e
- O! S! X0 n- H) d4 E M/ nLet me just rewrite yours:1 W6 |: H% `6 D* `
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 P; X3 i' e h4 a# g _5 H* O4 f
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. P! C- u9 s/ D( R5 j" Q/ o: L {
# ~6 I2 ~/ L- l4 I6 `+ ~; x8 oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 s7 ]. Z4 R# ^
: _2 U# k1 X, V3 C: g6 ^( L0 KThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 b/ V+ x* O& T, l6 \0 }
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