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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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9 O1 M' h6 z5 K! ?/ b4 c, K/ Z% Git doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' E# ] u' Q- T( ^( ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! H: V+ E. ?% j, T- U1 V& M
O" ?2 e# y$ j3 y' H g$ R) NLet me just rewrite yours:
! c$ v" o+ N6 ]9 {1 c, @& LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# W3 s4 G6 M+ ~! y Z5 }0 u
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( r" ^3 q0 X E$ U7 P6 @+ q
7 X8 b# \! w) KThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. t) a2 W6 s; ~, `, B0 C! r
# p7 X, }; t7 c( }+ CThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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