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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:! t! u2 w: h: h5 g
; e) B; c' e* k5 w: O( Ait doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + m A$ [1 C: h" f$ ?6 a, F
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) m8 ]/ Z$ S, W" |2 e3 [
5 [9 c8 X+ P& M, P; MLet me just rewrite yours:
3 V1 j" L9 C6 iIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!' l- j4 w* h( s, U- t
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.& a) u, ^6 _) b3 Z/ S, o
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 ^% z/ m2 ~; z
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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