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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:. r9 R( b1 i5 i: X
; ]% J! m9 X0 b. |/ f' A$ Git doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 f3 I/ L: a) [% p0 t
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : Y- v4 d7 O2 @1 Z H4 V
3 w. u9 K) X! u; e+ i, e- s9 `Let me just rewrite yours:
$ t/ Z7 t2 H4 D6 ?- t2 c! a. FIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me$ h \3 p$ y i) d% E7 v* D
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 u8 H0 Z: e& g2 [+ \6 N2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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! [8 O' H, k4 D3 Z- `- hThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. y. k: }. S; i, f
6 H4 Q$ [, N8 b) Q0 TThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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