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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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* V- ]% |5 b0 R5 Iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. n1 b4 `/ J$ z* neveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 O7 [/ F: S( d V: i+ e. h* u. B0 `0 F
Let me just rewrite yours:" |( c2 m. v8 f% g% ~( {4 t
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!7 ]2 K l, B' k" |1 m( T( N% i7 s
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 S2 X: O% ~& B$ r. c2 {6 s
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 L: S0 K" q) ~8 D' I+ H% s% W+ S
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ D# m, z2 t' u; g) y. n" c
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