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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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9 c0 `3 u* s: |1 ]$ |it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and , e/ H/ I4 A7 ?6 N! {: Y' J
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , q! A8 K% F6 O$ J5 Y0 @' u ~
# }6 y( _% {8 K& k. |7 ^6 YLet me just rewrite yours:
/ m$ p8 K- p( z) oIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!9 o0 W, ^* {1 {/ V) O- J
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! a: k# [0 j( Y5 O! e [/ e; ^9 t4 W
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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