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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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9 \) e, H# q. w* J7 hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( X) ]+ q2 G: Q; I: e
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. X& H$ @" k) N. @8 y: E! U/ @
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Let me just rewrite yours:
2 q6 O- Q3 ~# }* F* `) LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!: L1 c; v; \$ N5 g5 Z- p
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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* o( D7 U1 Y" c4 S' A: |There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 u5 c+ ~+ t, a* q7 a" _, P0 y
2 w, n( |% v. U6 ?* y8 H: T" S- {Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. q7 |/ A: w" V# O* H- H6 ~
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