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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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4 G: r/ d# N1 w4 Qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ a5 y0 U! o0 B" D9 zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . g6 T+ l' t v8 _4 `
" O# h. A0 o, ALet me just rewrite yours:
7 t$ q0 b* M( k$ \: UIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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* t8 w: g+ M3 H5 T. m6 P1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& G+ Z: M& }- ~# B* E& A7 `$ ?2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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5 D5 }. n8 C$ OThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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; r+ x8 j8 A, f+ r0 pThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% C0 ?4 ]; r$ `4 [2 `2 @3 c* i
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