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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:7 u. l8 {! H7 j) \+ Q8 y( R4 e' X
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
! m8 R: B" P# v. a) S( Beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 V3 j5 T* B5 f2 [' S" C' x5 B$ h- S7 U) V( P/ G
Let me just rewrite yours:
; k0 c4 m- Z0 ~! W; _- V) J B4 _% N$ ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 L, A: i5 w7 O* h; ?' s
1 x! }% G2 s5 s( h' b& `, \/ e/ _1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- ^! T5 U' z" y$ A
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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$ c! C7 \6 z' V9 w0 W5 H# Q2 P) bThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ | j( b5 T' T# M
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