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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 D! n, q' \& Y* I
# ~) h" \$ B) Xit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * v9 A: ]- T- k, K3 E
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % C1 ?5 C4 {2 p8 ]" ]- s+ Q# {
' s6 x& Y. Y1 D4 XLet me just rewrite yours:
! Q" J# Y0 l% A6 ]6 c3 V4 AIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me3 I2 H8 C# |' C y, ?7 Q9 s
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!- L* H- O$ z t1 s7 Z
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 c) ]" A. ~$ f/ G a
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.9 U+ M. s0 S# I. m: W& v
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ V$ A' d; X c. Y4 v J
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