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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 R& C, S, y9 J. l) N2 `
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
5 s3 b* \. ^$ o6 i' j8 keveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! b2 j4 T# y+ g* B+ y% u/ {' C* `% N8 p9 c/ Q, r
Let me just rewrite yours:
1 E8 R: A& p4 b: ^It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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( T+ k2 u t& i+ b' g, G- p- s1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ _/ B0 E! f; |: w" O, g
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ D" x7 P1 S8 M- q
, a. M$ e0 p2 [3 l' m$ W4 L2 \" aThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.8 N/ ~4 k: G/ |! [
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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