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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM: G& `/ ? f; t( I2 t
4 M7 @* v( _' y* g+ Cit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ J' i# @1 U- Y u
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # y9 G# Q! U1 A2 O" b( c5 E g* L& {! h6 P6 A" H/ u G
Let me just rewrite yours:6 O# i' b; B( m; p' D
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me. f. M; b4 C) }6 `
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 j: ^4 m# b0 k5 X* i$ _2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.$ f M9 r) `+ L; W
: O4 I6 T R. D( Q3 wThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.4 _4 R+ `; I. r" g8 `
+ w7 @; J! x- D$ I! y; k: UThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.0 W' d# }. i$ N- h& v, a( h
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