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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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' `' h) F; I( ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 J {/ b2 O- d7 A% _
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . V/ ]( U6 g# S1 F& p' Y. T: b
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Let me just rewrite yours:
' S c& f* ?& C' [! Z0 ^It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( i- g7 O7 [, F) a
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% K8 `: ]2 m) r: ?1 |. ]
8 G/ u! G$ M9 J. `; s8 v4 y! y# u2 [9 |There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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