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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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v3 Y* k+ z) h! S& A) `it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 V1 r. u, C" M7 J$ E2 K5 T) a+ Q: Q) M
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % q1 e; Z0 g! t/ g
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Let me just rewrite yours:
9 A, e# k" W/ ~' I' rIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me+ w: j1 w* ~# L& ^# g+ C* y
' {" c+ |* H" q1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 X! x) d# y) Z8 U5 ?7 n$ K
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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E6 A2 e) G4 M/ LThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.$ A$ B) ?4 y; L( f
2 ^6 P& T0 i. q: ~Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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