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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:6 E/ a% a& [2 v8 F* [
& x2 ]+ k1 j5 E: J7 hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
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Let me just rewrite yours:
8 V( s! y) f& \; p* }8 J; X6 m9 y' [) ZIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; J! g4 Z2 o0 B y. C! B' m
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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