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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
6 |, R( T; J$ w5 Oeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. + G- c0 l3 @/ O: h3 Y+ J4 g) ]! I4 I
Let me just rewrite yours:
: E% Z" c- }, x" I7 ]9 S5 IIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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: b: o/ Q) [9 @- N5 z1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!' X5 N1 L2 q7 V
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ @* f8 W) l* a
/ i' J0 k; }$ G; lThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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, m: i) z* i" P& z! S# V0 nThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 V* g5 l' \9 Y$ K; _% G, S7 H
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