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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:3 r$ ]* C2 |# H# w& Q* S
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% l7 f+ r/ O% ^% j- a; Teveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # C: E( x3 L/ q6 c2 q
8 h( p) p7 J3 P& d4 \7 oLet me just rewrite yours:
4 W" K8 O7 Z, |: u+ I! aIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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6 ?7 G6 L% Z" g; h1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; [, x2 z$ `- `
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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4 C! a( u' Y; S% q/ pThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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