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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 A9 W1 `/ D9 M+ `' ^9 `
j0 [2 i; H3 H0 n0 wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # U' x, k* ^. [
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 ~3 b9 C u+ Z( |5 `, R
. i( _4 p1 U; G4 g/ H$ m6 `+ i3 ^Let me just rewrite yours:
: q- m+ |4 L4 EIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!! C5 \4 U i- G% i- b& U* w2 [8 |9 y
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" P- p, C8 ?2 kThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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' N: K. L+ [9 q' k* p8 YThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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