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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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; l- S& I6 u( mit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' u8 g# h% v% x6 Z. a) Z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) D4 w9 t) g% P
' c1 n" ^6 `) nLet me just rewrite yours:
( |) d+ h9 O8 V! PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
/ R: _ q( b( l* _8 S$ w! v- A( B2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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( Y+ i' J. R1 T G# kThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.% C. A. D [6 h+ y _" ]- a
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