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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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4 R2 W# t0 Y& d; W2 t F& p! b) }4 c3 \4 nit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# w, v: G3 `! |: l) g3 B5 d- Veveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . ^" ^! W H7 M# l: \0 [
, F( o, {2 e( J3 r3 b1 \( mLet me just rewrite yours:! f* B+ @; Z& d0 ?# r$ {6 b% a
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me6 V- V ^0 I- U3 T$ M9 B* o7 c
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!) E' L4 ?3 @* q' @' ?2 }
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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J4 b0 g+ I: H, N/ `! B+ QThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.- l7 | z4 j/ o
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ G/ M( ~0 E. v
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