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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:7 _6 B; k, {0 O3 i# C
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and / _% N. D2 a( r! ~& e) O( G& U! `# a
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / _' B6 _9 r5 `
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Let me just rewrite yours:3 m3 q3 X9 S. W2 {' e$ n* C
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!0 @* E a1 Q( a: k. Q( E
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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& k. a, V* `6 m- u& P/ GThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 w* \7 p$ p* O8 n
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