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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& H! R7 B5 h$ u
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. X' r( m2 F6 Eeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 a. n8 x( u3 x: z! C, [1 _7 ?/ G' V
1 [: f' _( a0 E0 ^' ALet me just rewrite yours:
) I0 x" A- F) K/ f7 v5 S' ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me+ U5 i% M( r: z2 \5 O5 ^+ y9 O: f
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!& E- j* n# K' N: x: U) L- q
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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8 M, U9 A! { b8 Y6 [There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.7 ?# U! v* t1 {4 _7 M
9 x) z- e+ z! G7 z9 ^Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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