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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:* i3 @% y1 p. D! D1 a( S
3 O' x0 g* X( E5 O! V# Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' r) I. {8 R; a b* severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * r8 v; ]' ^2 u' s2 _$ j, O& l$ Q6 v# b9 Z& Y+ w3 j
Let me just rewrite yours:6 P; s8 H2 |* _
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 P9 l3 K4 ~( J! I+ E( c2 @$ [2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.# K9 U) Q3 L/ ]$ N
9 {4 \( [$ G/ w+ AThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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^. a# `1 a6 X X( _Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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