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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:5 F7 W+ F, c$ f9 V5 N
+ D7 M% N- j5 q% @* ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 a9 F. S9 j/ n
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " o3 q3 _! ~8 q, m/ O7 d$ _5 D
1 R2 k, t) _# S7 }Let me just rewrite yours:
; U- _% V% J; K h' I' oIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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* q( X5 c( D/ w e' |! t8 o1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
. M# d" q* d. `2 \* x2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% h, }. T" r: o. L% A# T: b
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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0 S, b9 J$ n R9 x, |4 nThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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