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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; f4 b# c2 v/ `( E9 D# o3 v
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
/ l4 g7 w9 I4 |3 Y& ueveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 g5 U$ p, F; Q3 \
9 Z1 C; }. c$ w5 V& p* }% RLet me just rewrite yours:
( p0 u$ r3 Z4 c4 o/ ~, XIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!1 v4 B. D7 f% I P! y6 ~
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; K0 G/ e0 S) p$ h# u
0 P6 Z, J6 M, \& XThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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! p0 X- p& I0 R% R/ CThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ r/ Y/ F5 y- x0 {6 x
. x6 [5 e" h6 x4 g! E$ \# DGretz. |
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