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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 \9 a. g: P4 e _5 G) E& l; p
% p% M) p# {+ a& Y" u Git doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* v% b$ I. q) z' P0 g! {everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 [$ b. v9 u, f( l; @5 e
* O! N: h3 T! z3 R( l* T! g: ZLet me just rewrite yours:
6 e7 U7 @0 w7 \3 n# q+ u, F' N" WIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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5 d" R+ d! f; Q A1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
8 R+ v6 S% N" m* H( ]2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 l/ ~ w. K0 G5 b0 `6 a
+ A* @: k. _( |2 P" O% iThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.$ a- [5 s1 T; ]( }9 p0 o
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