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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; R6 C3 D# c7 p. Q$ e5 B
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 9 {8 t9 k, o/ ~; B. h, h
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " a0 V0 f4 F/ f0 T& ]) T! m$ L. u9 t( R/ u2 j# U: c
Let me just rewrite yours:, V0 J7 [- `, q. @4 j
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me, c6 |6 y$ s# [
4 |9 t& Z0 w1 z7 Y6 d2 [' v( p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# a) z% Q1 o0 ?2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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7 `8 g3 I. R/ IThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 C2 \" N% A1 p) v
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