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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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% V. z8 D6 Z, O$ q, N, Sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
{/ i6 w1 C9 Beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 p( a7 D, U: F
3 V) q- O6 d; DLet me just rewrite yours:7 K* `% Q& ?7 J* q2 X, G
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ y* y! m6 N+ f6 a4 u% j
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
7 o* {- _- w' O; a6 f( p2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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! e; j, R0 F' w0 p6 K$ YThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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' y# i/ e8 ?5 D6 s% J: }1 ~8 ?Gretz. |
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