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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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2 q- _# X; v) _ s: r! [! Wit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& {5 X6 X J R# _9 r5 @3 Reveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 f8 R! g2 `" h/ L! ~! J. ]
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Let me just rewrite yours:) l6 l3 q1 b. g
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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5 P5 ]7 o9 V. ]1 ?* S9 ~1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!5 Z/ w2 f, B/ E( x) m( w* v1 H
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; F* `% b- n1 m. a# D) }% ?
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.4 u: o% W$ {' k5 R+ G; e! o: p, j
5 j0 b! s* u5 d2 BThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 A; t+ y. `$ z7 Z5 W3 Y3 b- ^8 }
6 q; b5 @& y: n* v& {0 f3 u4 a2 cGretz. |
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