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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:* }- O+ Y7 D0 n
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" T/ ?: t' S4 x- I7 ~$ E2 `( ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , E' b$ ^. R6 b3 R6 B0 t7 L+ I1 i( S0 a, |
Let me just rewrite yours:
* B$ |, \0 i) C: yIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me5 R& F( {/ x4 k
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!% ?) k# g6 D3 e
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) l: I5 w1 O* p; sThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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/ x5 X* v- P1 }5 o1 ?4 x/ i! l8 JThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it. X' u. d6 g N% k* `
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