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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- y {4 _; P# Y% T4 N) w* n
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ O' C& E$ T/ v1 Geveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . _, O8 b" B2 T) \9 @ V2 \, H
8 x! i& X( G7 cLet me just rewrite yours:
. A [* U! X% b3 N+ g# Z. r- r9 HIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# Q# o# S" O. ~8 a' s
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 x7 d5 O/ c1 w7 P2 h, _# M
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' J8 ^5 v4 |3 r+ m3 y6 l2 tThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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6 X0 _9 d* G% ?! e2 ^+ pThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: G& ^) F+ G6 l) K1 e. X/ F
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