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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 W$ b4 n' F2 {; T
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * E& \1 L4 `- i% C$ r
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 n+ Y' @1 ?9 T$ o# Y
4 o: p* q3 Z' K: ^0 DLet me just rewrite yours:
+ s: Q+ M, p5 S9 j' x, ?& PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# s6 _+ r+ [7 N) `+ t" { w
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. x( D$ N a. @( c" `. B
/ p. Y; D1 q0 S. v7 E* [: ^There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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