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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:2 {" W0 _. Y/ C0 S, y% S
3 ], r; x4 ], [% {it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and % o! {" P1 r3 }3 x7 E
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 ^. m* B! j6 Q+ i
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Let me just rewrite yours:
+ h: J& v, L, V6 sIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ Z- b3 _) f3 F U0 p% z% B
) o* I' ?& o* R" f' M W1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' ]: f7 l, T/ {2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.' ^# t5 k- S+ {, _8 O
: Q" v6 c h+ W* q, CThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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