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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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" j3 S$ I' M$ _it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - D2 n# t' S7 j8 p0 C. h
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & d" G8 V: Q6 H' I# H' k0 U1 c3 I8 X0 N7 G* ?6 N! s& m
Let me just rewrite yours:2 h# }5 |& C8 {4 I0 v
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!# Q" n# t5 @4 v3 M) s
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 l6 C) z; r3 X4 q: H( J& y
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 m& o1 i1 L7 Q8 j! p+ V
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