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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 r6 d( d0 M- ?, O( peveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; G5 s; u: y/ B* |% z& @ r+ m6 g% D8 \
/ X2 B/ P3 F* ^( U& s' p2 i2 y1 wLet me just rewrite yours:
, ], o6 y( w7 p9 w/ H; r- k3 w0 XIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ j- B# V9 Z5 W- b k" K, q
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la. ~3 P' Z& \ x. _4 x* b6 L
! a I" Q2 T1 R3 f$ h. _0 ~There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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\ i+ G; h5 F& J4 m: ]Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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