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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:9 s+ q% G* ?3 O, `' ]
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
: H, S! `) B4 L! s+ t; D! Zeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 T, n$ ]. B7 K% C! O y
* Y; f& O7 m- C# zLet me just rewrite yours:
* I1 O: \+ ^8 T! M" ]. Y! |4 TIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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; c, O% K# s5 W4 O1 l& H# G1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!6 u* o% V6 s8 y1 \; X) e% d# t* I
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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" v( H* G& B8 e5 oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." \- ~7 O, _1 c. l
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