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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
4 q, s; D1 D0 ]& beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; X* W# z5 E% Q% T- x
! h! f& q3 l) T K1 n7 NLet me just rewrite yours:' ?1 K1 ?* P6 `( Q: k2 d( f
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
, ~" k4 P. A% a) ^" b# G5 F2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.9 V; i; \7 o6 X
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* ^/ f4 K- A6 s7 B" b! F
6 c* P$ i- e0 O& Z% g5 ]3 `Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ ]3 C# Q" o: h4 y ~1 D7 f# A
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