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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# s; e, b+ s1 o: i& }# bit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 3 C p _% Z8 j, ?! O7 ~
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ) {# j$ O5 J3 `8 s) C2 a
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Let me just rewrite yours:$ h. D7 E! b0 G
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" z' {1 `- ~! D4 B0 w
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. ~3 {, P8 v. p* E. O j0 ~
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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% J' e5 u G' D1 w% N6 }/ q% ~Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- A+ x' ~. d, b4 B5 B2 ~
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