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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:, b9 m1 k% R0 y( ~( |0 c; |0 R* m
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
6 h- k8 T' }- z D) i2 yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. I. C% _5 w* z3 |$ b. A
3 u; I# q) F7 c+ g5 JLet me just rewrite yours:2 e1 @8 p8 Q4 ~2 D: j7 D
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ ^# {4 b n* F% T8 t9 @6 g
+ @! k, k- O# s( ] I7 R% ?1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ T2 A4 O5 c8 ]6 i
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 { r- L A8 C( O* g
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