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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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6 Z& ^5 O" ~) b- |# Jit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
) ?# K* {: i! }6 @. ?; I: `( h% ~everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 [! h/ a: z# y6 B; _
; ^- c) x8 z, U- m2 ^# [Let me just rewrite yours:
. G! K9 C; x- oIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 B+ C: C4 t- H# W# K) g. d+ d( a
/ P! K7 H7 y4 x, B$ O' R1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
1 P8 N7 I- U. |0 U6 e3 ~" w7 ~2 B" z2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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& ]7 l- I% r$ C0 ?, U5 BThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.& I1 ?: \! y: d4 m0 Z& w
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.4 L5 o1 t1 f' q1 v- h8 v
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