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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
* }5 y1 C: K7 `everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " T6 v T) x! ~9 a/ M
" H+ m1 j1 i( B+ t: |4 PLet me just rewrite yours:
5 d( { y+ K6 f/ G. fIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!0 Z( i( c: ?' Y9 E' Q& F1 H) e
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.& |- c" O5 e1 V, @, Y; w# e7 n
4 f/ ]$ N0 J7 i1 m9 E# z5 B; _4 lThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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6 ]8 ~: P* m( i7 wThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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