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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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* `0 M% Q' l: |9 e" p/ kit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # a; h& b P* ]& J N' k$ o0 O1 M
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / f, \' W( k8 B! D& P
& q. g$ X$ F4 e7 HLet me just rewrite yours:
. |0 |8 f& O6 o4 h X& h, Z8 XIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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4 w2 e5 i* `9 D! P: b8 D5 p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
f3 T3 T u) [" m2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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1 l: D; S" i; XThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 m# F( F( b- r5 j
0 a( v% B9 L0 v3 W8 IThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ z; {( ~4 c" p& Q) ]
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