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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:& C/ {9 p( [$ A. H! P
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* e+ W. i5 S& p, ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 P* L9 t: o/ i: M; d h
- J4 L1 d9 P% U* |/ iLet me just rewrite yours:
9 _% N+ {. i. L+ z9 cIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- _* [: g M" E" A4 C# Q8 o8 s) ~' e2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.) a3 K. s7 p5 f$ |
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