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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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: G5 z4 u) T* @/ N; A( E8 Q1 ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ' W1 e5 K+ X. p) `
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. - Z$ n3 o! z! A7 \( C8 R9 \% i+ N) J5 n; b3 L8 H+ v1 p
Let me just rewrite yours:! G# c+ h& e& [0 c6 ]
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me" a, o* _, Q. ]7 ~" e% t! P
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!0 r2 H. K! k: i6 r+ R* D
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.7 e/ F. t; Z1 i: V
' H7 t+ u+ x- ?, x1 i# yThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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: ?; s! G8 V! I" A2 {3 RThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.# b+ y. p+ l3 u/ l
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