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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and * C- v6 e( t3 Z: i! }7 V: @- f
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! m5 b* Y; Y- O+ W e6 ?; O
; } S* V+ j( c( D' WLet me just rewrite yours:
# k% y/ S6 \* h9 ^It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!; O+ x* T. q5 a3 h9 s
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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; T! A7 b! Q- @" q3 _There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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3 r2 ~) \, r5 J3 \Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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6 \/ p% o# ~, ~" x- H1 AGretz. |
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