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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:- g- K2 V" w, W1 X: _
& Q& X& g& w/ D, sit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 l, `+ \, ~! C
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : Q5 `; v4 E# d* J- T" J9 \" v1 B, J+ T
Let me just rewrite yours:
' h! L* l! M1 }7 s6 EIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me* ?1 ~0 d* M! u
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 ]. [. M2 K) h7 |& a
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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- m9 v0 i; x X2 dThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% C& P3 ]; w; O- j" x7 w9 [" Y
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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