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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:. K" u7 J$ j9 n0 p" B" J8 g3 J; A
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
8 B5 L6 V5 L6 t ^; a, W: }everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , M* _- w6 x) O
2 m( r' e8 V5 R4 m. ^Let me just rewrite yours:
( k: | `4 e: ~. S/ \' I* SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me2 p3 n- [& r* p0 p
l& b3 a# ^0 [3 h+ v5 g4 x# x1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
6 ^) B* d9 A# G. O2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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% q5 D. B8 i1 S# b9 V8 {7 c+ fThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. u. A( B) r& {/ H$ _
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.2 ]) `; v# G8 E5 @4 Z+ {
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