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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
3 c- ?) _+ a/ Qeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . |- }9 H. Q' U: Q: Z( W3 F( c
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Let me just rewrite yours:
, r; z4 B, Z' M* U- |' Y* RIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me4 y* W) o5 c1 C# V
* Z; q& I# Q' R9 U5 |. t7 [* i1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!5 m! e @3 i7 w: C% M
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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! {6 S- }6 K8 x! y z+ Z0 u7 h% WThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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q& d! M0 H! ~1 TThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.7 ~% N% `# t+ u
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