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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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: g6 x u) m7 Yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 o$ V# N. s; W, e7 y# X; [' c4 X
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / v' J: F1 X0 a5 V, Z
0 g |. [7 P+ nLet me just rewrite yours:
6 R, N" P. Y3 K1 V. R. ?, OIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me6 c* d9 H# G/ v" Z* N* g4 e$ ]
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!3 i- Y1 M/ l- b1 i
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.4 v/ {% y2 q+ ^) x& C) g# J
) u1 n, T9 [7 O2 L4 eThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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7 @; {* H; W$ s3 \6 l! w- ZThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.+ Z1 U/ B; [) {2 h
% z' H3 ?5 z, o- ?2 ]3 bGretz. |
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