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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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6 l9 a1 w: L* e* {; Pit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and $ ?, C1 d; O, \1 B8 ]3 P9 z# x: j+ s
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 p# l3 |2 W% p+ {. h& u1 y' m
1 B0 L* r% Q. c2 s7 r! Q* ^Let me just rewrite yours:
; X, Z+ M$ x$ K2 u; t1 i7 q, PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 f Y! X& P8 O9 b6 i2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* e. B0 T3 Q! W1 c( `4 ?1 J
; K e1 G+ A' u3 ZThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.. }% j# m- {1 E/ Y
+ `* s% D! V4 C% u. @$ H3 UThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ A: h5 O- M }( v' U8 N; B* M/ |
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