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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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8 P8 [) U2 q( V8 Yit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 E) @/ {) |5 Y: M0 m
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % R0 h6 q+ o$ u/ H8 Q5 R9 X/ y
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Let me just rewrite yours:
6 o% c& R0 c5 a9 N8 z' T$ qIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- {. @5 }% k4 @
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' m8 G0 C5 s( U' d2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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& i0 U8 C3 o8 @& rThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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