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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 q7 n# B: Y* J2 h- v: Keveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ! p2 }2 C5 t1 a# {" o1 M [
7 h: |3 r4 U. V* \5 H: qLet me just rewrite yours:
, u, s3 ]7 N* Y9 t& F5 ?% a& c, VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! }0 F; b. h% S* {1 s5 H3 C2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.* Q8 E; [ ~0 O7 x7 C. c
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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* N! q4 d- D K+ LThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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