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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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0 L& x: {4 V( D3 Qit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 7 {: R7 S! R2 S- N2 b7 v- t
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # j& H8 @1 U7 u2 q6 W1 D$ a0 m7 A4 L4 L# N
Let me just rewrite yours:
% ~' d# W- X2 A! x/ l" e% wIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!' L+ c. {8 G! z5 o: N) P) I
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.' e' }7 c& _- f/ T* z
; {, [$ i. \5 u- k: N3 XThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.0 L7 L5 T" A( V4 P! i7 `
! ?' L2 \4 S' P" M8 V0 }Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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