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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; x) r! |+ {* A
9 x4 H, n6 r3 {it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 1 [: w1 U5 M- q: \: s1 U" Q
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. % ?/ J* s/ r3 l6 e
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Let me just rewrite yours:
! T4 B: w6 W' {7 W8 L: V7 u1 m3 dIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me- a' }5 A6 x$ s, _: B- l
" s' C9 T3 }; j1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 l. a. d4 _. `0 o2 x0 v0 r- `/ B; P
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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7 o r. ?' t6 k& a. g/ i; V; ?. t f1 EThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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9 w5 _! d$ e% i* b' d9 fThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.* S. s \# v% y9 _9 @! O
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