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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 0 i# c2 r0 M% x0 O9 l* w1 A. O
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 |) Y* c2 K. k; ?& m2 C
" ^! j9 ^0 g( f: U5 f( b0 B1 H' \Let me just rewrite yours:
2 O" j: {: ~) \6 v4 U$ `2 VIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; B8 q# r7 U% o2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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. e: k# j% o2 f8 G0 B2 C* B9 H' ^There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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