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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# @# g7 [% y6 O" ?- g' v6 K4 H
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
2 k8 Q% d# K) E8 I8 P. Severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " u, y9 Q6 a- U3 F! n! }
: M5 [% Y8 L5 X7 vLet me just rewrite yours:
! Z9 c2 j: V$ o# v; n! P2 G2 PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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V% f3 u2 u" }" l. |8 S: p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# U. z' v, A1 m1 N& G7 {; ~* P2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% S% Q0 ]) d1 J L' z4 i, N
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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