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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:. I5 [* h+ f$ b r/ z" ]
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ~7 N' p$ Y4 ~! N8 g& z
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 v' C' |+ C1 O, v" O0 I0 P3 D6 Y# i) q1 z& ?( w% M
Let me just rewrite yours:
8 i# { A; X+ }" m bIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 V; `. R8 n8 ^" Z. g5 E
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
J; M4 D, R$ `6 B5 Z2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.0 t6 g7 U6 X( Q. P1 s1 l, L
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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