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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:. O j/ ^! I7 z. e* n
8 N7 ]1 H' u) Xit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
) Q) ^4 t/ d1 \ I5 t3 T8 Veveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 X( [1 s2 S2 w+ i' @; q8 }# [. C( Q. Q. ?! F( E+ x; S
Let me just rewrite yours:
8 y2 t* \% P/ {7 ~8 p6 PIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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" j$ p- X3 u: r3 I, A5 f0 s1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% O5 U' s, R% H# S2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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3 \* k. u2 y7 ]* oThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.5 i& W5 T* N1 T" m( k
4 m" [9 I( F/ |3 J, AGretz. |
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