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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:/ B7 n( N5 S& E( k' a
8 X6 Y% D. t! h6 p3 G9 iit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
$ E J2 L: [7 T- P2 i+ ]everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # m7 R+ w& t' q" }* W) t2 j& u8 o: x0 o; Y Z/ P
Let me just rewrite yours:
( k4 N) p, }) r# h1 nIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me( m) |; Q$ t4 S8 E. Y* A, Y
& f5 Z; \: U, b+ k2 z1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
: Z! Y5 m$ \# S, i# P2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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8 F' h# Q! R8 ]" f- u1 o! B! |Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.6 W6 {6 H: ~5 |) @
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