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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
' y8 n& V4 q: J6 S- x8 O- heveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " `! E; ^- @2 k
% U0 P& b# I4 F+ Q! \0 vLet me just rewrite yours:
1 d3 t# b+ M6 p0 R! q$ mIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: m5 Z2 U$ i6 d! K% J
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
/ q% h e, l+ e- i/ N2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.1 q( E8 H* b8 x; Q0 l6 j7 l
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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