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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 {" ~' B3 ?) e! E
7 j7 s- f5 [' ~' W, `/ [it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
& S( j" q7 b0 y8 A; _6 @everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & C( h, S2 L0 p' ?' j; |5 P4 D. w
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Let me just rewrite yours:. B+ _ c$ L2 D0 H
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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$ d n5 }! g9 Y2 d" K' V1 I1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!( {, G+ W) m9 g
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ d& X9 L6 S6 W3 I' W& J# k8 B) u. r/ {- }
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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2 s/ v* ^( q' a5 tThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it./ \/ x) a5 v3 n7 k- L
% v8 a# D/ K' V$ DGretz. |
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