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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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* A0 g q/ `2 q5 q- J' b: E, Hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
7 _0 I$ T; G% J" U* beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 j( ` E, {- V! Y4 ?- ]
2 r) J! h" N8 ^: j. i ~Let me just rewrite yours:
/ ~8 N6 p+ A' C& h8 SIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
4 s5 c+ G/ c2 n8 w# L6 r# g* M' K2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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