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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:3 u' E: C! H) U
/ r6 W# i) ~/ e& o- y4 fit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. p# c4 J' i( Teveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 3 ~0 m2 G' k! I6 J z9 g6 h+ ~3 u$ x% Z
Let me just rewrite yours:4 @& s- M2 M6 B7 J) {5 v
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
5 M' Q; e" v! D# p1 }# `' `2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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) K; c8 ]2 @! WThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 ]! ?# L' ^$ Q& G1 @4 U
) l! l: `' X4 q! sThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.3 A: e, g, i! X) i4 f
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