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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:4 P/ S" W7 Q& D. c$ `7 V8 s D% c# \
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ O0 n; U2 ]- g( U1 q/ E4 T: Severyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ( [( B: x/ }- B e6 J. n& X/ a
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Let me just rewrite yours:
* q0 y; T& `8 {: n. G3 xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' U$ }+ h" q- [) A* w2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ i) _# O9 ?( I! f7 m O. V! f9 A
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.* c7 t/ m8 \( E
; ?# e/ `6 `4 i& \# A/ s, G HThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.1 D, w ^. J. j' K2 \* g$ C& Z* d3 p
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