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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# d6 }: c( O9 lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 2 s+ k3 {% `! I2 q
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 8 o; M$ }+ E( n9 d. B
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Let me just rewrite yours:
% j( Z( s. [$ ~6 s2 z- |, X- K* {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me% ]7 W p$ Z6 y9 y% b: m/ t
0 R. V/ T4 _4 ]3 E2 w1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& e; B1 F, g7 |2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.2 N: ^& t# b# o
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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/ l" b; x5 v+ R' b/ a7 g3 g+ HThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- B; C' c1 o' c: p, J) |- F, L
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