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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ n6 F/ v, L$ t7 e% \everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 0 E9 A B+ I8 c" J) L# A7 }) O6 }
Let me just rewrite yours:
6 C2 X5 s3 b4 R7 JIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me# @7 c! n- B: r) U4 B4 t) \
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
! C7 A& {: {# |! [0 N; ?2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.5 K. c9 P( L. p" k, v [8 t! w4 E
; ~8 `6 F" o( y- HThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; L, p) _4 _! `' X9 Q- q+ V7 r1 y
9 s0 s' X8 q& _$ I% tThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.9 Z% Z' ~ `; Y' [/ \
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