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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
6 Y: V+ ?, @5 E* _' q6 Ueveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 c- c8 ]. f& M; [ @2 [
/ S& U& N- _& H8 jLet me just rewrite yours:
+ C% W7 N% G* P! P: d) s9 }$ MIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& a6 o7 a: }4 y2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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' \- n; j! E) U, \There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.6 M2 l5 g0 h, h6 L. S- g0 ]6 X
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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