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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
# H; `. h( r& F6 [; Xeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " Y3 G k% w5 a2 V$ `* p( E& ]8 H2 `4 Y9 R4 f
Let me just rewrite yours:
6 d2 @7 ~! m+ ]* {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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8 Q- J* U @" |2 l' ]1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
* m4 T) V6 T& g$ v& c+ F; q2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.! G y/ A5 K0 f% K
" H6 A6 d# V- qThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% ?1 E' J+ N n; _- T+ l& R
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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