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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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( G! W# |8 M. F0 W. Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 _3 ?- }$ P& J5 I6 u* B+ Ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; ^& j- o( R! c9 v' `8 p& _% f& H- u ]$ b0 Z
Let me just rewrite yours:
' f& e0 R$ E) \" a( d( y$ q, LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me! X; A. J( y* J
( M! {7 w" R- k5 p, k, p1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
( K% C. D k+ G2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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+ K7 {4 \8 a0 k7 DThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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9 \& e6 G+ d6 c. [' ^Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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