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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
0 L3 A: M. I( u' B% d4 l* _everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. : N9 Z9 k+ W- C: p3 R8 L- x
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Let me just rewrite yours:
' F4 O+ b0 N" e. u/ GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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O9 L9 h3 H7 s4 K1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
o1 P" m, |! D3 Q0 b% d2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.( C! ~. P4 U/ [, M
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# t7 b- E, E2 a$ M
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it." u) M! }5 [1 P" s
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