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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
4 n" [9 n' v2 _8 b2 l, q4 deveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. , t- q/ v) m( b2 T9 [4 ?
$ ^( M" @: E. q( n j+ Q6 MLet me just rewrite yours:9 T+ |9 {3 B. ]! {, r9 x: a
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me: L1 w% h: u, c3 ~+ V
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
3 Y! c( y: f/ Z( s2 A. J5 b0 `2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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- j% {6 Y7 E5 U+ b( gThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow." p* ~2 u- [/ ?6 {' d% C+ I6 M7 i
0 V# A: a% y9 V* D; o4 zThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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