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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:0 f- F; X' m" l7 X0 F0 X4 G1 z+ ~
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ( F6 _) k! a. f4 l
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # Z( F, r7 ~7 ^* v8 o% Q
! d5 C4 z' g4 z5 d" @& b9 y+ |! V' TLet me just rewrite yours:$ X1 K h" I7 y4 A
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me4 ~2 [. g3 M. H. q7 Q7 `, t
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. S) \) C# D) o4 F% w; Z7 x
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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: d+ b |8 u4 hThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! d2 e5 F5 [7 ^2 M) O7 E
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.' h: D" {: n2 J: c* y, T
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