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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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/ C( P7 C6 ~$ S# l' U: u2 @4 ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
% b% a& S: }3 b) X7 \, Feveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 g% Q+ x! H/ ^2 R! f7 a: P7 F; W2 Z
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Let me just rewrite yours:9 Y& P. a" R8 p( t
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!8 |- @/ y( w! D3 k6 R* V2 \( s& j
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.; p* L' k5 e( M/ [
4 E8 H. y8 r8 jThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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4 w' \8 c3 u; h, XThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. e2 u0 A+ F, c8 m- z" J% F' e9 ?
5 B% [! o& d. m. JGretz. |
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