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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:# C W& f- S8 _1 |, p; B# A& s& z
1 b) s2 U! { a3 }: v+ k( O/ ^it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - P/ f) z7 [5 X; c- q
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 9 b. d y, n: E
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Let me just rewrite yours:
( B" Z6 G! m' w8 L" M9 N- m9 GIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me0 [ U: r. M" p4 ?! o
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
% c% |7 j7 G4 o% u5 u' i2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.% c4 \2 j, l& p7 S0 v2 H
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.! B0 [8 O: A" V- ?2 f1 I6 D: r) e
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( o o) H0 n# V- r; S* ?* l
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