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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:; p9 V b4 O" a
! T. C2 T) u3 D( oit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
4 D; X2 P# ~9 u C, ieveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. & h5 {) ^) t! I9 n( B7 o. |7 M. s& R/ W* d+ `6 @$ B$ O- j% @
Let me just rewrite yours:% |; A1 `* p6 u" r. G: u
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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6 a/ D/ F5 A7 E: O. t5 ^% M1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!. H$ ], x4 P$ i' l6 x
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la./ p. g0 O9 D" X
: Y) b, ~ E( o3 eThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.( F+ B0 a* T8 k: P9 T8 ?5 y5 ^
- Q b& ]& M" @4 F, L6 Y) SThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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