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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and - ]1 Z% @$ }: ]3 Q! J4 v2 P
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 6 k7 F4 h( g ~6 u* y
" d- k9 h9 ?+ x: N8 DLet me just rewrite yours:
3 p% O5 g/ d% q3 l" w- Q4 LIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
1 q, ]7 B9 A7 j2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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3 K. k$ r8 R6 G/ dThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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