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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:" H; |4 y* b9 f! r- m' }5 [
( s8 {% u: Z% U+ _5 b/ Y' Xit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 8 }$ \( ~" d& z7 d' L
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 ?( Q, b c, ?1 O3 ^( i- E/ j9 E+ k7 U) }0 Y3 g5 g9 U, B
Let me just rewrite yours:- ]& @" ]+ S E% _
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me/ ]# ^2 X" I) R* Y$ O/ E1 ?
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!! g* G! n2 j0 l# @% `! v5 [
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la., N3 g7 a) G) u% |* N0 [- F
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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