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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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/ h7 I; U' D/ q; rit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
+ r! U) u7 n, Z9 E: G+ q" @8 @) S, Jeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. . Q. ?% n" I6 C& C9 o) e% U7 x: y! o2 E0 K" p6 [
Let me just rewrite yours:2 K1 p) \1 ~1 r# C
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!/ q2 Q) h4 U1 P& r, H/ D
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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6 l. ~; ]6 y2 oThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.: n4 E) e8 E5 D5 ^* z' d8 L8 F
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