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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM: Z' k2 W) a, b! W
3 A3 y$ P6 n. ?6 Tit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
. v1 j# M. C. S9 ~* g# v }7 Yeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 1 k, ?, h+ R' y* J7 c
4 c* O8 p0 O+ |" L: V* m& K8 CLet me just rewrite yours:
2 t) d: R# s/ J8 l" w* YIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
& x+ k; @( T+ ?. T+ C7 g2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.9 F8 u# U' ^+ r2 w
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.) a5 w/ [ n7 @+ c+ X. r% ~
5 x0 _" A: B% u& l/ D2 LGretz. |
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