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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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# G- g. A8 k& Q0 @0 |! g& q' uit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
9 X, t5 Q; _! o7 d4 j; {everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 7 c6 i% w5 K) m0 s- L: c3 ]# P. O9 _' l4 ]. y3 e$ e
Let me just rewrite yours:
# C0 t8 s: `3 ?. M' l9 ~It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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# b( C4 [6 ]5 V" s1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
- @8 q) Y! h6 A8 L1 ]( w, C( q2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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. v+ Q! J" N9 C+ }( o" ZThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.; z1 {* f+ C. B1 x/ r
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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