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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:3 i" o# U3 C1 y( K
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and ) K! e1 Z q5 J6 Y' w1 E, B
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. ; H+ h* }2 o6 v! I6 ?% x7 K1 n
- L/ ]$ U7 n5 M8 eLet me just rewrite yours:
; n! b2 y; J! t' X; P, N3 @3 M: \It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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* `4 P9 Y" g1 r) m# y8 \" i1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!! O! k' S6 `6 r$ Y
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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: Z1 e$ s% N# ^* R0 ?3 L1 WThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.1 F+ }8 D5 p/ }2 x* y9 L r+ q
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Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( d2 N6 S- k6 u6 N- Y
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