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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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! J P$ q# R# r8 ?6 Vit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and 6 ~5 D: F; g9 }
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. * Y2 N; T$ R) ~7 d9 y0 h) {9 u
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Let me just rewrite yours:
# W) t ?4 H5 v# \5 xIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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+ g) F" [+ m( E5 O: |, S1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!* W, {) C' B" \7 k/ b4 R
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.% v% f6 t8 \5 u; r# a \, w
8 u6 O( ]' s8 y# p' g7 MThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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