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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
" K. o z+ Y$ z& H4 a7 m( Oeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. " A; q) k2 i& ^; t) L
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Let me just rewrite yours:
8 Y$ H) G- q; T9 D+ sIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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$ }7 t! @6 Z" f, j1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
; M. d4 v" G' Q# T" v& }* ]( p3 [) B1 X2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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# a4 k5 ~9 {# _0 f% fThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.2 P9 ?8 J4 i' n; A
4 _& m2 U1 V, O5 [: H% e" N( M) ]2 ?Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.. o4 G( \; D! J: }/ v. O
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