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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:. n" h! O* R! f9 K/ H- A+ A
$ J" A2 t ?7 lit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and + l( i0 H4 L' t+ H
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / z* k% K0 K7 ^
) O' P& ]# _) N1 H4 g* Q" A0 QLet me just rewrite yours:
% S8 {% P$ N; W0 l+ o, V7 _: |It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me8 M& v! v; h* i/ W6 E/ a
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!& o, \( [* f- p1 x+ Q2 n7 w; w
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow. z8 X: F9 l( L6 c2 x! L* S0 I3 d8 Q+ o
K4 e( r. Y( O: mThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- [! M- ^) W- a. f
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