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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:9 t, S3 f# a. e" t' C
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
, Q, D) ~* f; k, xeveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. # k$ q7 V9 E& R9 ?' Q4 L% _
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Let me just rewrite yours:+ e8 W: Q6 k p4 }$ x& H4 Z* d. [! ~$ l
It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me% ^* t. C9 D0 R
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
' R" g# T+ Y/ j6 t$ l' H' Z) c `2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la." k/ ~, c) m5 e5 W0 g, j
% H3 Z+ C+ r9 H$ ]% X" CThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.# l9 y U+ ~+ J# A
& y9 N3 h$ a4 F, }/ yThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.
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