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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:: {$ i1 N! X1 h$ B+ g
# B& y* U, y* D. hit doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and # f/ J; M. n+ z5 O3 r0 }& L
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 2 D" l5 D# O4 Z* W/ ^8 Z
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Let me just rewrite yours:
5 d. q/ C/ q1 T# a% {It doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
t3 M( \- X. h/ x4 D3 l i o8 \- w2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.- t/ Q; _8 n% N! T7 y2 m
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There are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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/ [* |. s3 A0 s4 m; | EThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.- H0 w+ K0 B# j6 i. j& M
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