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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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: @) f+ y, {: G: Git doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and % T' X! y+ Q( d/ H* s
everyone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. / L0 T. R! t' w p8 [$ l7 Y, E! X& \* ^( T/ X: E8 ~; K% C
Let me just rewrite yours:
/ S) X8 ^3 D- M5 E7 C5 DIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!+ B& V$ Y" I G
2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.
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8 h% m& I5 E8 _" g# bThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.4 W/ I' ]1 E: r: }: Z
4 M$ c+ N4 Q/ s% M6 K! E0 P7 q. }Think about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.& k+ i! c( n# _( e: r2 ` v- b) G
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