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發表於 2005-6-10 04:33 AM
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Originally posted by 本篤十六世 at 2005-6-10 04:19 AM:
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it doesn't matter,just chat here,I am a very kind gentleman and
- \& T5 L6 `% b4 |5 s4 Beveryone like me,that's why other moderators are jealous of me. 4 L1 E- l" E. r
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Let me just rewrite yours:
, H" J5 c8 ^3 W3 pIt doesn't matter. Please feel free to chat here. I am a very kind person and everyone likes me. That's why other moderators are jealous of me' o9 d9 `9 J. e8 Q3 D6 H
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1. Don't use "I" to start the sentence all the time...it gives people a childish image of you. Using "I" also means you're always writing in subjective mood...a 'no-no' for serious academic writing!
# m; r- v, }/ j; C( Q* s) h! V# @4 [5 b2. I noticed you've used the works 'like', 'hate', 'popular' and 'kind' a lot. Overusage makes you look dumb...go to theasaurus and get some new words la.6 t7 d1 p N0 R1 {
0 s r, G7 Y, [. r( U% J" N6 EThere are lots of smart guys here....some doing their Ph.D.s and others are doctors....if you mellow a bit it would help your popularity to grow.
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/ { S. y# X% W+ t9 w0 F iThink about what I have to say la....I know it hurts when you read it.( @5 ]1 v, K( V; C
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